For those who are unfamiliar, TB Skyen is a YouTuber dedicated to analyzing and critiquing League of Legends lore on his channel. Some great discussions in this video on characterization and narrative structure if you guys would like to check it out.
Ayy you beat me to it even though I requested the video xP
For her biography regarding the Buvelle I gotta agree with Skyen although I dislike the Buvelle's and feel that they shouldn't be in Quinn's biography. I'm not exactly sure how consistent the Buvelle's have been throughout Demacia lore but if the Buvelle's have been in many lore I guess it's okay that they're in Quinn's lore as well.
I also agree with the Valor thing, although the reincarnation of Caleb is kinda whatever. As in, I wouldn't say Valor is a reincarnation of Caleb but more of a memory, reincarnation is kinda pushing it for me. Many people can agree that Valor coming out of no where is silly, he even gave the point that maybe birds like Valor are possibly heroic. However like Skyen's many writing points throughout the video and others, if birds like Valor are heroic it should have been mentioned. Valor swooping in out of no where feels like many facts are missing.
For the short story I'm realizing that the first paragraph has nice words but bad flow. For the drunk soldiers think this, if they were super drunk their actions could be unpredictable as they wouldn't be able to think at all. If they were a bit drunk they'd still think but they wouldn't be able to act with the same amount of accuracy and also might not make the best judgement when fighting.
I think on first reaction I really missed the fact that Quinn is a hero and that's her main theme, I was blinded by the badassery. I'm a bit unsure about Quinn revealing herself and that making her arrogant. I think her actions after revealing herself are more arrogant such as feeling bored and being entertained by the confused Noxians, heroes don't really do that. Also the amusement in Valor and acceptance of amusement in Quinn is also anti-heroic and arrogant.
