SIGN-UPS: Champion Concept Critique by The Djinn

Hey guys!

I'm The Djinn, a self-taught game designer with 10+ years of mostly amateur (and some professional) design experience and a love of offering up conceptual and mechanical critique, specifically with regards to mechanical functionality and fantasy fufillment. I've recently interviewed for design positions at companies like Rockstar and Riot Games so, while I'm far from the be-all-and-end-all of designers, I may have some useful thoughts or advice that can help your designs reach their potential.

As such, I'd like to put forth some of my time to offer comments and critique on some creations on this board. If you'd like a review, please drop me a LINK to your post as well as a brief description of the champion or kit in question. PLEASE ALSO CHECK THE REQUIREMENTS BELOW. I will not be reviewing anything that doesn't meet these requirements.

#Requirements

--Initial post does NOT have ability mechanics contained in quote boxes. This makes it impossible to simply use the Quote feature, and that really makes it a pain to review something.

--Abilities have at least rough approximations of damage and ratios (even as simple as low - medium - high), approximate mana costs, and have their cooldowns listed. It's impossible to properly judge a kit's functionality without this information.

--You must actually be prepared to accept critique. I won't pretend that I'm always right, but I also don't want to waste my time and yours offering suggestions or comments that you aren't prepared to at least consider the validity of.

--One request at a time only. You may post other requests once the first has been reviewed

#Looking forward to talking with all of you!