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[Champion Concept] Torrance, the Last Son of Zaun

THE RlVER KlNG·3/13/2017, 10:33:57 PM·17 votes·3,538 views

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Obligatory Space Marine Type Dude by Ian McQue on Scotch Corner.

##Theme: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6T9hOWYH0o8

This is my entry for the March CCOS. Any and all feedback is appreciated!

CCOS Review for Ryka

#OVERVIEW

Attack ■■■■■■■■□□ - [8] Defense ■■□□□□□□□□ - [2] Ability ■■■■■■□□□□ - [5] Difficulty ■■■■■■□□□□ - [6]

Name: Torrance Strahlung **Gender: **Male Race: Human Allegiance: Himself Alignment: Chaotic Evil Class: Marksman Role: Bottom

A legendary veteran of Zaun's many bloody guild wars, Torrance Strahlung turned his war-weary eyes to the ruling Chem-Baron elite after an experimental hextech explosion killed his entire squad in a tragic case of friendly fire. When the corpulently corrupt magnates attempted to cover up the untimely deaths of their own, Torrance's thirst for revenge bubbled to a boiling point. He and a terrorist group of insurgents called the Sons of Zaun began a shadow war against Zaun's upper echelons of society, raiding hextech factories on each level of the undercity to unleash devastating holocaust on those he blamed for his squad's death. The rogue ex-soldier's psyche rapidly crumbled, and his perception of the world shattered into that of black and white - him on one side and the whole world on the other. Murdering his co-radicals en masse using the same weaponry that took the lives of his squadmates, soon Torrance became the final Son of Zaun, warped and twisted by his intense misanthropy towards everyone and everything else. Evading capture from wolfmen and Piltover officials alike, the Green Death haunts the nightmares of Zaun's ruling elite with explosive glee, determined to destroy the city he once loved, or die in the attempt. In-game, Torrance is a roaming marksman that ruthlessly manipulates the map to his advantage, pumping his targets full of deadly radiation and watching as they die a slow and painful death before him.

#STATISTICS

|Stat-------------------------------|Value at Levels 1-18| |- |Health:| 545 - 1888 |Health Regen:| 6 - 15.4 |Mana:| 300 - 1116 |Mana Regen:| 6 - 19.6 |Attack Damage:| 63 - 112 |Attack Speed:| 0.625 - 0.875 |Armor:| 21.4 - 80.9 |Magic Resistance:| 30 |Attack Range:| 550 | |Movement Speed:| 330 |

#ABILITIES

##OVERVIEW

[P] Depleted Hextech Shells: Torrance's basic attacks deal reduced damage and operate on an ammo system, but apply stacks of Radiation that decay over time, dealing bonus true damage per stack and applying grievous wounds.

[Q] Unstable Compound Grenade: Torrance fires a grenade that deals magic damage and applies Radiation. The grenade leaves behind a field that slows and applies further stacks of Radiation to enemies within.

[W] Eye of Zaun: Torrance fires a flare that briefly reveals the target area. If he retrieves the flare, the cooldown is greatly reduced.

[E] Hextech Exocharge: Torrance places a charge on a nearby piece of terrain, up to several at once. Torrance can reactivate this ability to detonate the charges, dealing damage and knocking nearby enemies back while also destroying that segment of terrain for a duration.

[R] Armageddon: Torrance channels before firing a massive, radioactive bomb to the target area. The bomb deals magic damage, detonates charges, and applies full stacks of Radiation to enemies hit. The explosion radius leaves behind a corrupted zone that slows and applies Radiation stacks to enemies within.

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##Ability Notes:

  • Torrance cannot destroy edges of the map, and will only partially destroy certain thick segments of terrain. If it is too large for Talon to flip over, then generally Torrance will not be able to destroy it as well.

http://i.imgur.com/zDIARnr.png

##Ability Notes:

  • The field the bomb leaves behind is clearly indicated (like Nasus's Spirit Fire or the indicators for Ziggs and Galio ultimates), and can be seen through the Fog of War.

Here is the Google Doc for the kit. I will do my best to keep the images updated with any changes I make, but otherwise please refer to the Doc for judging.

#QUOTES

Torrance has a voice akin to Temuera Morrison.

##Upon Selection:

  • The sirens are music to my ears, loves.

##Upon being Banned:

  • Bleedin' cowards, the lot o' you.

##Upon Game Start:

  • This place'll be nothing but a crater soon.
  • I'll put a bullet in all o' their heads - but I'll start with those five buggers first.
  • The fiery wastes o' hell are nothing compared to what I've got strapped to my back.
  • I'll enjoy torching the place on the way out.

##Movement:

  • Wish they'da let me bring my cigars.
  • Can't hear nothin' in this damn helmet.
  • Life is the sweet smell o' napalm and the screams o' the dyin'.
  • Ain't nothin' more to life than a gun and cartidge o' bullets.
  • This place sure smells a lot better than Zaun.
  • Good-for-nothin' cowards.
  • A good pump o' lead and radiation will do 'em some good.
  • Heh. This what the fat cats call a battlefield?
  • I'll show them a thing or two about war.
  • You can almost smell the hypocrisy.
  • War is ugly, just like Zaun.
  • Every now and then a man's got to stop and smell the radiation.
  • The next blighter t'move gets a bullet to the head.
  • This place reeks o' untapped potential.
  • Never judge a man by where he got his gun - only by how he holds it.
  • I'm the face of apocalypse, love.
  • I'm not what you would call a reasonable man.
  • Ever wonder how a war starts? Too bad, I only care how they end.
  • Zaun is already a hole in the ground - I'm here to make that hole deeper.
  • Speak loudly and carry a big bomb.
  • I'm an agent of chaos.
  • The sky is only as beautiful as the rockets that fill her.
  • I'll fill this place with the ashes of a thousand bombs.
  • Why bother cleaning up when you can destroy the ashes too?.
  • I trusted other people once. It didn't end well.
  • I'm gonna turn this world upside down, and then set it all on fire.
  • I am the world-ender, and my time has come.
  • Let's blow this joint.
  • I'm a soldier of misfortune.
  • The dead are already taken care of - it's the livin' you have to help along.
  • Zaun's got a disease, and I'm the doctor.
  • You'll soon find I'm a diferent breed of soldier.
  • I'll rid this world of Zaun's fllth.
  • Bombs and bullets always do the trick.
  • Zaun'll look a lot better as a smoking ruin.
  • The best battles are the one's you don't see coming.
  • I'm a man o' rare conviction.
  • Global annihilation is the only answer to life's problems.
  • I'll enact a soldier's vengeance.
  • Let's get a move on.
  • I'm tired of standing around.
  • Words are tricky bastards.
  • Let's go, go, go!
  • A real soldier never quits!
  • I smell enemy hostiles.
  • The enemy is that way!
  • Zaun'll be nothing when I'm done with her.
  • Time to blow something up.
  • It's high time I killed something already.
  • Pressing on.
  • I'm the last true son of Zaun.
  • The chem-barons fear what I've become.
  • I'll wreak devastation on Zaun.
  • No one is safe from me.

##Attacking:

  • I can always smell a coward.
  • You'll be dead soon enough, soldier.
  • You're everything that's wrong with this godsforsaken world.
  • Why don't you try running away? I like puttin' my bullets in the back.
  • My bullets come special, you know.
  • There's a lot more than lead and metal in my bullets, love.
  • You'll find I'm a tough man to bargain with.
  • I'll turn your insides dead and green, soldier.
  • Stand back there, now. Let me get a good shot.
  • If my bullets don't kill you, the radiation will.
  • I can smell the sickness on you already.
  • It hurts, don't it, love?
  • You'll die in the same way as my brothers.
  • I'm only sorry I can't give you a quicker death.
  • You're not the first I've killed, and you won't be the last.
  • Easy now. I've got you in my sights.
  • Let's get this over with, I've got other things to do.
  • A coward by any other name is just as craven.
  • Run and hide....the bombs will find you either way.
  • Live, die.....you sure as hell won't excape without a few scars.
  • The stench of death is on you already.
  • Heads up!
  • I will erase you.
  • Over here, love.
  • The sickness inside of you grows.
  • You're already dead, love.
  • A slow death will be your reward.
  • Bloody cowards always get their due.
  • A dying green world will be the last thing you ever see.
  • I don't give a damn how you die - I just want to see it happen.
  • I want to see the light fade in your eyes.
  • I'm gonna pump your guts full o' lead - and some other things too.
  • Radiation ain't ever pretty, love.
  • I've found you, and no one ever escapes from me.
  • Every bullet is another step closer to total annihilation.
  • I'll have my revenge.
  • This is for my brothers.
  • Take it like a man!
  • This is what war is all about.

##Taunt:

  • When you die, you'd best take it like a man.
  • To me, you're just another green-veined corpse.
  • Didn't know this place let in snivelin' pansies.
  • Stand up straight, soldier. I'm talkin' to you.
  • When the sirens start blarin', you'll run like all the rest.
  • Best get a move on if you wanna to live, soldier. This place won't be around for much longer.

##When an Enemy Champion Taunts Nearby:

  • Some mouth you've got on ya, eh?
  • You won't be talkin' when the siren's are a-wailin', love.
  • Keep on runnin' your trap there. Makes me even gladder to put a bullet in your skull.
  • Ooooh, look at you, and your fancy little trash-talk.
  • Put a plug in it, you mouthy bastard.

##Taunting a Ahri Ahri:

  • Hey, pretty lady....how's about you and me get a drink sometime? Uh.....you know, before I've dropped a bomb on your head, of course.

##Taunting an Enemy Blitzcrank Blitzcrank:

  • Big ugly robots like you die just the same as a man.
  • I've killed bigger 'bots than you.

##Taunting a Brand Brand:

  • You and I will get along nicely, I can tell.
  • Different type of apocalypse, but still pretty good, love.
  • Yeah, pretty sure the world will end in fire. Mine, though, not yours.

##Taunting an Enemy Camille Camille:

  • Oi, Scissorlegs, gotta keep up!
  • All that tech and you still can't keep up with me.
  • Your hextech crap won't keep you safe from total annihilation.
  • Oh, I hate you most of all. I'm definitely killing you first.

##Taunting an Enemy DrMundo Dr. Mundo:

  • Big ugly bastard. Stay out of my way.
  • Sure, go where you please. I'm taking this whole place out anyway.

##Taunting an Enemy Ekko Ekko:

  • I fought to protect brats like you. Be thankful for that.
  • Yeah, you've got time. As much as I give you, that is.
  • Keep rewinding, street rat. I'll just kill you again, and again, and again.

##Taunting an Enemy Galio Galio:

  • Damn, you're big. Killed bigger.
  • Ain't nothing magical about a bigass bomb, gargoyle.

##Taunting a Heimerdinger Hazmat Heimerdinger:

  • Ay, you've got the right idea.

##Taunting an Enemy Illaoi Illaoi:

  • Pray all you want, love. Your gods won't save you from the apocalypse.

##Taunting a Kled Kled:

  • You may be Noxian, but the world could use a few more soldiers like you.
  • You're a furry little prick, but damn do I respect you.
  • You think I could I have a go on that lizard friend o' yours sometime?

##Taunting an Enemy Champion From Piltover:

  • You don't belong here, Piltie.
  • When I'm done with Zaun, your city will be next on my list.
  • You're almost as useless as you are arrogant.
  • Pilties. I hate those guys.
  • When I drop a bomb on your head, will you still be a pretentious prick?

##Taunting an Enemy Singed Singed:

  • Only a coward runs away.
  • You're the vilest and worst man in Zaun - and that's a pretty sought-after title.
  • You're everything that's wrong with the world, Singed.

##Taunting an Enemy Twitch Twitch:

  • Zaun's a city of dogs and rats. You're king amongst 'em.
  • I'm gonna cook you up in a radioactive soup, rat! Don't worry, though - I like to play with my food.
  • Filthy little mongrel.
  • Ughk! You smell even worse in person....er, rat.

##Taunting an Enemy Viktor Viktor:

  • Bugger off, cyborg.
  • All them bright lights and metal won't stop me from blowin' your brains out, Viktor!
  • You and your delusions put Zaun down a path o' no return.

##Taunting an Enemy Warwick Warwick:

  • Here, doggie.
  • I prefer my hounds well-trained, and on a leash.
  • Run away, mutt, 'fore I put a bullet between your ears.
  • You killed some of my brothers years ago. I'm here to return the favor.

##Taunting a Ziggs Ziggs:

  • Keep up the good work, yordle.

##Joke:

  • Not really one for jokes. I'll be laughing when you're all dead, though.
  • The only thing that's funny is that you'll all be dead pretty soon.
  • Heard a joke from a soldier down in the Lower Districts once....he died before he could get to the punch line, though.

##When an Enemy Champion Jokes Nearby:

  • Yeah, you're laughing now....not so much when the bombs start dropping, though.
  • Oh, so that's what people find funny nowadays.
  • Yeah, really funny. So funny, I forgot to laugh.....
  • Hey, that was actually pretty good.

##Upon casting Recall:

  • I'll be back, don't you worry a bit!

##Upon Reloading:

  • See, I don't operate on this whole 'infinite ammo' thing a lot of you guys have got going on.
  • Alright now, count 'em up now......
  • Alright, and you slide 'em in like this.....
  • Careful now. These babies are radioactive.
  • Hurry up, now! Wars don't stop for no one!

##Upon an Enemy Champion Dying from Radiation:

  • Told'ya I'd getcha, love.
  • All's fair in war and, uh, war, love.
  • One down, nine to go.
  • Now you know how my brothers felt.

##Upon Death:

  • Ughk.....you got me.
  • Now I'm with my brothers.....
  • Zaun.....is not.....yet.....safe......

##Upon Casting Unstable Compound Grenade:

  • Here's a little present from me, to you.
  • Heads' up, loves.
  • Hah! This is only a little baby one!

##Upon Casting Eye of Zaun:

  • Show me the way, beauty.
  • Show me the enemy!
  • Put a little fear into their hearts.

##Upon Placing a Hextech Exocharge:

  • Here you go, little beauty.
  • You're a fun little bastard, arencha?
  • Wait here....'till I tell you to blow up!

##Upon Detonating One or More Hextech Exocharges:

  • Bomb's away!
  • Stand clear, loves!
  • I told'ya I'd send this place sky-high.

##Upon casting Armageddon: As promised, a nuclear siren begins to play on this ability's first cast.

  • Ooooh, you all are really in for it now.....
  • Here them sirens? They're the last you every will.
  • This place is about to go up in smoke - and fire, and radiation, and death.
  • Time for the ace up my sleeve.
  • Say your prayers now, bastards.

##Upon firing Armageddon:

  • Incoming!
  • Say hello to my brothers - on the other side.
  • Here's the big one, loves!
  • As promised.....
  • Whole world's watching now!
  • I'll see you all in hell!

#CHANGELOG

#V1.0 - 3/13/17 Posted

48 Comments

Raxistaicho3/15/2017, 1:23:24 AM4 votes

So, some thoughts. His lore's an interesting take on what Zaun's way of life might do to a person. He's kind of like the ultimate twisted product of Zaun, beyond even Warwick. Though I think him being able to elude capture from both Warwick and Camille is a bit unlikely.

Kitwise, everything about him revolves around his radiation passive, so unlike other adcs he doesn't burst you down so much as he whithers you away. That's interesting. It might be more thematic though if his passive damage ignored a percent of armor. Buying some chainmail isn't protecting you from radiation, of course, lol. Overall he's more of an attacker/caster hybrid, as he won't really beat any pure attacker in a boxing match, so naturally his abilities are more akin to what you see on mages than on adcs.

His Q is great for him, some poke and works with his passive, and it CAN give him a little breathing room with the slow. His W fits him as a soldier and a radical, but is INCREDIBLY strong, being persistent vision in an area. His E fits him perfectly (mad bomber, lay traps), but the terrain destruction probably needs to go. That sort of thing opens up cans of worms in this game. The tower damage is a nice counterbalance to his aa's doing below-average damage.

His ultimate... really it strikes me as being his Q but bigger. A nuke fits him nicely, but Echoing and I are in agreement that it would be cooler if her had to instead paint a target for it to strike over a duration. His team would have incentive to protect him while he finishes, then he lays down the thunder. The lingering radiation field sounds really cool on paper, but there's a huge number of issues that spring up, the easiest one I could think of being he could blast the enemy nexus with it to basically be Proxy Singed without actually going to the base to proxy.

He's pretty strong, but counterplay is simple: just beat the crap out of him. Almost any other burst mage, adc, skirmisher, or bruiser could take him 1v1 when he's alone thanks to his lack of burst (as a side note, this is another good reason to make him ignore defenses with his radiation, it gives him a better chance at winning longer fights), but if he's got some protection he can cause a lot of wasting damage.

Overall, though, I think this is a very interesting concept and it's something new to the game. Also, he's a unique spin to adcs in general beyond "build crit and crit them to death."

Could you do me a favor sometime and review Ryka, please? Thanks!

http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/EXWLdIbO-champion-concept-ryka-the-demon-of-noxus

Ýones3/14/2017, 4:59:27 PM4 votes

-6 upvotes? This is f*cked up. Anyways, you can have my upvote. :) Also, the video of Torrance's theme is not avainable.

We haven't had a champion who uses nuclear bombs (sorry ziggs), and this Torrance seems to fill that thematic really well. But if the area left by his ult cripples enemies in it (which is what I guess means grounded) it would be unfair to play against. Grounded effect should be easy to outplay or dodge, not just thrown into a massive zone for 180-120 seconds. It was tested on Taliyah, but it felt really unfair to play against so the earthquake ult was scrapped. Cassiopeia has a grounded effect in her Miasma, but the area lasts for 5 seconds and the area is easy to leave. Torrance can throw the ult to a lane and it would completely nullify all mobility until his ult comes up again.

Away from the ult, his kit feels really fleshed out and his E is really fun looking. Passive though feels like we've seen stuff like it in the game, it's a damage stacking passive that is applied by abilities.

Feel free to clarify what you meant with "crippled" if I was wrong.

ZURELL3/31/2017, 4:31:50 AM3 votes

i appreciate the quotes more than anything on a champion. the claymore type ability is unique. i dont see the verisimilitude in the terrain being destroyed but regaining form after a time. but i still like it

Derpifier3/13/2017, 11:29:19 PM3 votes

I like it alot, other than some spelling mistakes that were probably just typos, you did extremely good, well done.

fugertech3/15/2017, 7:54:43 PM3 votes

Before I review this champion, you have to tell me if the Sons of Zaun thing is a Metal Gear reference. I need to know.

THE RlVER KlNG3/31/2017, 1:48:04 AM2 votes

cool -6

THE RlVER KlNG3/14/2017, 2:08:59 AM2 votes

Bump because I don't think people understand how much work I put into my concepts

EDIT: So far this concept has gotten 17 total downvotes. I would really appreciate if people would step forward and tell me what they find so awful about it, since I doubt they even bothered to look at it.