Both of these would become the 100% go to option for sorcery 2nd tier. No one really takes transcendence atm because it doesnt give CDR till level 10, and you generally dont want to build over the CDR cap regardless of the AD/AP it gives. Absolute focus doesnt get taken because it gives VERY LIMITED stats only when you are above 70% health. So unless you are playing
you dont get to use this rune, and even if you are these 3 champs the enemy can just go for 1 trade and the rune is now useless.
Which is why celerity gets picked. Because 3% bonus MS is ALWAYS decent and getting stats from bonus MS regardless of game time is good too.
However if you replaced them with the stacking one, its just going to be the automatic go to for all skirmishers and split-pushers. Infinitely stacking 3% increased damage stacks. That stack pretty quickly. And the awareness version will just take fed champs over the top. 5 stack Zed getting 20% additional AD. 1000AP veigar getting 20% additional AP.
You want to look at the power of both runes that it is going against and making the new rune on the same level. So for absolute focus you could change it to "gain 15AP + 8% total AP or 10AD + 5% total AD when above 70% health. This effect lasts for 2 seconds when going below the 70% threshold."