Act 2 of the bilgewater event (twisted fates real name?)

Azteryz··5 votes·1,760 views

i am in love with what you guys are doing with my favorite mid laner and my favorite adc

im just beyond awe in terms of how you guys wrote this and how you added so much more onto the whole "graves hates tf because he left him" you added depth for example graves doesnt know what really happened that night of their big heist

twisted fate wants to tell him but he realizes its way too late for that Malcolm is stuck at the line after the breaking point

what i noticed in the first act and even more so in act 2 is how they dont really want eachother dead like when graves doesnt want tf to die from anyone elses hand and to some extent even his own which he says is because he wants a confession but there may be a hint that he doesnt want to see his old friend die... someone he might of seen as a brother

the same goes with twisted fate he does feel bad for a moment when he leaves graves in a burning building HE KNOWS GRAVES WILL BE FINE but he worries regardless

i am more than blown away with this work and half way through it i even considered that they should make this into a cinematic and how great that would be cause just by reading this it feels so alive

i would love to get a rioter to give me feedback on how im doing with this and i shall end this post by saying

is his name tobias fate? >:O TwistedFate

5 Comments

The Only Doctor4 votes

Im in University studying Creative Writing. From a writing standpoint, this is textbook. There are Main Characters that are compelling and with legitimate emotions, and I think you are right that in this story of betrayal and revenge, there's the undercurrent theme of close friendship and bonding (read: brotherhood) that has been torn apart but is still hanging in there and playing a factor as the story progresses. Beautiful writing, strong central characters that audiences relate to, reasons to root for or against characters. It's literary heaven meets my favorite game. I've been appropriately charmed Ahri

Azteryz2 votes

wow great to get feedback from someone in that study i completely agree with you curious besides who they are currently working on in terms of extended lore bios who would you like for them to work on next in terms of story and lore ?

The Only Doctor1 votes

Personally, I'm a huge fan of Lore dynamics between different champions. I'd love to see the Extended Lore come to a conclusion between the Sisters of the Freljord (and i think they missed an opportunity when they reworked Ashe ) but I also really like the Morgana and Kayle storyline. I'd love to see more on that front as well. A Demacia vs Noxus event would also be really cool. With so many of the Champions hailing from one of those two city-states, there's a huge opportunity to further explore a lot of those champions, the world they inhabit, and come up with some nice new ideas to base an event around. But that's just my opinion

Samura Yukisuna1 votes

The writing is excellent. It does an amazing job of painting a movie in your head when you read it.

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