This is my first Champion Concept. Is it good?

LeBrõnze James·3/21/2016, 1:44:56 AM·4 votes·950 views

Name: Hagane Zetsu

From the Extreme Darkness of the Shadow Isles emerges the master of shadows. He is a ninja that specializes in Stealth and has extreme speed after training for years with the heaviest Steel Chains ever invented.

Passive: Clone Assault. When Hagane is below 25% health, he creates 3 clones They increase his Attack Damage by 3% each and deal 5% of his Attack Damage as magic damage to the target that he attacks. the clones disappear after 3 seconds.

Q) Cardiac Assault- Hagane Dashes through enemy targets, dealing 50% bonus damage to minions he passes through and (30/50/70/90/110 Attack Damage) (+80% AD) (17/16/15/13/11 Second Cooldown) (150 Energy)

W) Chain Assault- Hagane Tosses his Chain to stun the enemy for (0.5/0.75/1.25/1.50/1.75 seconds) He then uses his blinding speed to slash the enemy 3 times while they are stunned. each slash deals 25 Physical Damage and the third slash causes the target to bleed, losing 3% of their max health per second for 3 seconds. (20/19/18/16/14 Second Cooldown) (100 Energy)

E) Shadow Assault- Hagane Releases a Shadow of himself that is 350 range away from him It attacks nearby enemy champions 3 times before fading.(7/5/4/2/1 Second Cooldown) (50 Energy)

R) Infinite Darkness- The Map becomes dark for 3 seconds. Hagane gets 30% bonus movement speed while he is within the darkness. Champions that are trapped in the Darkness are Marked. When Hagane is within 1000 range of his Targets, they are alerted by a Exclamation Mark above their head. Once within 1000 range, Hagane can Dash 3 times dealing 15% of his Attack Damage as True Damage to struck Targets. (200 second Cooldown) (No Cost)

5 Comments

Simon Lancaster3/21/2016, 2:18:02 AM3 votes

His passive seems a little weird to use effectively, as well as what FishAcorn said about his ultimate, inspiration from ults like Rengar's and Nocturne's are nice, but hack and slash is better left to modders (because inventing our own code is tough ;-;). His E is a little too similar to Zed's, maybe try pushing the stealth theme a bot more with this one. One last thing ('cause I'm an old-time lore fan), is that being from the Shadow Isles (the place of undead), he'd probably be undead himself. Undead ninja sounds cool, but I think he's best coming from somewhere else. Otherwise, he seems like an interesting play, I'd love some lore if you've got it kicking around in your brain. For a first concept, it's great. Mine was a guy who got magic rune blood and shot magic rune bullets at both enemies and friends.

CrimsonCobra33/23/2016, 8:02:36 PM2 votes

As far as your concept goes, it's alright. My one real criticism is that his kit doesn't feel like it fits his character. Instead, I felt he was a strange conglomeration of Lee Sin, Zed, and Nocturne. For a first concept, he's rather good though. He's balanced, if a little weird, and his background is good.

My first champion concept was "The Wholloper." It was a gigantic fat woman that converted a percentage of her movement speed into AD, (so she remained slow), and wholloped things with her fists. Her ultimate was a belly flop. But for relatively self-evident reasons I never posted it.

~CrimsonCobra3

rtbf689103363/21/2016, 1:48:12 AM1 votes

This is actually really cool imo, but he does seem a bit overloaded lol

A Cute Fish3/21/2016, 1:54:36 AM1 votes

cool idea a little overloaded and i don't know if it would flow well together and also i think the ult shouldn't cover the whole map but more like a tf ult area other than that cool concept and i would like to see other ideas like this

FloRaider423/21/2016, 9:48:32 AM1 votes

Seems very well made for a first concept, but I want to point out some things I dislike:

Theme: Zed Shadow Ninja is an already existing niche, which is why I think you might want to search for a new theme.

P: Leblanc + Extra Damage - Misdirection I don't think that this passive is very fitting for a ninja (conversion of Ninjitsu), and might need some changes.

Q: Shen without the taunt Gives him mobility and some wave clear, but is rather bland.

W: Point and click stun and 10% HP bleed With his high mobility high CC seems a bit out of place.

E: Are those Shadows more like Pets or Azir's Soldiers ? Maybe make it up to 350 range away (so you can place it near too).

R: Nocturne R + Rengar R It deals rather low damage, but the utility and mobility mostly make up for it.

Overall: I kinda would like to see a way to regain Energy (especially since E has a laughable 1 second CD, but there is no way to use it like that). One thing that bothers me is that according to "Lore" he is stealthy, but his kit doesn't really represent that. His kit seems a bit unfocused (Fighter passive ; Assassin Q ; Support W ; Mage E ; Assassin R).

Sry if that came of as a bit harsh, but those were the first things that came to mind.

FloRaider out summoner 31