Rajineru, The beast of the sky (Champion Concept)

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Disclaimer: I'm still working on the concept, please give advice where you can :)!

A general Idea of the champion's appearance:

http://orig03.deviantart.net/bf29/f/2016/018/3/f/image_by_roninlightningx-d9oidhd.jpg

http://orig03.deviantart.net/f211/f/2016/026/1/b/image_by_roninlightningx-d9ph5qx.jpg

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About the champion

The champion is a light hearted and joyous man. He loves to journey the world and loves having fun. He loves to prank people and loves to steal food out of people's windows. He wields a staff given to him by his master who was killed many years ago. It is the last remaining reminder he has of his master. As light hearted and joyous as he is, do not touch his staff! He will become enraged and do whatever it takes to retrieve it. He was born with power over lightning. He loves to fight for fun and test the martial arts his master taught him. He has come to league to test his skills.

A little lore for fun

The smell of gunpowder started to fill my lunges, only hindered by the salt eating away at the nostrils. Keeping your wit about you became near impossible as waves crashed against the bow, casting away any hope of keeping upright. Black clouds filled the horizon with rain pelting you like piercing blades. From the distance we could make out the oncoming ship as it began to poise its cannons to our starboard. We had little time to take action, our only chance was to blow their vessel before they sank ours. Our captain, a spineless sea dog who had lost his nerve, had fallen upon his knees and began to beg for mercy. A weak man, a coward, no longer fit to lead us. With a crack from the barrel, he had his mercy. "Lower the mast" I shouted to the uneasy green gilled recruits as I assumed command. Each breath was hard, every word spoken filled with the bitter taste of ash upon the tongue. No one gave the former another look as the unforgiving sea washed his body off to an unceremonious burial. Behind us a fleet bearing the black flag pursed the ship. The men and I knew of what awaited us, but we would not meet Davy Jones without the fight! “Launch everything we have at ‘er lads” I yelled out furiously. Cannon balls rained upon the intruding ship, blasting gaping holes and tearing down their mast, ending their chase of us. We had taken one down, but had no time for pleasantries as the fleet was closing in upon us. As we made haste, our eyes laid upon a horrific site. Out of the fog came what we could only assume to be lead ship of the enemy fleet. Before we could do anything, it rammed our port side. We were sent flying while their crew quickly climbed aboard and surrounded the few men remaining. They pinned us down and placed a pistol to each of our temples.

“I see Denason finally earned his place among the bottom feeders” Said a tall shadow making its way on to the ship. “Blizare, you finally tookst yer place as commander. found yer spine did ye? I’m impressed.” He continued. “Mortigous, Sop this, ye know th' code o' old! Ye know th' consequences!” I shouted at him. “Code?” He said mockingly, “My dear man, thar be nay honour among buccanneers. Thieves an' scallywags be havin' nay code, that be why we be buccanneers an' nay navy officers.” he said with a laugh. “Now, 'ere be havin' ye hidden th' chest? Make this easy on all o' us. Ye be havin' barely enough men t' run this ship, ye be havin' nay hope t' hold on t' if we decide t' drop ye in th' water.”. “The chest be long gone. We dropped 't into th' sea as soon as we saw yer fleet.” I replied angrily. “Do ye..take me a fool?” he said softly as he inched close to my face. “We both know ye would nerehave th' cannon balls t' go against th' alliance. Nay, not ye. Ye be havin' kept 't close t' ye. Lads, turn this heap upside down if ye be havin' t', find me that chest!” He shouted joyously.

It wasn’t long until his men came back, four of them carrying the chest. It was carved out of mahogany and embellished with pure blue gold. “Open 't lads. We will be havin' our reward now!” Mortigous shouted. “Mortigous, I beg ye dont! If ye open 't, he will come!” I said in a panic.”Did ye hear that lads. Th' boogy man will come get us if we open it.” he said laughing, “Listen here Blizare, we be havin' seen th' world high an' low. We be havin' seen plenty o' monsters on our way too. We don’t fear some old legend, now do we lads?”. “Nay Captain Mortigous!” his crew shouted back in a roar of excitement. I stood there in silence, fearing what was held inside. It was our charge to hold and protect the box from anyone who would seek it. The four men dropped the box. Mortigous walked over and blew off the chains that held the box shut. He flung the box open without a second thought. “You be seein' lads, thar be nothin' t' fear. This sea pup o'er here be yellow from seasickness be all. Be havin' a eyeball at this!” Out from the chest came a large pure blue gold staff.

Before another word was spoken, a white flash filled my vision and blinded me. It was followed by an unearthly blast. I could only make it out to be lightning having hit the ship. As my vision returned I heard an unknown voice behind me, “Seems you have something of mine there”. I could not make out the figure, but his voice was pleasant and eased me. “And who be ye?” Mortigous said in a shallow voice. “I am the owner of that box. I heard it cry out for me as you opened it. I have missed my friend that you hold there very dearly. May I have it back?”. “Your matey? Hahaha lads this nut thinks this stick be his matey. Be off wi' ye lad before we throw ye overboard.” Mortigous replied. “Very well” Said the voice a bit bitter. My vision faded again and the world filled once again with a white overwhelming light. I squatted there, but no longer felt the pressure of the men holding us down. As my vision returned, I could make out the bodies of the invaders lying lifeless. Their fleet destroyed and the ships slowly going beneath the waves.

Color scheme: Blue, Gold, white.

States:

AD:XXXXXXXX AP:XXX HP:XXXX Mobility:XXXXXXX CC: XXXX Toughness: XXX Utility: XXXXX Difficulty: XXXXXXXXXX

**He is an AD champion. **

Passive: Untouchable

all cc is reduced on him by 50%. Can not be chain cced. Meaning if he is stunned, other cc, knocked up, or whatever, can't be used on him for 10 seconds. Chain cc part does not apply to slows, only the 50% reduced cc part does. 20% movespeed after being cced by hard cc for 3 seconds.

Q: Lightning

A skillshot basic attack With his staff. Stacks 5 times. At 5 stacks He can send of a bolt of lightning. If the bolt kills someone/a monster/ or a minion he gets 2 permanent ad stacks for the lightning bolt.

W: Corporeal

His flow bar fills as he runs, when full, he can become corporeal and is able to avoid all attacks for 2/3/4/5 seconds. All skill shots will pass and can hit any ally behind you. All attacks aimed at you will create a discharge and hit near by allies, opponents, minions, and monsters. The bar refill takes 3 times as long as yasuo’s.

E: Staff Bounce

Throw your staff as a skill shot slowing whoever it hits. The staff has 6 hp bars to knock it down. If Q is active and you have all 5 stacks up, you can throw your lightning at the staff. You can then aim the lightning from the staff giving yourself distance and a longer range. If you aim it at an opponent it does the normal lighting. But if you are aim it at yourself, you activate supercharge.

Supercharge takes the lightning you directed back at yourself and stores it. When you want to use it a larger bolt of lightning is cast at the opponent. Deal an extra 15% damage. If you are supercharged you can not throw the staff until you use the charge.

R: Bult

When used, it does an attack combination where all the nearby opponents are surrounded by a circle, similar to Yasuo's cool down on his e dash, which are only visible to the champion. He can keep attacking his opponent while the circle is up for a huge damage bonus. The circle changes color. yellow for q. blue for w. red for e. green for r. So if you activate the ultimate attack, you flash to next to every enemy and hit them. Each hit gives 1% bonus damage for the next hit.

If a color button is pressed and the color is not active on any opponent, it ends the attack. Only roots and stuns can stop the attack. So it is best to bet stunned before using this attack because your passive will give you 10 seconds without being cced again.

The colors are activated randomly on the opponent. You must pay close attention to which color is active. If more than one opponent is the same color, it attacks the closest one. You can only attack and flash to each enemy once each hit, So if you you hit r and it goes to one champion, unless there are two, the attack is done and you won't be able to flash to that opponent again. So it is best to use the attack in team fights not solo.

If used in a solo fight, the attack does your normal basic damage plus 25% of your ad as extra damage. Each hit counts as a basic attack or auto attack. The ultimate overrides all of your other skills so you won’t be able to use them until your ult is over.****

6 Comments

LilStacey871 votes

Hey there, I didn't read the Lore because is was a little long but I want to give you my quick input before I go to bed. 1st off I want to say, if that is a picture you drew yourself, you get bonus cred from me bro because most people dont post their own pictures.

What I like most about your concept is the Ultimate, I problably dont have the same view you have but from what I read, you have to be on point and know your color-button combo's to get the most our of your Ultimate. I think that's a great idea to have and would make your champion fun to play. Please review my concepts if you have time Xander, The Elite

And Axel, The Heavy Gunner

Bultz1 votes

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Hey there, I didn't read the Lore because is was a little long but I want to give you my quick input before I go to bed. 1st off I want to say, if that is a picture you drew yourself, you get bonus cred from me bro because most people dont post their own pictures.

What I like most about your concept is the Ultimate, I problably dont have the same view you have but from what I read, you have to be on point and know your color-button combo's to get the most our of your Ultimate. I think that's a great idea to have and would make your champion fun to play. Please review my concepts if you have time Xander, The Elite

And Axel, The Heavy Gunner

Thanks for looking at it mate, I will have a look at yours as soon as i can.

THE RlVER KlNG1 votes

The passive needs to go. Him getting an Olaf ultimate every time he gets CCed is just stupid, especially since he gets movement speed on it too.....plus reduction in the first place? Good luck ever killing this guy when he builds Triforce full tank because he can increase his own AD through farming. I've read his ultimate multiple times and it still makes zero sense. He also can become untargetable for up to 5 seconds.......

Needs a lot of work IMO.

Bultz1 votes

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The passive needs to go. Him getting an Olaf ultimate every time he gets CCed is just stupid, especially since he gets movement speed on it too.....plus reduction in the first place? Good luck ever killing this guy when he builds Triforce full tank because he can increase his own AD through farming. I've read his ultimate multiple times and it still makes zero sense. He also can become untargetable for up to 5 seconds.......

Needs a lot of work IMO.

Let me see If i can address your concerns.

His passive is staying. As far as logic goes, you can't catch lightning. His passive activates to stop chained cc not cc in general. Meaning you can stun him. If you can't kill him after a stun, chances are you weren't going to kill him. That said I don't know how many champions in lane can stun twice so it doesn't affect the laning phase anyways as he would be a mid or top laner. Olaf's ult gives massive armor and mr and 70% move speed. It also ignores all cc. this doesn't. It ignores Chained cc after you have already been cced. The chances of being cced and taking the hits during that time, means you won't stay to fight, nothing like an olaf ult who will keep charging. Once again no laner has more than one cc usually. So the passive only comes into play late game. He is a late game champion yes. But chances of him building pure tank are none as his scaling is completely item reliant. So no ad items, no damage. He becomes useless in a fight and just takes hits until he dies as his kit is meant to damage, not tank.

As for increasing his Ad through farming, no he doesn't do that. The ad stacks he gets are to his lighting, a skill shot, only. Meaning the ad will only be added to his lightning bolt, his Q. But considering it takes 5 hits just to activate his lightning, and then actually killing something with it, means his ad stacking will be low and hard to get. Meaning it won't be one hitting anyone unless you let him farm for 60 minutes.

His ult is simple. I don't know what you don't understand. you press r. Any near by enemy champions, within screen view, get a circle around them. Similar to the cool-down circle champions get when Yasuo dash's at them. The circle comes in different colors as listed above. When you want to attack and flash to a person you press the key attributed to that color. It will always attack the closest person to you with that color. You gain 1% damage to the next flash if you land the previous one correctly. pressing a key with no active color ends the attack. you can not attack the same person twice. If only one person is hit the attack does your ad damage plus 25% of that. only hard core cc can stop this. stuns and roots, no knock ups, slows, or knock-backs. while the ultimate is active, your kite doesn't work. Getting stunned ahead of this ult gives you ten seconds of time to cast it without being stunned. So the passive is important to utilize. Once you hit someone, their circle color changes. Once you attack a different opponent, you can come back to this one. this attack scales completely off you ad as it does only 200 damage otherwise. meaning fighting someone with 3000 hp and only doing 200 damage is no good. So you can't build tank, you have to build ad.

As for becoming unforgettable, yes he becomes untargetable for five seconds, but any damage to him is dealt to anyone near by. Meaning if an ally is next to him with low health and he uses it, that ally will die and the attack gets the kill. The recoil won't hit the attack only anyone near this champion. So the attack will get minion kills, monster kills, and champion kills if this hits them near death. Also it can kill enemy champions if they are close, but it doesn't count as a kill for anyone.

None of the kit is broken or needs work as far as i see it.

THE RlVER KlNG1 votes

That is such an arrogant and dangerous response. You're basically saying your champion is perfect and my opinions don't matter.

Um...for one, let's use your logic for the passive. By all rules of logic, Tahm Kench should swallow what he eats, instantly killing whoever he uses Devour on for the rest of the game. Shouldn't Willump be able to Consume champions too? Shouldn't Fizz's shark eat you? Darius is literally jumping into the air and slashing you in half with an massive axe, so it should be an insta-kill, right? How does a wall of wind block a tidal wave? Why do Corki, Nami, and Vel'Koz buy boots? Why does Brand take damage from ignite or Annie? How does Gangplank randomly conjure barrels full of gunpowder wherever he wants? How does Lee Sin get affected by blinds and nearsight?

Applying logic to League in order to fulfill your thematic goals doesn't make sense and often creates toxic gameplay. Just because it makes sense for this guy to get 50% tenacity out the wazoo, while also getting movement speed after being CCed, and immune to CC for 10 SECONDS after being hit, doesn't mean he should. (also, it doesn't make sense in the first place)

'Not all top laners have more than one type of hard CC' is not a valid excuse. There are actually quite a few: Mega Gnar , Kled , Maokai , Nautilus , Poppy , Riven , Sion , and TahmKench. Other champions who don't necessarily go top: Alistar , Blitzcrank , Braum , Gragas , Hecarim , Ivern , Janna , Leona , Lissandra , Lulu , Morgana , Nami , Rammus , Sejuani , Skarner , Thresh , Vayne , Vi , and Zac. That's also not counting champions who have hard CC on a cooldown less than ten seconds (other than those already on this list), of which there are many. That's also not counting ganks: say Sion stuns Rajineru. He then cannot be affected by the Jungle Pantheon's stun for ten seconds, and also gains 20% movement speed for 3 seconds, granting him a free out. In temafights, say he gets stunned once (which is then reduced by 50% in the first place). He is then CC immune for the rest of the fight, since very few teamfights last more than ten seconds nowadays. This is one of the most broken passive concepts I have ever read.

The W is also incorrectly named. If he becomes corporeal, then that means he has a body and is solid, and definite. The word you may want to use is ethereal, which relates to spirit and incorporealism. Also, your justification is wierd - if he's untargetable, then duh things pass through him....same goes for Fizz, Vlad, and Elise.....that's not an excuse. Anyways, if he's untargetable, then how do people target him in the first place for the discharge to take place? The fact of the matter is is that it's five seconds of untargetability, which is just unacceptable. The longest untargetability durations in the game are Vlad and Elise with two seconds, although stasis technically counts and that's 2.5.

Thank you for explaining the ult, although it's still overly complex and doesn't make much thematic sense. I think it could be much cooler and do something different, but that's your call.

Bultz1 votes

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That is such an arrogant and dangerous response. You're basically saying your champion is perfect and my opinions don't matter.

No what I am saying is that your opinion is disagreeable. It is not arrogant or dangerous this is a thread about a video game lolz.

Um...for one, let's use your logic for the passive. By all rules of logic, Tahm Kench should swallow what he eats, instantly killing whoever he uses Devour on for the rest of the game. Shouldn't Willump be able to Consume champions too? Shouldn't Fizz's shark eat you? Darius is literally jumping into the air and slashing you in half with an massive axe, so it should be an insta-kill, right? How does a wall of wind block a tidal wave? Why do Corki, Nami, and Vel'Koz buy boots? Why does Brand take damage from ignite or Annie? How does Gangplank randomly conjure barrels full of gunpowder wherever he wants? How does Lee Sin get affected by blinds and nearsight?

Well if you are going to go by that logic, tham couldn't fit half the champions in his mouth, and at that he couldn't fight or beat almost anyone. Also he wouldn't eat them without making a contract with them soo again no. Shark frenzy does eat and kill you? Windwall works like this http://www.thisiscolossal.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/10/waterfall-2.gif. The boots are for fashion. Ignite is hotter and so is annie ;) lol pedo joke. Gangplank has deep pockets. Lee sin sees with magic as he was a mage before giving it up. It stops his third eye.

Applying logic to League in order to fulfill your thematic goals doesn't make sense and often creates toxic gameplay. Just because it makes sense for this guy to get 50% tenacity out the wazoo, while also getting movement speed after being CCed, and immune to CC for 10 SECONDS after being hit, doesn't mean he should. (also, it doesn't make sense in the first place)

Applying logic is what people do. You focused way to hard on nothing lolz. What I said was I was just using logic to create a suitable passive for a lightning champion. Doesn't mean he shouldn't either. There are 2 cc removing items in a game of 137 champions each carrying very heavy cc. Him having built in tenacity and moving around makes a huge chuck of sense since he is lightning. lolz.

'Not all top laners have more than one type of hard CC' is not a valid excuse. There are actually quite a few: Mega Gnar , Kled , Maokai , Nautilus , Poppy , Riven , Sion , and TahmKench. Other champions who don't necessarily go top: Alistar , Blitzcrank , Braum , Gragas , Hecarim , Ivern , Janna , Leona , Lissandra , Lulu , Morgana , Nami , Rammus , Sejuani , Skarner , Thresh , Vayne , Vi , and Zac.

Yet they all have cc and can still land it on him, but just because they can't land two is not a valid excuse for me to change the passive. Anyone with double cc already has it too easy in the game with only two items actually targeting cc in the first place and none targeting chained cc. I see no valid point of me changing the passive since they can still cc him.

That's also not counting champions who have hard CC on a cooldown less than ten seconds (other than those already on this list), of which there are many. That's also not counting ganks: say Sion stuns Rajineru. He then cannot be affected by the Jungle Pantheon's stun for ten seconds, and also gains 20% movement speed for 3 seconds, granting him a free out. In temafights, say he gets stunned once (which is then reduced by 50% in the first place). He is then CC immune for the rest of the fight, since very few teamfights last more than ten seconds nowadays. This is one of the most broken passive concepts I have ever read.

If your cc is on cd less than ten seconds, it is broken as all hell. under 10 second cc is broken and has no counter. Yup he can't get cced more than once, even with ganks, that is the point. That is the whole point of the passive. Broken concepts? I have never had a team fight last more than 3 seconds lolz. So he can't get stunned again, but he can still die as he is squishy. Focusing all of your cc on one champion is bad in a teamfight anyways.That logic has no base as to the passive being broken. He can't get cced for 10 seconds. He doesn't become immortal. He is a late game champion, so he won't doing massive damage early games anyways.

The W is also incorrectly named. If he becomes corporeal, then that means he has a body and is solid, and definite. The word you may want to use is ethereal, which relates to spirit and incorporealism. Also, your justification is wierd - if he's untargetable, then duh things pass through him....same goes for Fizz, Vlad, and Elise.....that's not an excuse. Anyways, if he's untargetable, then how do people target him in the first place for the discharge to take place? The fact of the matter is is that it's five seconds of untargetability, which is just unacceptable. The longest untargetability durations in the game are Vlad and Elise with two seconds, although stasis technically counts and that's 2.5.

I chose the name on purpose, but it's not really important for me as it was just a placeholder. You keep missing the point, he can't be hit is what i'm saying. Attacks can be launched at him, they just wont hurt him. He gets a longer time than the others since he can't hurt people in this mode and if he is hit, it can hurt others. Say he is in a team fight, he won't use it because it can hurt his team. But if he gets stuck in a 1v2+ he can use it and it hurts the other team as well. But the downside is he can't get kills in this mode. This mode just gives him time to escape.

Thank you for explaining the ult, although it's still overly complex and doesn't make much thematic sense. I think it could be much cooler and do something different, but that's your call.

Lightning moves quickly and strikes fast was the theme for the ult. It's complex and hard to pull off, but riot doesn't want boring ults so I had to be imaginative. I mean I could do something like a giant bolt of lightning, but it's been done and so have many other types. If you have a suggestion go for it.

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