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Corrin, the Corporate Swordsman

terkmc·7/2/2015, 3:24:49 AM·2 votes·1,660 views

Primary: Assassin Secondary: Support Residence: Formerly Ionia, Currently Zaun Enemy: Yasuo Karma Irelia

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Lore:

Honor. Tradition. Balance. Those things get you killed. Those things get you left behind while the world move forward. Those things make you weak and obsolete. It's a changing world and they don't realize it. Everyone of them, from the Elder to even my father, too arrogant, too proud, too confident that the old way is the best way, that they have already attained perfection. They never moved on, using their sword when there's gun, wearing cloth when there's body armor available. They reject technology, the modern world, and when the time come, the modern world will reject them, and they will be left standing in the ashes of their own civilization as the world move too fast for them to catch up, wondering "Where did I go wrong?" when suddenly their Hiten style or Meditation are obsolete against guns and modern medicine. And I refuse to be one of them. The world is moving, and I shall move with it. The world have no need for cowards who hide behind honor and lack the strength to take what they want. They say it's honorable, but when you look upon the carcass of men who died because their commander value their personal honor and glory over the lives of their men, you go and tell the dead about honor. I left that place. I traveled, to a land of opportunity, Zaun, where they recognize what needs to be done. Mercs for hire, bounty hunter, manhunter. I find people and bring them back, dead or alive. It's a dirty job, but someone's gotta do it, the pay is good and i'm living a life most can't even dream of. I will wait until the world starts moving too fast and the Mystic and Elders come to Zaun begging "Save us", there will be nothing left to save, their world will crumble on it's own dogma and stupidity, and I will look them in the eye and say "no". They can denounce my honor from the grave.

Appearance:

Asian male, tall and slim. Slicked back black hair and neatly trimmed goatee beard. Forehead have two bolt just above his right eyebrow, sign of augmentation. Wears a dark grey buttoned up shirt with a black tie and a black waistcoast and some light tactical harness over it. Wears a heavy synthetic coat that reach around his knee with a collar, carbon texture. His hands are gloved. Black business pant and shoes. Carries a high-tech looking Katana with two-prong tazer a the end of the hit, stored in a carbon steel sheath on his waist. An under shoulder-hostler carries a gun. His voice is clear and caculating, never looses composure. Occasionally smoke https://c2.staticflickr.com/8/7436/11593178846_f7a1bd0a43_b.jpg http://www.ultimateps3.fr/images/jeux/deus-ex-human-revolution/deus-ex-human-revolution_1275730017.jpg

Gameplay:

Corrin is an utility assassin/skirmisher, specializing in hunting down one target and assisting his teammate in hunting. Although lacking in pure burst power, Corrin makes up for it with superb vision control, allowing him and his team to capitalize on the information advantage to pick off enemy. Corrin packs high tech gadget that offer decent amount of utility while not packing oppressive damage, unlike Yasuo, the utility adc with double crit chance, with his damage only truly reach assassin level against weakened target or his hunting target. Packing superb vision, debilitating disable and great chasing ability, no enemy can hide from the Corporate Swordsman once he had set his eyes on them.

Ability: [P] Optic Implant:

Corrin gain unobstructed vision (see through bush and walls in his vision range).Every 10/8/6 seconds he releases a scanning pulse that travels to his max vision range, reveals ward, traps and invisible enemy champion.

[Q] Take Down CD: 8 Mana Cost: 40/45/50/55/60

Corrin next auto attack hit the target on the temple with his hilt, dealing 40/80/120/160/200 (+100% AD) physical damage and stun the target for 1 second. This auto have extra 300 range against blinded target and cause Corrin to dash to the target

[W] Flashbang CD: 15/14/13/12/11 Range: 950 Cost: 50 Mana

Corrin lob a flash bang at the target location dealing 60/110/160/210/260 (+ 60% AP) in a 250 radius. Enemy within that is looking at the flash bang is blinded and slowed by 30% for 1.5/1.75/2/2.25/2.5 seconds. Enemy looking away is only slowed, and by 20%

[E] Silencer CD: 4 Mana Cost: 22/24/26/28/30 Range: 1100

Passive: Against a target <30% health, Corrin shoots point blank with his pistol, dealing +15% missing health as physical damage. This effect cannot occur on the same target more than once every 5 seconds. Active: Corrin pulls out his silenced handgun and fire 3 bullets in quick succession in a line, colliding with the first enemy hit. Each bullet deals 30/55/80/105/130 (+ 80% bonus AD) and knock enemy back very slightly, interrupting channel and dashes. Enemy hit with multiple bullets take 50% damage from all bullets after the first one

[R] Manhunt CD: 100 Range: 5500 Cost: 100 Mana

Corrin contact his spy satellite, revealing the area in a 800 Radius (bush and stealthed enemy included) for 6 seconds. After 2 seconds, he then tag the lowest health champion in the area, marking and gaining true sight on them for 8 seconds. Corrin gain +20/30/40% ms toward the target and deals extra 10/20/30 % damage against marked target. Allies gain half of this bonus. Killing this enemy grant 150/175/200 % gold reward

Lore challenge:

This the holy grail of the corporation. A monopoly. Total control of the market. It also sounds shady as hell from my perspective. "The Shade?" "Armageddon?" It sounds like they are trying to destroy the world, not take over it. Not much of a market if there's no one left to sell to is it? At least the Council seems aware of this. The bosses and manager are too busy partying and smoking Vidun to even be aware of what they are sending their soldier into. The Council knows. They know everything And that's why they have me assassinate the man before me. My optical implant gathering information as he claps and shake my hand. 20 seconds earlier he wanted to kill me.

5 automaton striking from all corners of the darkness. Get hit once and I'm dead. Scary, to most, but the first rule of Corporate life:

"Never play by the rule"

Before all of them even got into place, I've already won A flash of light from a thrown device blinds all spectators and overload the automaton visual sensors. A jab into the neck of one of them delivers fatal voltage from the hilt. It spams out of control, its blade swinging wildly. I ducked underneath one of its arm as it slice one of its comrade in half. Normal swords wont even be able to pierce this level of armor, but my wasn't. It cuts right through, impaling the one of the remaining automaton just as it scrambles to raise its gun. Turning away, the body becomes my armor, blocking a barage of stab from another one of them as I reach over the corpse shoulder and unloaded a three round burst into its central processor. Only one remain, and it got guns and swords and armor and chains and whip. "Darkness huh?" The machine corpse spew out pitch black smoke as I remove my blade from its engine. The room is black with smoke. The automaton lit up, bright as day underneath thermal visioning. Schematic analyzation pin point its power core. Stab. Swing. The automaton crumbles to the ground as the sword swing out of its body, sending the overloaded core towards the spectator, where it exploded in a brilliant explosion. That is when I heard the clapping as "Shade" emerges from the smoke unharmed

"Very impressive. Not one for the rule, i see. Brilliant, we need men just like you, men who get things done, men who aren't afraid to play dirty. Welcome to the legion. And don't worry, I do not hold a grudge against that little accident. These things happens all the time" Yeah, accident He hold out his hand. I shook it with the same motion I've done a million time meeting clients and meeting my target. A firm handshake and a nod, then we are on out separate way Walking back to my car i noticed something out of the corner of my eye Bastard got blood on my suit!

10 Comments

Kamiroo Wolf7/2/2015, 8:20:04 AM1 votes

As good a concept as this is in other aspects, I think that passive needs to be nerfed SIGNIFICANTLY. It's one thing to have most of your abilities apply short vision to enemies, but to stand still and gain TRUE SIGHT is just broken. The champion is, quite literally, an overpowered living ward that can not only negate passives and ultimate such as Teemo's, Evelynn's, and Rengar's! Even Shaco and others I may be forgetting! You always know when the jungle is low, you always know where they are, and you always know what they're doing. Some champions quite literally rely on the fog of war(and their stealth) and even more rely on bushes. Like I said. Insane. Needs a rework.

His Q is some good damage, even for a support. I like it, but a point and click stun that also applies damage may want to be looked over again. My suggestion? Either reduce the radius or reduce the damage.

I am aware that bullets hurt, trust me, but why should 3 silenced bullets cancel channels? Unless they're applying some hard CC I would recommend removing this from the E. Other than that I actually like this one.

So, for his ultimate, he calls upon a satellite that grants vision...even though he can already see the entire map(true sight) if he's standing still? I get that this is supposed to help HIS ALLIES get to see them but why would he need this if he can just point and ping? Or type for that matter. Perhaps just make it an ult that reveals a single target, but increases the movement speed for solely allies?

All in all I enjoy the story, and it's definitely an interesting concept ;o

Tamur7/20/2015, 4:23:45 AM1 votes

Hmmm this could be a very tough fight. Did you want to meet in client to discuss?

terkmc7/20/2015, 1:53:14 PM1 votes

Lore Fight: I love monks and mystics. Absolutely love them, adore them even. They make my job easy See, when a monk goes to meditate, she does so in the open, to "be one with nature" like my father used to say. Clear target and line of sight And when they meditate, their entire body go into a trance state, still as a statue. An immobile target This one is even better, she does so in the middle of a jungle, where there are plenty of space to hide, and under a waterfall means she's at the lowest level of elevation. Textbook case really

The scope should be 1 centimeter down and another 3 degree up to account for gravity, and 10 millimeters to the right, as today is a windy day. Dry, windy, clear cool air, would have loved to go riding in this weather if I didn't have to do this.

Second thing I love about monks and mystic is that they think they are fighting other monks and mystic. They expect their opposition to play by the rule, and fight them honorably in the open with their arm and feet. They expect a fight to carry with it profound meaning, a clashing of energy that harmonize with the earth Hey, at least technically a bullet is part of the earth right? Metal and all that

One in the chamber. I was issued a semi-auto, but I prefer this one. It doesn't shoot as fast, as I have to manually load each shot, but it is precise, unaffected by whatever movement the loading mechanism might have caused, and with out a loading mechanism means I can put extra parts into this thing, namely another accelerator, which when activated will propel the metallic bullet at twice the speed of normal guns. Of course, that also means that I have to wait in between shot for it to cooldown, but one shot is all I will ever need

Technically the battle haven't started yet, that's for another two days. A glorious battle, "Shade" touted. Well, the first rule of corporate life has always been: "Never play by the rule" Look at her, just meditating away while the war is only inches away, oblivious to the carnage and mayhem that will consume her precious little land. Maybe that's why so many people flock to mysticism. All they do is meditate and play with trees, ignorant of their surrounding. I guess what you are too stupid to know can't make you sad.

Scope is zero'ed and on target. Headshot at this distance is pretty easy and quick. No "miraculous" recovery, no bleeding out screaming for days, no sudden allies help. Breathe out. Squeeze. One in the head. Pack up. Go home. Have a smoke. Go to sleep

BANG

Pack up. Go home. Have a- Wait Where is the body? There's a hole as big as a can on that rock but no body. The place looks clean. Maybe there's something on the sensor. Would you look at that, something moving toward my location at high speed. Should be here in 5 minutes. Enough time Collapse the rifle, wrap the fabric, put them in a suit case, lean it up against a trunk. Stand up, dust myself off. I hate the jungles with their dirt and bugs and dust and moss. Sword is at the ready. Load a magazine into the gun, another three at the ready on the belt.

1 minute 30 second 10 5 3 2 1

Bring it, bitch

She appeared out of the bush to my dead right, 10 degree off of my sensor calculation. She's fast, I'll give her that, but her move are predictable. A three strike combo, the first kick went over my head as I ducked down and collapsed a tree on impact, the second punch parried with the sheath of the blade, and the third axe kick I rolled out of the way before it left a small crater in the earth.

Impressive.

"You think I would let myself out in the open like that? Honorable duel are reserved for one of integrity, not traitors like you. I have been waiting for you, meditating, sensing the energy of the earth, preparing myself for a dishonorable attack fitting of ones such as you"

I like you already

With a crunch, the branch broke off, sending a massive chunk of trees and leaf crashing toward her. With a flash of light, she blasted through it, but it was all I need. Amidst the smoke and dust and trees and leaves is my opening. An overhead swing comes slicing through the air. She caught it in between her palms, right above her face. Blade catching, they call it, my father used to make me practice it every morning.

Except it wasn't a blade

I slid back in one fluid motion, drawing the sword from the sheath caught in between her palm. In her confusion and leaf filled mess she failed to realize I have not yet drawn my sword, and left her self open using both her hand to catch the sheathe. The blade come slicing up, drawing red line from her right hip to her left shoulder, not as deep as I would have liked it. Another slash come down in a sharp angle as she recoil from pain struck her on the back of her left knee. I can feel the tendon severing and the knee cap being crushed. My hearing amplifier immediately tone the volume down as her shriek filled the air, and in her pain and anger she punched me. Not hard enough to damage, but enough to make me back off. She's on her knee now, a once proud warrior now on the ground yelping like a trapped animal. The blood seep into the ground of the jungle. I can leave her here, wounded, unable to move, eventually dying when the animals smells the scent of blood can come for their meal. But I won't, it takes too much time, and too many factors can fuck this up. Gun is ready

Two in the chest, one in the head. Clean and si-FUCK

Before I knew it I was knocked back into a tree trunk with a dislocated jaw. She stood up straight now, the dried blood caking thick around her leg, but the wound itself was gone. Not completely as I can still see a faint scar, but by all mean its functional. Her pendant glows bright blue

The Spirits preserve me

Well, bitch Relocate jaw We'll see if the Spirits can preserve you after this. I raised my gun, aimed it at her and fire a three round burst. I hear three thud, but only two marks on the tree behind her. She dissappeared. Some kind of illusory trick I suppose

Nature disguise me

I hear her whisper through out the surrounding. A twitch of leaf here, a splash of water there. Movement all around. But she is mistaken. Nothing disguise her. Not nature, not magic, not gods.

I SEE EVERYTHING

The satellite triangulate her movement and a cross check with thermal scanning pinpoint her position pretty quickly. I can see everything, from her breath to her heartbeat and the movement of her fur growing on her skin to the way her newly healed tendon twitches under excessive force. I don't think she realizes this as I watch her strike a pose and crouch for an assault. I don't think she understand that her primitive tricks are outdated. But yet, she lunges at me, or more correctly, at where I was, which now is occupied by a flash bang. Animals are afraid of bright, strong light as I've read, and she is certainly dazed and scared and confused, her eyes bleeding from the intense sensory overload.

A blow to the temple with the hilt send her nervous system into shutdown. No more healings

Wait, I -

She was trying to say something, but I couldn't quite hear it as I pull my blades out from the back of her head. Pity that. But no matter, what is done is done. I probably should see a doctor about this jaw, kinda hurts after all this time. Might have to postpone the meeting until tomorrow to get it checked out. Shame, really, and I was really excited to meet this Lance guy and see what he is developing

Kamiroo Wolf7/30/2015, 10:17:07 PM1 votes

Ahhhh, Terk. Here we go!

Here are the results of your champion's judgements:

Lore: 16/20 points Theme: 11/15 points LAS(Lore Ability Synergy): 10/15 points Abilities/Kit: 12/20 points Creativity: 8/15 Kit Cohesion Synergy: 10/10

+5 From secret lore challenge! ;-;

Overall Score: 72/95 points!

Great! Considering all the concepts before scored >66 you did a great job! My only issues we're with some of the abilities, which weren't even bad! All in all, good job and I sincerely don't believe you deserve those downvotes ;-;