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TheShadowyOwl··7 votes·3,031 views

So I've thought of a champion but before I get started I do wanna say that if you do have a champion either link me to it or write it in the comments cause I do enjoy hearing about them now here we go. Oh 1 more thing i'm going to be using the old lore as in the institute of war and summoner thing will exist.

Design: His hair is brown, he has a scarf and has a hood that are grey, his eyes are dull red, his clothes are a white shirt, black pants, his leather glove that has a bright purple device on it, boots that look similar to the ionian boots of lucidity but they are very old, he's also got a belt. His splash art is him standing in front of one of his portals and 2 to the left and 1 to the right holding each of his weapons.

Mensio "The Portal Jumper" Roles: Support Secondary: Mage When Mensio was born his mother died because she had an ailment that caused her body to be fragile when under great amounts of pain. His father out of spite for the child left him at a foster home of an old friend, They took care of him well enough, but they never showed him any signs of how a normal family treats their child. As such most of the ways he learned about technology and created his Portal machine was through books that he had to buy himself and teachings of some scientists that would pass through, one that he was very fond of was Corin Reveck and his Daughter Orianna, after a while his foster parents sent him to the school of Techmaturgy where he met Viktor and usually afterschool he would go and meet up with Ekko, both of them were good friends who helped improve his technology and gave him the feeling of a family. However they went their separate ways, when Viktor became full on machine and intended to conquer Zaun he went to his best friend Mensio, intending to get him to join him, by force if necessary, no matter how much he tried to convince him Mensio refused and soon he was forced to try to hold him still and force it onto him. He joined the Institute of War to find someplace safe until he could convince Viktor to change back too his normal self so they could change Zaun into a better place.

Stats: Health: 600+75 Attack damage: 65+6 Attack speed: 0.734+3% Movement Speed: 355 Health regen: 3.2+0.748 Armor: 50+6 Magic Resist: 45+5

Passive: Time for an upgrade Mensio starts out with a weak magic basic attack however depending on which item you get first will choose how his passive will work as well as what weapon he has increases that stat by 30.

Physical power: If you get item 1055 or item 1036 you will get a tomahawk and the passive is every 3 basic attacks it's a critical hit however even if it kills the unit it will bounce off to the side and into a wall, if he picks it up he gets to do it again however if he doesn't get it within 5 sec. or if an enemy gets it the passive is disabled for 15 sec.

Ability power: If you getitem 1056 item 1082 item 1052 the weapon you get is a gunblade, you'll get one of 2 passives depending on what you get if you got item 1056 gives you manasteal as in 5% of the damage you do returns as mana, if you got item 1082 or item 1052 every 5 attacks will do ability power and slow them for 30% for 3 sec.

Defense: if you get item 1054 item 1033 item 1029 you get a buckler and twin guns, you're passive is that when you get hit with a debuff your defense and magic resist increase by 50.

Q: Portal When activated the player can pick anywhere in a 600 unit radius to teleport Mensio. Cooldown: 18/15.5/13/10.5/8 Mana: 210/170/130/90/50

W: Rune Spears Mensio when activated Mensio will be immovable he will summon a spear 3 times in a 700 unit radius pinning the target for 1 sec. and dealing 120/145/170/195/220+(25% ability power)(25%physical power) as physical damage, the same unit cannot be hit while pinned and cannot be pinned 2 times as well as it does 50% damage the second time and 25% damage the 3rd time. Cooldown: 15/14/13/12/11 Mana: 80/100/120/140/160.

E: Weapon Rain Mensio opens up a portal in a 1000 unit radius that rains spears, daggers, swords, and other sharp objects on the opponents in a 500 unit radius, dealing 70/90/110/130/150+(10% physical power)(10% ability power) in physical power per sec. for 3/4/5/6/7 sec. Cooldown: 10 sec. Mana: 60/70/80/90/100

R: Discord Zone Mensio uses a device that causes the portal he summons within 2500/5000/7500 unit radius to be a weird black area that has red pulses going throughout it (700 x 700 units), it has a 4 sec. warning as the ground becomes red and it begins blinking when it happens, while in it champions will constantly be warped to the middle every 1 sec. for 6 sec. when reactivated enemies become silenced and Mensio will warp to each enemy champion within the Discord Zone and deal 100/220/340+(75% physical power)(75% ability power) in half physical, half magical damage, this stops the ability but if he manages to kills all the targets he gets to recast it immediately. Cooldown: 180/140/100 Mana: 200/340/480

Animations for the R: His Tomohawk goes (if their are all 5 if their isn't it ends on the respective number): 1st strike: Simple Swing. 2nd strike: He spins around through his enemy 3rd strike: Swings and jumps up. 4th strike: Slams the targets head. 5th strike: He jumps up then slams the target on the head.

His Gunblade 1st strike: simple slash downwards. 2nd strike: slashes through the target. 3rd strike: will do a triple slash combo. 4th strike: will stab and do a powerful shot 5th strike: will stab, slice upwards, jump up, then shoot the enemy 3 times.

His Guns and Buckler 1st strike: bashes with the buckler. 2nd strike: slides and shoots the target. 3rd strike: slams the target with the buckler. 4th strike: walks forward shooting the target. 5th strike: throws buckler at the target then jumps up shooting target with his guns flipping around causing a barrage of bullets, then warps to the buckler and picks it up before warping back.

Description: He is supposed to be a combo and aggressive support champion, he's supposed to pin his ADC's targets down so they can do high damage and he can do high damage as well too deal high damage with his ADC. He can also be a high mobile mid laner if the player wants too play him like that.

Freinds: Ekko Ezreal Orianna Rivals: Viktor DrMundo Singed Blitzcrank Twitch

Quotes: His voice will be very deadpan and monotone because of his uplifting. Being Picked: "Greetings Summoner, in what way shall we fight?'

Moving: "On my way." "I'm going." "Why can I not teleport?" "Time to go." "Onwards."

Attacking: "Fight me." "Try me." "You're in the way!" "Exterminate this!" "Better start begging."

Low Health: "Just a little longer." "C'mooooooooooon." "Pant, Pant." "Let's not die now."

Death: Mensio will fall over and then be sucked up by one of his portals.

"NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO." "groan, pant, pant, cough, cough."

Q: "Let's go places." "Here I go." "Moving." "Missed me."

W: "Hrrrah!" "Take this!" "Stand Still!"

E: "For you." "There we go." "A good ol' pincushion will take care of this."

R: "I have you now!" "You're not getting away!" "Come Here!" "You can't escape me!" "You can run but you won't get away!" "Pick your god and Pray!"

when reactivated: "Incoming!" "Alright, Let's Go!" "Farewell!" "This is the end friend."

Recall: Pretty basic he opens up a portal then the portal will suck him in. However if an ult such as enchanted crystal arrow barely misses him when he recalls a gust of wind will follow behind him and he'll say "Wow who opened up the window?"

Special Interactions:

Ekko: Joke: "I know you're expecting a joke Ekko but when you live in Zaun the funniest thing is how you're even living there."

Taunt:"Your time is up Ekko."

Ezreal: Joke: "Remind me how'd you talk me into this mess again?"

Taunt: "You betray me Ezreal? then I guess i'm sending you to piltover in a box."

Orianna: Joke: "I'd offer a dance but that's not exactly what you learn when you're an orphan on the streets of Zaun."

Taunt:"Under a new order Ori?"

Viktor: Joke: "My weapons are better." "You're humanity is dead robotic voice ALL THAT'S LEFT IS A MACHINE!"

Taunt: "Trying to kill me again?" "I won't be a robot like you!"

DrMundo: Joke: "Oh it's you."

Taunt: "You can't kill me, can't, won't, will not"

Twitch: Joke: "I'm not in the mood Twitch."

Taunt: "Yes I know you were hiding."

Item build: Depends really on what you want but here's what I would think as a build for each set. AD Damage: Starting set: item 1055 or item 1036 item 2003 item 3340, pretty obvious starting set. Early Items: item 3006 item 3070, Berserkers Greaves for the passives so that he can pop the passive more often, the tear of the goddess so that when his ADC leaves he can stay and keep the lane going. Essential Items: item 3004 item 3078 item 3156, Trinity force so that when he combo's his abilities he can also do high damage, Maw of Malmorus will help him out with not having to worry about cc as much and getting a little more health. Rapid attack Items: item 3094 item 3142, This is incase you want to get the crit. out faster and youmuu's will give extra attack speed and damage. Damage Items: item 3071 item 3033, This is if you want to do damage and as well as do a little extra support-ish abilities, as well as if a tank is carrying these will help out. Example Final Build: item 3006 item 3042 item 3078 item 3156 item 3142 item 3071

AP Damage: there are 2 so i'll do 2 Starting set: item 1056 item 2003 item 3340 Early Items: item 3145 item 3006 item 3070, Berserker's Greave will help you have giant manasteal so you can stay in longer, Hextech gives you extra damage and AP early game. Essential Items: item 3030 item 3115 item 3004, The main course of this build is too be mana sustainable and have high attacks speed and AP these items give you that. Mana Sustain: item 3165 item 3027 item 3078, if you want mana sustain plus a little extra attack speed then go with this Ability power: item 3089 item 3135 item 3090, just if you want to do extra damage with abilities and when you basic attacked. Example Final Build: item 3006 item 3042 item 3030 item 3115 item 3090 item 3089.

AP Damage 2: Starting set: item 1082 or item 1052 item 2003 item 3340 Early Items: item 3117 item 3113, if you want to be able to chase down enemies and deal high damage then go with this. Essential Items: item 3116 item 3146 item 3089, superb Items since he can do really high damage with his abilities. Damage Items: item 3165 item 3090 item 3135, These are high damage that will help spoil enemies with abilities. Situational Items: item 3090 item 3027 item 3157, These are in case you're having trouble staying in because of high damage. Example Final Build: item 3117 item 3116 item 3146 item 3089 item 3165 item 3027

Tank Set: Starting set: item 1054 or item 1029 or item 1033 item 2003 item 3340 Early Items: item 3117 item 3082 or item 1057 Boots of mobility help you get in quick and grab the armor for some tank early on. Essential Items: item 3050 item 3102 item 3512 Armor: item 3025 item 3075 Magic Resist: item 3065 item 3137 Example Final Build: item 3117 item 3050 item 3025 item 3102 item 3512 item 3137

So yeah that's the champion I thought of if any of you have a champion idea link me to it or write it down since I would love to read it as well as if you have any tweaks about it tell me in the comments i'm open to tweaks and critiques so yeah thanks for reading.

Update: OK so click on Ahri right here to go to the 2nd champion i've made for Ionia

Ahri http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/vVXjVN64-a-champion-ive-thought-of-2

And click on Caitlyn here she'll take you too the 3rd champion I've made for Piltover

Caitlyn http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/55YxX360-a-champion-ive-thought-of-3

Ok so in celebration of Noxuses victory though very few of you voted Draven will gladly take you too our next champion.

Draven http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/pxTwF9Er-a-champion-ive-thought-of-4

Click here for my champions poll http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/9cuaeONu-so-howd-i-do-with-them

46 Comments

Ýones1 votes

How long is 30 foot?

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

I'd say that 1 foot would equal what league of legends says is 10 units so around 300 units radius

Communist Toast1 votes

so your E it's activation is basically karthus's ult except better?

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

OK I obviously didn't say that right it's that you pick an area that you wan't to shoot it in an area around him and when you select the area the ability will begin kinda like zigg's ult except it can't be aimed from around the map he can choose the area in a 300 unit radius.

Kaktos1 votes

Hello!

Great concept, but lacks uniqueness and purpose.

Review:

My favorite part of your champion idea is the passive. Having the choice between four different versions is great for a situation. Truly unique passive. However, champion stats will eventually level up to reach over 100, most likely his attack damage (some champions do not go over 100 though). Maybe some other way to decide? Also, I recommend to combine his defense (armor I assume) and magic resist for a tank should not just build one but both for the other team is most likely balanced with AD and AP champions. The thing that is not unique about the passive is the affects. The tomahawk is basically Veigar or Nasus. And the gunblade is Orianna. The defense (armor I assume) is a good passive. The magic resist however is kind of weak... Most tanks barely reach 250 magic resist and late game 250 is nothing.

Now his Q. It is a buffed version of Bard's Magical Journey.

Moving on to the W...... what are you trying to do?! Haha. At max rank you can basically troll perma stun an enemy. Once you are hit you are done (Olaf Gangplank ). It is worse than Morgana bind. Also another champion kind of already has this ability, Heimerdinger.

Okay now his E. As the other comment had already said it is a Karthus ult except better. Also, you get to summon elemental minions that deal a ton of early damage? Jesus Christ.

Now his ultimate, R. It is confusing and I can already tell you there will be a lot of bugs if this ultimate is actually used as stated.

Summary:

Cons -Lacks Uniqueness -Lacks synergy -Where does this champion belong?! (Mid lane I am guessing) -WTF damage

Pros -Unique passive (the choosing part) -Lore

I could tell you spent a lot of time with the lore and I love that you did. However the abilities also needed more time to be thought of, there is no synergy (Orianna, Gnar; it just feels like you just put in abilities you thought were cool [they are]). Riot's goal is to make unique champions that can also give bring a new unique game-play style (Kalista's passive, Gnar's passive, etc). Think about it, if Riot made similar champions all the time it would just be, well, boring.

Recommendation:

-Make the champion more unique -Have some sort of new unique game-play style -Fix passive -Make the abilities have synergy with the others

Ideas -Maybe instead of a stat reaching 100, you can just buy a starter item (item 1056 item 1082 item 1052 or item 1055 item 1036 or item 1054 item 1033 item 1029) and you will gain a set of abilities based on the item you chose (so three sets of four abilities + passive). I really like this passive because it can be hard to counter

I really want to see what you will do next with this champion please inform me! [slayer-jinx-catface]

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

Ok so thank you for the information and yeah looking over it, it's a good first draft but it needs to be redone so here is what i'm planning on doing now.

Now the role i'm trying to do is mid but he can also go top like I said very customizable.

His passive will be that you can get one of the starter items like you said will choose what he gets

item 1055 item 1036 gets you the tomahawk the passive will be that every 3rd attack will be a critical hit but the tomahawk will bounce off and go off to the side of the minion, getting it allows him to do it again but if the enemy gets it he has to wait around 30 sec. before it comes back up

item 1056 item 1082 item 1052 gets you the gunblade and the passive is that it will also add an effect based on what you get, item 1056 gives you manasteal as in 5% of the damage you do returns as mana item 1082 and item 1052 which means every 5 attacks will do ability power and slow them for 30%

and item 1054 item 1033 item 1029 net you both the dual guns and the buckler as i'll call it now the passive as it was before you get debuffed you get a 50 increase in magic resist and defense

his Q i'm gonna change to this, you click on who you want to warp then in a 300 unit area warp them to that location this can be done to enemies too also I forgot to add mana and cooldown so here they are mana: 70/90/110/130/150 cooldown: 12/11.5/11/10.5/10

Now his W i'm gonna change so when activated will render Mensio immovable however he can use his portal to summon a spear 3 times in a 400 unit radius pinning the target for 2 sec. and dealing 70/80/90/100/110+(25% ability power)+(25%physical power) the same unit cannot be hit while pinned as well as it does 50% damage the second time and 25% damage the 3rd time. Cooldown: 10/9/8/7/6 Mana: 80/100/120/140/160

Now his E i'm not changing except for a) adding cooldown and mana and b) nerfing damage now let me explain it a little better in the fact that when activated you pick an area where you want the thunder to go down in a 300 unit radius and the place itself is about 100 units big that's what I meant it's not like karthuses ult it's similar to his 3rd ability except it isn't toggle and it isn't restricted to going around you

Now his ult i'm changing it so it does just the first part as in a 1000 unit area he will put a tether on each unit and then after 3 sec. he'll pull them to him stunning them for 3 sec. they can get out by making themselves untargetable like with Zhonya's, bard's tempered fate etc. dealing 70/110/150+(50% ability power)(50%physical power) when he pulls them.

So yeah thank you for the information and the ideas so here's what I've thought of

Senteth1 votes

I see you adhere to the warframe design philosophy of "If it's cool, then it's good." Now there is nothing wrong with that, but it does stray away from whats needed for a highly competitive game like LoL. Perhaps I'm reading to much into this, but game design is my passion so... whatever...

I like the passive so I'll give it extra attention. Rather then have the passive weapon tied to what item you buy first, it is my opinion that having it as a separate thing purchased in the shop would be better. You know... something similar to gangplanks ult upgrades except bought with gold. Perhaps even free if you can't swap it out later in the game. These upgrades would give him the altered basic attacks, while also increasing his bonus AP/AD/HP or whatever by X%.

As for the rest of the kit, I don't know... I'm a bit confused as to what his play pattern is supposed to be, or what his role is in a team comp. He has a lot of damage and a lot of CC, but he also has a powerful mobility skill. So is he some sort of mage/assassin? What is the win condition for him or his opponent?

Sorry if I'm being a bit nitpicky. It's what I want from others, and I have been known to project a little.

Also his lines make him sound much older and snarky-er then his lore would suggest.

Okay, I'll stop now...

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

OK so it's nice of you to say what you think know here is my response

his passive: I see where you are coming from but the thing is that I do prefer this method since I don't know how to get the custom frames like others do but still yeah that would probably make better

his role and abilities: his role is supposed to be similar to leblanc's or ahri's as in he is a mid lane mage but he has an assassinating potential.

how he's supposed to win: unlike leblanc and ahri he doesn't do high bursts of damage very quickly so as such he's supposed to help his teammates and cause trouble with the enemy team by using his abilities to single out the carry by rooting them with rune spears, causing damage to them with Summon lightning then stopping them from escaping with portal or his ult. too keep essential targets from running.

hope that helped, take care! [slayer-jinx-wink]

Senteth1 votes

Ah I see... So he is a bit like a potentially self sufficient support then? Kinda like Lulu or Zilean?

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

yeah kinda he's a very customizeable champion hence the various ways you can build him so he can really be played any way except maybe adc.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

also his quotes, the thing is that he's saying it in like this deadpan voice that's the joke as in he's saying these snarky things in this very monotone deadpan voice.

Senteth1 votes

Ah. You should mention that in the OP.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

oh come on he's not that OP.

(also are you talking about his lore, his quotes, what what do you mean?)

Senteth1 votes

You are new to this aren't you :) OP is forum slang for opening post...

How I usually do it is I first write a little description of what their voice and mannerisms are like at the start. Then I mention it whenever a particular quote differs from that norm. Something like this.

Random Champ has a quiet, and soft voice. Sparkles chime in the background whenever they talk.

=== Champ Select Quote === "I say things." slightly louder and more confident.

=== Moving === "Hello... This is a quote." "Do you know how quote-y I am?" said harshly "More talking."

=== When Taunting Other Champ === "Hi there, Other Champ." unimpressed.

etc

But that's just how I do it. Sorry if I'm being confusing.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

I get it and yeah never heard that term before so i'm new to this

DragexMan1 votes

Honestly, not lying at all, supports who can go into a carry role are my favorite champions in the game. Blitzcrank, Sona, Braum, Zyra. AD thresh isn't my favorite but it works too. Anyways, this is super complex, you thought of everything! Good work man keep it up!

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

Why thank you, originally I was planning on making an assassin mage, like ahri and leblanc but when a commenter made a comparison to people like lulu and zilean I realized that would be the best role for him. But the thing that seperates him from lulu and zilean is that he isn't primarly a mage but he can go AD if he see's the need or tank if he finds the need, so as such he's very customizable.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

Also you get too see if I kept it up cause that's the 1st of 4 soon too be 5 and then i'll host a poll too see who was the best.

lIIllIlI1 votes

Wonderful idea and lots of creativity but this just seems to crazy of a champion to ever be balanced properly. This concept seems just to crazy for a game like League of Legends. I do love the concept though.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

ehem points at zed, teemo. yasuo, leblanc, tryndamere, jax, yi, and blitzcrank I think this one isn't that bad compared to those.

lIIllIlI1 votes

The main issues I have with this champion is the amount of CC available with the W and how overpowered the ult is, it's like a Sejuani ult on steroids and could easily win team fights by hitting a single button by Q'ing himself into the middle of the enemy team and ulting. Addition to this: We also don't need another Zed, Leblanc, Tryndamere, Teemo, etc.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

The cc with his w is the fact that he can only root a target once and the target knows when he activates it so they know when to start moving so he can't root them, also his ult. again game-changing ult's have been done before (Karthus, Taric, Taliyah, Gangplank, the Aforementioned Sejuani, and so on and so forth)

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

and besides this prevent's them from escaping so it's best to use it at the end when everyone is running.

lIIllIlI1 votes

It allows a two second stun for your team to do all their damage and hardly requires the position that the majority of those other ults do that were mentioned. Again though, I love the idea and respect this design.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

alright we're not reaching any conclusions about this but whatever, we can agree to disagree and i've got plenty other champion concepts to go

lIIllIlI1 votes

Glad to hear it and am looking forward to it :D

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

yep and while you're waiting for me too get out another one their are about 4 other concepts i've got

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

ok so I changed the ult. what are your thoughts on it?

Stephenizgod1 votes

Hey sorry it took me awhile to read your concepts, been busy. I will try to at least get through 1 a day, maybe more if I can.

Ok so before i get into any criticisms i want to say this is a very cool champion design. There are some issues with it, but overall its interesting and original. I also am going to say here that I am not going to focus on the numbers, it is hard to balance damage and stats, so I won't even mention them.

Let's start with the Passive, i like the base idea but I think it needs to be changed so it can actually work in League. I like the idea that your first item changes your basic attacks, but sometimes you pick 1 item because it fits your playstyle or because of a certain match-up (ex: Gangplank can start Doran Ring if he wants mana sustain, most Juggernauts can go Doran's Shield or Doran's Blade depending on the match-up). I don't think you should be locked in for the rest of the game simply because of your very first decisions. It should be similar to Gangplank's passive where he can pick 1 upgrade then change it through-out the game if needed.

Like he gets the Tomahawk but later on he wants the Gunblade, he should be allowed to change it for a price, not gold perhaps but something he earns throughout the game. He can choose to either upgrade the Tomahawk to a better Tomahawk or he can switch to Gunblade and try to upgrade that instead. I feel like this would create meaningful decisions for the player that allow variety while retaining counter-play and balance.

On to the Q! This is ability is Ultimate status strong. Think Blitzcrank but targeted and it can never miss. This ability is all kinds of broken OP, simply because he can pick the enemy ADC and teleport them into the middle of his team. There is no counter-play to this ability and therefore i think it needs to be changed. Even the ability to teleport an ally is strong, Ryze and Tahm Kench have similar abilities but they require a channel that can be interrupted and they are their ultimates. Maybe if he could only teleport himself or allies or I don't really know, but I do know that this ability is too strong.

The W is slightly confusing hopefully I am understanding it properly. He becomes immobilized and summons 3 spears which he can use to either attack 3 different people or the same person 3 times once the root duration is over, similar to Xerath's ult? Can he root 3 people at the same time? That seems a bit much to be honest unless the duration is like 0.5 seconds or something. If i am understanding the ability correctly, I think it is a pretty well designed ability, but it seems slightly confusing.

The E is cool, I don't like the first part of it though. I don't think the Electric Elemental fits with his theme and with the rest of his kit, the Active part fits more with his design. I think you should remove the Passive part and slightly tweak the Active part. He creates a portal and can summon weapons right? Why not instead of Lightning, which has nothing to do with his theme, he summons a rain of swords or weapons? If you think that is slightly lackluster you can add in that while he is standing in his E he gains a bonus to his Auto-Attacks or something.

I don't really like the R, its like Orianna's ult but it does true damage? It doesn't really fit with his design to be honest, it should have something to do with his core design, he uses portals to summon weapons and teleport things. I don't really have an idea on what you would replace it with, but I would recommend you replace it. However this is just my opinion, I could be wrong.

Overall a well thought out concept, fun read :).

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

OK let's see what we got here

His passive I'm not sure if i'm gonna change cause while it would be cool to change your weapon mid or late game, you're also forcing your adc and your build to change too cause if you change how you play unless your adc has played with you before they're gonna have trouble changing with you.

His Q i'm changing up a little in the fact that i'm not changing what it does since it does fit him, but i'm increasing cooldown and mana so he has to do it smartly otherwise he was to wait a long time to fix the mistake. Also it fits his role as a support as it's 1 of his engage tool

His W is supposed to be his other engage tool as unlike Xerath the difference is that it doesn't have all the range that Xerath does, he also has a longer telegraph than Xerath, so I think that one is fair.

His E I might change it so it's a rain of knives, swords, and spears, the passive was supposed to stick with the support part of him and help him with laning so I might keep it, might change it I dunno.

His R i've heard a lot of people complain about, I will change the true damage but it's supposed to be the part where his support side comes out as it can turn around fights and help save fights however if the enemy team has a bard or they play their cards right they can easily make it a shameful display.

So yeah hoped that cleared something's up for you. [slayer-jinx-wink]

Stephenizgod1 votes

I understand why the Passive is the way it is, it was just a suggestion but its really up to you.

The Q i think should be his ultimate, that ability is far too strong and there is literally zero counterplay to it (banshees and going untargetable are not counterplay).

I like the W, the root duration is too long, but otherwise i like it.

The passive of his E doesn't really fit well with Support though, Zyra is like the only Support champion that summons minions and its part of her core identity. This doesn't really fit well his identity, it comes out of nowhere. There are only a few champions that can summon minions and it is a big part of their identity. Like i said though, the Active part is very good and fits both his identity as a sort of Zone Control Support as well as his theme.

The issue i have is that it comes out of nowhere, it doesn't really fit his theme (not to mention its a balance nightmare, Riot does not like Vacuum abilities like Diana and Orianna). He creates portals that summon items and teleport things, he has a machine that amplifies his capabilities, but suddenly he has a bungie rope thing? I think it just doesn't make much sense. It would make more sense to create a warp zone, if the enemy tries to leave they are teleported back to the center and take damage everytime they try to leave. Something along those lines, that fits with his design.

Of course this is your concept and the only person's opinion that actually matters is yours.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

good idea, might consider using it.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

OK edited the champion hope it's better now.

Stephenizgod1 votes

The Q is a lot better, the one issue i can see with it is that its Cool down at max level is too low. 6 seconds with 40% CDR is 3.6 seconds, its basically a flash every 3.6 seconds. Free range mobility abilities generally have a higher cool down so that enemies can play around it. 8 seconds at max rank is probably a bit more balanced, maybe 7.5 seconds.

The ultimate is pretty cool, really love what you did with my idea :) However 10 seconds is a very very long time to be trapped in a certain area. Can you flash or dash out of the zone without being teleported? That might make it more balanced.

The ability is a bit overloaded though, i like that he can recast it for damage, but i don't like how it silences enemies whenever they are teleported. Instead he should silence them if he recasts it, the length of the silence and the amount of damage he does should be based on the number of enemies he hit with his ult.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

OK the reason the cooldown is so low is to make the player feel like a portalmancer (as I call him) but I will go with making the cooldown longer for balancing reasons

and his ult. I'll change it with your idea of making the enemies silenced when he attacks and reduce the time the discord zone is up.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

ok so i've decided to go with your idea of improving and changing weapons for a currency.

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

A NEW CHALLENGER HAS APPEARED!!! Chénmò yī "The Fury of the Moon" Has clawed his way in http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/c9gy70Lj-a-champion-ive-thought-of-part-2-1 Seriously though here's the beginning of the 2nd part, hope you tell me how to improve it. [slayer-jinx-wink]

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

Howdy buddy, so I got a part 2 done with my champion concepts, I wanna see your opinion on them! So lemme know what you think of each of them after you're done reading them. Suzama "The Fury of the Moon" Claws his way in! http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/c9gy70Lj-a-champion-ive-thought-of-part-2-1 Asama "The Striding Fox" Reappears! http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/itKhzFq3-a-champion-ive-thought-of-part-2-2 Shana "The Predator of the Shadows" Jumps in from the shadows! http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/pArVZluU-a-champion-ive-thought-of-part-2-3 Kel'lon "The Eldrezar Ruler" Establishes himself! http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/AqdZo0XR-a-champion-ive-thought-of-part-2-4 and finally, Linkoln and Kell "The Arcane Half-Demon Protector" Prepare their magic! http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/eZuxEmqA-a-champion-ive-thought-of-part-2-finale So, please read these, it would be very flattering to see your read these and give your thoughts on them! [slayer-jinx-wink]

CrazyBear19871 votes

for his passive ever consider that he starts of with like "Basic Blade" as an item in his inventory, and he can buy watever he wants, but if he wants his attack to change, then he can buy a recipe maybe for 50gold or something to change his "basic blade" to be forged into something else.

but reading on his passive has no relation with his other portal abilities, ever think of making that for a seperate champion and giving this one a portal based passive?

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

I'm guessing so, but the thing is that he usually uses his portals to summon other items (like spears and other weapons) and from what I've heard the majority do think the passive is the best part of this champion, so in the end, while I see where you're coming from, I think i'll stick with the current passive I've got, but I will acknowledge where you're coming from.

CrazyBear19871 votes

{quoted}

I'm guessing so, but the thing is that he usually uses his portals to summon other items (like spears and other weapons) and from what I've heard the majority do think the passive is the best part of this champion, so in the end, while I see where you're coming from, I think i'll stick with the current passive I've got, but I will acknowledge where you're coming from.

Okay, go for it, kinda getting the fate stay night vibe with the champion now that i look at it XD

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

Okay, go for it, kinda getting the fate stay night vibe with the champion now that i look at it XD

Erm, sorry don't get what you're referencing, but thanks for understanding at least! [slayer-jinx-wink]

CrazyBear19871 votes

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=opK9pvmE-lM

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

OOOOOOH OKAY, that's awesome, and yeah think that except he can summon gunblades, spears, sheilds, guns, knives etc.

CrazyBear19871 votes

[slayer-jinx-catface]

TheShadowyOwl1 votes

Anyway, thanks for the response and comment, and I hope you check out more of the champion concepts! [slayer-jinx-wink]

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