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[Champion Concept] Valen, the Displaced Professional

Nikushimi Zero··15 votes·3,047 views

Health: 530-2100 Health Regen: 5-19 Mana: 350-950 Mana Regen: 6-23 Armor: 25-83 Magic Resist: 32.1-53.4 Attack Damage: 61-105 Attack Speed: 0.65-1.01 Melee: 125 Movement Speed: 355 Primary Role: Assassin Secondary Role: Mage

Highly mobile champion. Excelling in fighting mages and chasing champions down. Lacks in upfront fighting and with his mobility taken away is easy pickings. Please up vote if you enjoy my champion. ^_^ Don't forget to leave feedback below if you so desire! I appreciate you taking the time to look over my champion and give him the time of day. Thank you!

Background: "Valen Ravenore, do you take Ilia Moon to be your loftily wedded wife?" the priest asked within a small private alcove.

"I do," the lucky man of the hour stated with a smile on his face.

"And do you..." The priest began to ask.

"I do," The lithe woman's voice, that of an angels interrupted and then looked down in shyness smiling. Her bright red hair glowing in the sunlight as if rays of the very goddesses shinned down upon her.

The priest smiled and nodded, "Then by the power invested in me by the gods and the church I now pronounce you man and wife. You may kiss the bride." And what a kiss it was.

Her soft lips brushed his as he took her in his arms. Her warmth filling him with a feeling beyond any other. It was the best feeling, and the best day in his life. He wished it would never end. They were quite young, and still are when they married. It was a bittersweet moment.

And for a time....it did. Then, lightning struck and I awoke with a start. The storm had moved in and I was bound for the manor. Pulling up the cowl to my face I looked out into the night as the rain and lightning kept on going outside the cave. Ilia....my love, I am on my way.

The night was born of the cruelest of fates. For a week I have been tracking. Moving from place to place always one step behind. Not today. The men I have gone through and the energy I have placed into this would not go to waste. I have finally cornered them. They never approved of us, and then they did the most deplorable thing. A bounty on both of our heads.....alive, or dead.

I was a professional. A man who did contracts for a living. It was what my families fortune was based on. The great Ravnore's. Grand contractors and expert professionals. They were hired to do jobs others found too difficult or dangerous to do. I was their greatest achievement. The best within the business and you'd bet there were a lot of people after me for the work I have performed.

Ilia's family, the Moon's. They were a wealthy high to do royalty in the kingdom. She was to marry some far away prince, but was once kidnapped and I was the one hired to rescue her. Her husband to be hid behind his kingdom and refused to come to her aid, and so....she left with me. After traversing the world to get her to her husband to be we fell in love and both proposed marriage. Our families disapproved due to prior engagements and the difference in status even if the Ravenore's were high in the world we were still contractors. Bound by oath and tradition. So, in secret we wed, and this was found out. The priest was tortured and killed for the information.

My family tried to restrain and hold me, but it did not work. The manor lay before me. Guards patrolled and the area was dense with forest. The first guard to fall was in a pack of six. Knife across his throat led to a knife throw to the back of the heads in front of me. Swiftly moving in and grabbing a second dagger from my belt the knives slide easily into the necks of two more followed by both under the chin of the final one. Vocal cords severed on all of them. A silent execution.

Within the manor came a sight I had not anticipated. "Ilia!" I couldn't help but scream as I saw my loves body floating in the air. Her body almost free of all clothing. Blood dripping and coating her. She had a hallowed and sunken look to her eyes. The guard I had just slight the throat of I threw down over the balcony of the second floor I had got to. Jumping over and running to her. Stopped short and thrown back by a field of force. Groggily getting up to the sounds of laughter. Chanting filled the air.

Our families were in league with very powerful sorcerers. Enemies of our families, but upon a truce lay our lives. Should they capture and or kill us then they would no longer be hunted by our families unless they crossed them again. The Sentinels of Irinith, the realms of darkness and despair. They chanted and circled around Ilia's body.

I flailed and rammed by dagger against the force. Trying to get through. That's when our families appeared above us on the opposite balcony. Guards swarmed the area and I glared down my father. Lightning struck outside and the rain poured harder. I raged at my father and beat against the force. With a cruel smile and a twist of his fist I heard a snap and looked up in horror. Ilia, bent in two as her blood poured down and demonic looking metal catalysts came forth from the ground. A ritual. I knew the ritual but couldn't believe my family, let alone Ilia's, would allow this. Summoning of the demon lords of Irinith. Gathering all my power I forged into the force and broke it. My dagger stabbing a hole through it. All my life I learned to fight magic, and all that energy now within my dagger. I pushed ahead as I felt my body begin to be ripped apart. The flesh feeling as if it was being pulled away, and in fact. It was.

In an instant as I reached forward towards Ilia's body lightning struck through the roof and into the catalysts and my dagger. Shredding the magic and exploding outwards. Decimating the manor, and the majority of the surrounding area. As I knelt there with Ilia in my arms, her hand to my cheek she smiled, "I knew you'd come. Don't blame yourself. They had poisoned and killed me long ago...only prolonging to show you pain. I love you. Live. Live and be well. I shall always be by your side." With that she placed her pendant necklace around his neck and continued to smile.

With that her body began to disintegrate in my arms. My pain knew no bounds and into the storm I yelled and raged my pain. My flesh beginning to disintegrate as well. I looked down across the way to see that my fathers own magic, and that of the Sentinels had saved the majority of them. My eyes glared into my fathers. They turned, and left.

As I knelt staring at my hands where she had been. As I thought of her she appeared before me. Smiling. I was confused, but I smiled back. Within moments she vanished into the air. Then, the pain. I roared as it hit my body. I saw my body rip apart and become like lightning. Energy surged and tore apart my very being, and before I knew it I was no more.

My eyes fluttered open and I awoke in a strange place. They call it Runeterra. My appearance had changed, and so did my body and abilities. Energy surged through me and I felt a connection to all magic within this world. Sensing it pulsing and aching. The scars from the energy bore upon my face and the new found power bore inside me. My heart burned with a fire unlike any other. Again, she appeared before me smiling. "Are you....here?" She smiled and nodded. With conviction in my heart I set out in this world to find a way back, and avenge our betrayal. Until that day comes I make my home here, in Runeterra. Perhaps....there is a place here I can learn of ways home.

The picture(s) used I do not own and have found on google images via searches. The credit for pictures go to their respective owners. I claim no rights to them. Only using them as a point of comparison and reference for my concept. Thank you.

Appearance: http://fantasyinspiration.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/08/piofoks-3.jpg The only difference in this picture from my character is that my character is right handed (Not left), but does use daggers in both hands in his lore. However, he attacks with his weapon in his right. His nose in the picture is too big on the bridge part. My characters nose has less of a pronounced bridge. His hair used to be brown/Dirty blonde, but now in addition to this color he has three streaks of silver/white running through it. Think much like Rogue from Xmen. The amulet around his neck hers, and infused to him and her. The amulet held her spirit/being inside of it, and is locked by magic unable to be taken off by anyone but him. This of course he never does. On the dagger in the picture are initials. I'm guessing the artist and not the character. To whoever the artist is this is a very cool picture and I hope you're not offended I am using the picture. I take no rights as stated. So, the initials are not on my characters dagger. Even if it is the character in the picture initials.

Age: 23 Height: 5' 10" Weight: 150lbs almost all muscle. Built lean and lithe. No over bulkiness.

Weapon: Uses the dagger you see in the picture as his weapon in his right hand. His abilities he gained gives him control over electricity and matter of himself and that around him which he controls with his own magic and that he gained from the tear in the magic veil within his world when the lightning struck.

Passive: http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/resource_images/9/icons_8819_btn.jpg Overcharge- From the failed ritual came great power for Valen. Each ability landed upon an enemy builds charges which are stored. This is shown by a growing electrical sparks across his body.

Each charge gives Valen's abilities cooldown reduction as well as giving him bonus movement and attack speed. Max charges of 5.

Per Charge: Attack Speed 2% Movement Speed 3% Cooldown Reduction 5%

Upon max charges the next basic attack or ability gains added bonuses. This uses the charges and starts everything over again.

This ability bonuses gained at max charges starts with a base and gains power each rank of his ult where applicable.

Basic Attack: 20/30/40/50 (+50% AP) bonus magic damage. Power Leech: Upon hitting enemy champion with Power Leech the target is stunned for 1.5s. Dispersion: Upon activating this ability Overcharge increases damage by 20/30/40/50 and knocks to the side the enemies in its path. Stunning them instead of slowing by .25/.5/.75/1s. Electrical Surge: Upon activating this ability overcharge adds 50/70/90/110 (+50% AD) to his hits while Surge is active as bonus magic damage. By Your Side: When summoned Ilia's "Electro Surge" is activated with an extended 200 range and a 0.5s stun to enemies hit.

Q http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/resource_images/12/icons_11963_btn.jpg Power Leech: Valen dashes to target champion and damages them for 50/70/90/110/130 (+70% AD) physical damage as well as damaging and siphoning 10/20/30/40/50% of the damage dealt physically from the opponents mana healing his own mana for the amount stolen.

Cost: 90/100/110/120/130 Cooldown: 30/27/25/23/21s Range: Any enemy champion within a 600 unit radius around him.

Note: When using this ability he flashes behind the target and stabs them with his two dagger which drains the energy, taking out the second dagger upon reaching the target. This is shown by an electrical current going from the enemy to him through his daggers and arms. When he flashes it is shown by him disintegrating into lightning and particles of himself and re-assembling behind target with both daggers out and then stabbing them.

W http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/resource_images/12/icons_11644_btn.jpg Dispersion: Valen disassembles himself into electrical particles, becoming untargetable and dashing a certain distance away. Enemies within his path take 30/50/70/90/110 (+50% AP) as magic damage. This also places a distortion effect upon enemies hit. Slowing them 20/23/25/27/30% for 3 seconds. Enemies hit while the distortion effect is active take 30/50/70/90/110 true damage. Distortion cannot be placed on the same enemy again after it has run out or been activated until 3 seconds have passed.

Cost: 70/75/80/85/90 Cooldown: 23/21/19/17/15s Range: 400 units in any direction.

Note: Using this ability allows Valen to cover distances and also head through walls such. This ability is his main means of escape and also engagement. Allowing him to dive and escape for whatever need should arise. Also, a visual effect of this as well is as he disperses himself the many daggers among his body are brought out and suspended around him spinning along an electrical current. This is what damages enemies mixed with the electricity and distortion effect.

E http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/resource_images/15/icons_14835_btn.jpg Electrical Surge: Valen channels the electrical energy inside of him causing him to become a conductive source for a few seconds. This electrical surge increases his movement speed by 5/10/15/20/25% while active. Enemies within the radius he is able to dash to causing him to deal his basic attack damage on hit.

Enemies inside the radius are slowed by 10/13/15/17/20% while within it.

Cost: 80/85/90/95/100 Cooldown: 25/23/21/19/17s Duration: 3/4/5s Radius: 500 unit radius around him.

Note: This ability is used mainly for closing the gap on enemies. Allowing him to quickly move to an opponent and trap them inside as he is able to follow them quickly within the radius around him. This can also be chained to dash between multiple opponents within the radius allowing him to quickly chase enemies by dashing to the farthest one from him and closest one to the enemy.

R http://www.hiveworkshop.com/forums/resource_images/16/icons_15816_btn.jpg By Your Side: Activating this brings forth Ilia's Spirit in an electrical/physical form. For the next 45s she mimics his abilities (And ranks of them) and acts as a companion/champion. She remains within 700 units of him, and attacks the same target he is attacking, but will switch targets to those who are attacking him should there be more than one. She uses her own AD and AP when using abilities she mimics.

Cost: 100 Cooldown: 100/90/80s Range/Radius: She is summoned directly by his side once activated and has a 700 area radius in which she can attack and use abilities. She can stray (Follow) champions outside this area for 300 units if she is aggroed, but returns instantly should the champion she follows leaves the area or she reaches the stray range.

Note: Enemies will be chased by her much like how Tibbers chases people, but should she stray too far from Valen she is brought back to his side instantly in a flash of lightning. Her max stray range is 300 units outside the 700 unit range she already has. This is to prevent champions from just cheesing her by getting her to go under turrets or lure her away from him and just gank. As well as constant baiting by having her in a constant state of running to them then running back within range of Valen and back again as she will attack those who attack her, but prioritize those attack Valen. This effectively gives her a max range of 1000

Ilia's Stats: Health: 1300/2000/2700 Mana: N/A Attack Damage: 100/150/200 magic damage. This is her basic attack, as well as her AD. Ability Power: 100/150/200 Attack Speed: 0.8/0.9/1 Melee Range: 150 (She uses a rapier of electricity as her weapon) Movement Speed: 355 Armor: 40/60/80 Magic Resist: 40/60/80 Gold: 100

Information on Ilia: She takes 50% reduced damage from turrets. Is considered a champion for targeting purposes. She is AI controlled, but has priorities. Much like attack enemies attack Valen and staying close to Valen. Never straying to far, and "teleporting" back to him should she go too far. Her basic attacks cannot be blocked, parried, or dodged. They can however miss. She mimics all of Valen's abilities except for his E. In place of his E she has her own ability that acts as a passive damager much like Tibbers passive damage except slightly different. Cooldown starts when she is summoned. Much like with Tibbers.

Ilia's "E" ability, a passive more than anything. Electro Pulse: Every 3 seconds she lets out a pulse within a 300 unit radius around her. This damages enemies and minions alike for 90/110/130 magic damage.

CCOS: June Bonus: Legendary/Ultimate Skin: Shifter Valen: Valen takes on a futuristic like look. Keeping the hat of course. The color scheme is much different. Taking on tones of silver and dark blue. Over his right eye he gains a scouter like eye piece. His hair is longer and tied in a long ponytail that lays out behind his back over his clothes. His trench coat becomes more form fitting and on the shoulders are hextech looking pauldrons of silver with blue glowing wires placed in the seems. Underneath his trench coat is a form fitting metallic/robotic looking shirt. In the center is the amulet/pendant of his wife which looks much like a crystal now with the blue glowing lining going up around to the back of the shirt. His pants have taken on the same appearance as his shirt. Same with his boots. Pretty much imagine it like this. Underneath his trench coat he is pretty much Ironman looking in appearance except more form fitting and less bulky. All in all his look is very futuristic with robotic/pristine look about him.

His weapons (Daggers) have a thin metal that is shaped much like his previous daggers. From this thinner metal comes an energized beam around it to make his daggers. So it would be the same size as his previous daggers, but with an energy like blade instead. The color of which is light blue.

His skills have changed to resemble his "Shifter" and futuristic style.

Q: His Q changes in that a portal opens behind him that he puts his hand through. It then pulls him in and the portal appears behind the champion he targeted. Stabbing him with his weapons. Sucking the energy from them which now instead of lightning it is like blue, black, and purple particles being absorbed.

W: His W pretty much becomes a black hole. He brings up his left hand and jumps. His left hand creates the black hole and he jumps into it. Propelling him in the direction. As he jumps he tosses his daggers out which orbit around the black hole. He appears on the other side and opens his trench coat. The daggers return to their places inside his coat.

E: Upon activation a pulse goes out and he floats. Around him becomes a vortex that distorts the air. Much like how it looks to be seeing things on a hot day when the air becomes distorted. This becomes his anti gravity sphere of sorts.

R: Ilia takes on a Cortana like appearance. Not actually looking like Cortana though. She is still herself in appearance. I use Cortana to how her spirit looks. Much like the A.I. Cortana. Ilia's own attacks (Even though they mimic Valen's) become much like a glitch in a computer system. She distorts and appears behind people and flies through the air for the W as displaced fragments. Her "E" becomes a burst of anti gravity that looks much like the E of Valen.

So, that's the best I can do. Hope I didn't mess that up too bad XD Not entirely sure how legendary/ultimate skins work, but I think I did alright. XD I think it would be an awesome appearance for my champion.

Strategy and Play: Valen is a versatile laner. Capable of being in either of the three lanes. Jungling is not his specialty due to his low sustainability. His high mobility is key while in one on one fights or team fights. A tanky Valen can instigate an encounter with his W into his E. This will put him in the middle of a gank and or team fight against several enemies, but is best used at chasing enemies down.

Valen excells at chasing enemies down. His abilities help with this. A Q->E combo is his bread and butter. His Q lets him get close, and his E lets him stay close dealing damage to the slowed target. Enemies trying to flee while within his E's radius allows him to dash to them to keep them within range.

Valen however should watch out for the MR tanks, as well as those with higher DPS and range than him. Allowing Cho'Gath to knock him up, silence, and get close will be deadly for Valen. The stuns of Lux, Taric, and others will allow time for the enemy to close in and finish him quickly. Fiddle with his fear, siphon, and silence is Valen's worst fear. However deadly Valen is the setup Fiddle has is especially more deadly to him when it lands. Countering Valen is a matter of countering the way you would counter Talon, Master Yi, and Ryze.

Valen plays much like Talon, Ryze, and Master Yi.

Quotes/sayings/voice stuffs/random information: Voice: His voice sounds much like Twisted Fates, but without the southern drawl and words that twisted fate uses. The tone is the same, but accent is different. His accent has a small hint of Irish and British. He also has much of a sadistic, sarcastic personality. He is protective and honorable as well. Even if he has played part as an assassin and cold blooded killer before. Also, he is very cocky and confident in his abilities.

Upon Selection: "From my world, to yours." "I see. So you need a Professional huh?" "We are one."

Moving: "Yes, yes. Left right, left right. What are you? My old man?" Grunts in acknowledgement "On the way. Calm yourself." "Called for a professional?"

Taunts: "It takes years of training to get this good....oh, you think I meant me? No, I mean until you get as good as me." 1 second pause "Ah, who am I kidding. You can't catch up to me. I was born this good." "You call that a weapon?" Takes out all of his many daggers and whirls them around along an electrical path "These are weapons." "Come on. I once fought a 200 year old lady with a crippled body who put up a better fight then you. Good times. Good times. Damn witches...."

Jokes: "So....a joke huh?" Taps his chin and smiles then shrugs "You already make a great joke." "Death is an old friend. Embrace them. Not my friend though....They owe me money."

Attacking: "Only a professional can be this good." "Come on. Try at least!" "This shall be easy."

Comments: "Nobody touches the hat." (Except Ilia, but you get the gist. :P)

Dying: Upon death he doesn't exactly "Die". Ilia's spirit appears over him and he disperses. She then flies up into the air with his dispersed body as if saving him.

Recalling: Upon recalling Ilia's spirit will appear behind him wrapping her arms around his neck and shoulders embracing him. They then disperse into the air. His right hand on her arm as if holding and gripping it.

Essential Items: item 3087 item 3046 item 3031 Offensive Items: item 3072 item 3172 item 3139 Defensive Items: item 3025 item 3112 item 3065 Other useful items: item 3115 item 3102 item 3110 item 3116 item 3071 item 3091 item 3512 item 3035 item 3100 item 3056 item 3074

There you have Valen! Let me know what you think! Vote +/- based on what you feel he deserves. Give me your feedback below. I don't mind as long as it isn't outright hate. Constructive feedback and conversing is what I prefer. If it is outright hate then please. Move along. I don't have time for hate and it wastes everyone's time and energy. If you don't like them that's fine! ^_^ But please, don't bring the hate here.

Let me know what you like and don't like and just converse with me if you don't have feedback. It's cool ^^ I like hearing what people think and how they could see this champion and everything. ^^ Thanks again!

46 Comments

Krypt3d2 votes

Seems good, but incredibly over powered. Besides that he looks like a great champ.

Nikushimi Zero2 votes

Thanks! I appreciate it! ^_^ I worked for days on this guy. XD

I would like some detail on what you mean by incredibly over powered. His damage isn't too high, and his abilities aren't outrageously game changing. I would like to hear your thoughts on what you find over powered ^_^

Krypt3d1 votes

When I read his abilities it seems like his 1v1 capabilities are significantly better at level 3 than many others, and his ult could make team fights easier as he does not have to be in the fight himself, and can send Ilia in for him.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Technically, no. She always stays at his side. Always. She has a range of 700, but that's only if enemies are near. She works much like Tibbers. Annie has the same thing going for her. She doesn't technically have to be in battle. Tibbers can go in and fight.

Enemies technically, if they are within 700 range of you will begin to attack you. Yes, she can reach 1000 range, but Ilia only strays that far if aggroed by enemies. Once she reaches that 1000 she teleports back to Valen. This is to prevent her from just going off on her own, as well as to keep enemies from cheesing her into an endless loop of back and forth while cheesing her with attacks till she dies.

Think of the radius much like Varus's Q. The radius for her is like that. That's how big her radius of doing things in is. She can't leave that radius, and never strays from the side (Literal side) of Valen unless enemies are all around and are ganking Valen. She tends to stay by his side and if Valen is leaving she shall follow and once he is 1000 units from her, even if she is fighting, she will teleport to him since she can't leave that area.

His 1v1 capabilities are definitely superior, but not anymore so, imo, than some other champions are lvl3. Also, given since he is superior in his 1v1 capabilities I gave him increased cooldowns and a short duration on his E until higher ranks. His E is what makes his late game extremely versatile and useful.

Countering all this I put in higher than normal cooldowns at low levels so he can't spam the abilities. A 30s cooldown on his rank 1 Q, 23 on his W and a 25s on his E with a 3s duration. This makes a Valen player having to choose WHEN to use his abilities rather than able to spam them. Allowing the combo. Instead they have to think what to do first and plan for CD.

But I see where you are coming from. Thanks for the input ^_^

Krypt3d1 votes

I have a question, can you draw? http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/P83LAvu8-qin-zhen-the-wandering-acupuncturist and http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/nwAgEGGu-april-fools-skin-ideas?

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Unfortunately no. My talents lie in storytelling and imagination rather than art. Though I guess storytelling and imagination is an art form.

If I was able to draw I wouldn't use google for my images as I would hand draw all of them otherwise. I only wish I was talented. Many of my friends are, but most don't like drawing for other people. Sorry.

Keagn1 votes

If you have have not already considered it, I would like to extend a formal invitation to our...little gathering. The Legion could use a man with your expertise. S

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

The legion seems to be a place of backstabbers and cutthroats. As a contractor I am bound by the contract I sign up for. However, that does not mean I take every and all contracts. Further review of your regiment has brought the conclusion that I cannot, at this time, participate in your....extracurricular activities. Should this change I shall contact you. I do appreciate the extension with me being new to this world.

Regards, V

Rhyto1 votes

_This message will be brief, meet at the attached location for futher information in regards to this letter for you, and only you. C _

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

I have no attachment that you speak of. Perhaps your messages aren't as secure as you might think. Should it be beneficial for me to meet then I shall consider it, but should the security of the meeting be as this message than it shall be short lived. Allow an attachment and I shall see fit to arrive if it is of interest. I may be a contractor, but I am still new in this world and as a contractor it is best to build a reputation before committing and so you can understand how picky I have to be. I await your reply.

Regards, V

Rew7111 votes

Questions:

  1. I thought Riot stopped other world champions. Do you want to rethink the lore?
  2. His Q costs WAY to much for what it deals. Do you think it could be lowered?
  3. Is he a Fighter?
Nikushimi Zero1 votes

  1. I haven't heard of this from riot, but then again I don't keep up on all the news. Just like when I learned about a week or two ago that the "League" doesn't exist. That the institute of war isn't canon anymore or something. Also, if they have then why would they introduce a...well, a god? Bard Granted, he is a god in Runeterra, or rather of space and such. Though, he is technically of another world. Either way, the lore (As of right now) shall remain the same. Though, it could easily be rewritten if necessary to include a whole other Kingdom apart from Runeterra within the same planet (On the other side of the world perhaps), but for now it stays until I hear otherwise. I am definitely willing to compromise if this arises.

  2. The reason I have it costing as much as it does is because of its effect that it has. It pretty much heals mana for him. If I made this skill less than the mana regained from the attack would effectively make the cost null and void. Making it a skill that has no cost at all. He damages the enemy, and part of that damage is dealt to the mana of the enemy which subsequently regains Valen's mana. Thus, he has a slightly higher cost to this ability.

  3. He could be made into a fighter, but no. He is an assassin/mage (Or rather anti-mage mage). He specializes in focused attacks on one champion. Preferably mages. His Q shows this. He could be an Assassin/Fighter if people agree he is more fighter secondary rather than mage, but due his abilities I find him more secondary mage.

Any other questions feel free to ask ^^ Hope I answered yours you've already asked ^^

Rhyto1 votes

[{quoted}](name=Nikushimi Zero,realm=NA,application-id=A8FQeEA8,discussion-id=KK73HVz5,comment-id=00010000,timestamp=2015-06-03T02:45:16.889+0000)

I have no attachment that you speak of. Perhaps your messages aren't as secure as you might think. Should it be beneficial for me to meet then I shall consider it, but should the security of the meeting be as this message than it shall be short lived. Allow an attachment and I shall see fit to arrive if it is of interest. I may be a contractor, but I am still new in this world and as a contractor it is best to build a reputation before committing and so you can understand how picky I have to be. I await your reply.

Regards, V

I find it discomforting that you haven't discovered the attachment within the parchment, perhaps you weren't as good as the reports suggest. -C

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Probably not. Most likely, better than the reports suggested. However, unless this attachment is invisible I truly did not receive any such coordinates or attachment. However, unless you are in league with someone else then.....well, it is of no consequence. You are not the first to contact me. I do apologize if you had hopes for me, but unless I have misread and mistook certain "attachments" as something else then I truly have not received anything.

In regards to how good I am or am not that remains to be seen to the people of this land. This is not the last anyone shall hear of me. If you do have work for me then lay out the play and I shall decide if I will act upon it. If not, then I will burn the letter and do away with any evidence of my work with you for both our benefits. If I do the work then perhaps it will benefit us both.

I thank you for the consideration and await your reply.

Regards, V

Chikyu1 votes

Where'd you get these logos for the skills? Haha they look legit

Nikushimi Zero2 votes

If I'm allowed to post it, it's a website that has a bunch of icons on it and such. If I knew how to make my own I would wholeheartedly do that.

The site I use is hive workshop. A quick google search should help you find it.

At the top is a link to their icons. The link name on the page is "Icons". It's pretty neat. Credit of course goes to the ones who made the icons. I would love to learn to create my own icons though. My strength comes more from creating concepts and lore rather than art.

It took a lot of searching and choosing to find proper fitting icons. Luckily, I was able to. ^_^ Sometimes....it's a lot harder.

EDIT: If you want to use the icons what I do is click the icon then on the page it brings me to I right click and open image in new window. From there I copy and past the address for the icon and place it where I want it in my concept. Make sure nothing is touching the link or it won't appear as a picture but a corrupted link.

jewliciousness1 votes

The concept itself seems great. I do have some issues with it though (constructive criticism only). In design, he looks and feels fairly similar to shaco. The q itself, while I admit is not really the same, feels a bit like shaco's q in the sense that he ports a short distance. It's a different kind of port, I understand that, but you might consider making this a ranged spell or just a close range target spell. Also, the mana sap portion of the Q is quite overpowered. At higher ranks when this spell could be doing, in theory, upwards of 350 damage, the 50% damage mana leach would be quite ridiculous. I would recommend maybe a 3%/4%/5%/7%/9% mana sap instead (keep in mind that this takes mana from them and gives it to you so really it's doubly effective.) In general, I felt like this champion had wayyy too many gap closers. I like the idea of the W, but you might consider something slightly different with the E. The Ultimate itself is a fantastic idea. I love it completely, but that doesn't mean I don't see issues. Actually it almost does. The only issue I see here is the possibility of it being overpowered. If it mimic's the original champion's abilities, then the companion's abilities would have to be much less powerful in order to avoid instant death for the enemy. There has to be some counterplay available here and with all the dashes and damage there really isn't any haha. On to the passive. Really there's not much wrong here. I like the numbers for the max stacks basic attack buff. A suggestion I could make though is a decently high number for the max stacks, possibly 5-7. To have this though, you're clearly going to have to tweak cooldowns because there's no way the passive is going to help at all with 20 second cooldowns on every basic spell. With the lower damage numbers and tweaks above (obviously a rough number. I'm sure you can do better), lower cooldowns would be much more viable thereby allowing for a higher number of max stacks. Now, obviously this is your champion so you dont have to take any of this advice or you can take all of it or you can only pick and choose. It's up to you. Just felt like offering my point of view on this guy so far. Cheers :)

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Thanks! I appreciate the feedback! Allow me to converse and explain from my perspective how I see things. If this is too long to read, that's all right. My final conclusion is that I shall take into consideration your thoughts and suggestions. I appreciate it.

At higher levels of his Q with 350 attack that would be 175 mana drain from target and gain for him. That is of course if he gets his AD items and is able to acquire that, but for the sake of this let's say he does. 175 mana at higher levels (For his Q to be max level he'd have to be about 13-16 in lvl?) at these levels all but the weakest in mana users would have anywhere between 1000-3000 in mana. 175 mana leech from that...doesn't see too crazy. Though, that's my opinion. I play a lot of magic users myself and know how high mana can get, and even on non mana users (Yi for example) the max I get with him usually ranges from 800-1500 mid to late game. Max level (18) I usually have about 1500 or so. That is definitely plenty and not a big hit to the mana for 175.

As for the rest of the Q. I've never played Shaco so I'm not too keen on his Q, but I do know a similar character. Talon. His E has a range of 700, and while it doesn't damage it pretty much stuns a target champion with that 99% slow. Then, he has increased damage against them. So while his doesn't do damage on hit (And only after) it does have that teleportation like effect. So, I wanted a similar ability as it just fit with my champion. So, I took down the range by 100 and add damage on hit and drain of mana.

While that doesn't neglect your point I do have a reason it isn't shorter. One word. Mages. Mages are what his prime concern is. Most mages have a range of 550-600 and some range characters go to 650. He needs a way to close the gap without them just retreating and pummeling him with magic. After all he wouldn't be a good anti-mage champion if he couldn't get close. Anything less than the 600 range he has on it would make it all useless. Let's say he has a range of 400-500. Most mages would outrange him, and be able to just retreat beyond his reach. There are only a few mages that has a range between 400 and 500. Thus making about 70% of the mages out of his reach. That is the reasoning behind him having his range at 600. To me, if I reduced the range I would increase the damage to make up for it as well as increase the radius on his E so he could get closer to the mages.

He does have many gap closers. That was the main focus of his kit due to him being one that excels at chasing down and finishing off enemies. His E has a 3s beginning time and 5s at max rank. This is so it doesn't last too long so he can just chain forever, as well as making people choose WHEN to use his E. This, coupled with his Q and W make for excellent tools in chasing down Mages and other retreating champions.

This is just one of the combos. Q->E->W. He would initiate with his Q, if the target flees he puts on his E to slow them and to keep up with them. Once they are out of that his W comes in and helps close any gaps the other might have gotten after being through such an ordeal.

His Cooldowns are high for this reason alone. If he had lower cooldowns he could be dashing all over the place without a care in the world and no one to stop him (Well, maybe a few). So, the high cooldowns are there to stem the spamability of his abilities as well as provide some balance for the gap closing and effects of the abilities.

Hope that clears up the abilities side and answers a few things, but I appreciate all you gave in feedback.

Passive: His passive is like this with the 5 stacks so that he has to earn the bonuses as well as stay on the enemy. His cooldowns are high (As explained above). If he was able to gain stacks extremely quickly then he could use those bonuses to do serious damage. The stacks give cooldown reduction percent (I was going to do a static number cooldown reduction but that might have gotten ridiculous), so this allows him to get his abilities out faster, while at a steady, and not too spammy, rate.

Ultimate: Yes, she mimics the base damage of his Q and W. For the bonus damage she uses her own stats (Not his) which are fixed amount. The cooldowns remain the same. Meaning, at max rank of every ability she would be able to use each skill during her time on the field maybe 2-3 times before she leaves. That isn't many casts within a minute, and that IS if she chooses to use them as she works much like the AI champions on Intermediate.

I had thought of reducing the damage she did to 50/60/70% of the damage of the abilities, but then thought that the abilities were already not that powerful at base damage. Max level Q is 130 (+140) is 270 worth of magic damage. This can be (Potentially) cast 2-3 times during her duration. This is all max level 18. The W would be slightly less than that in damage. Max damage (If she hit with all these abilities) would be 810 at 3 times for the Q (Not including Magic Resist/Armor) and for the W she would have 210 damage and at 3 times it would be 630. Max total of 1440. About average for an ult, and not including armor and magic resist of the enemy. This damage is a potential damage as she does this over the duration she is there. Champions can easily take her out before this as she IS a targetable.

Conclusion. THANK YOU! ^^ I appreciate your feedback and take what everyone says seriously and to my thinking table. I appreciate the time you took reading this (if you did cause it was long) and I appreciate that you took your time to respond with feedback. I think on everything people say, so thank you for telling me your opinion. ^^ It's much appreciated.

AnonymousEnigma1 votes

His ratios seem kinda weak for an aggressive AD bruiser, compared to say Riven, wukong etc

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

They are weak at the start of my concept. Yes. Usually my concepts have had too high of ratios for people and it instantly got dismissed as overly OP due to the ratios, and so recently I've taken a new approach to start semi low-medium ratios and damage so as to not throw people off right away.

lnting Machine1 votes

Too much lore. Riot wont use it.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

The lore could easily be abbreviated into something shorter and have a longer explanation under the champions history.

Though, I can't tell if this is a crack at riot or being serious. If it's a crack then well....most their lore is short and sweet, but other lore not so much. They have a mix of lore. XD

But anyways, it could always be abbreviated into: Valen was once the prodigy of a great contractor family of a kingdom with great power. However, betrayal led to his beloveds death, and now she resides inside an enchanted pendant that protects him and stays by his side. The very betrayal that led to her "death" also led him to gain new powers to forge his way into this world. Lost in a place called Runeterra he seeks a way home and a way to avenge this betrayal.

However, the length of the lore fleshes out the champion. Anyways, appreciate the comment! ^^ Thanks for commenting. Any comments are welcome as long as they're not complete hate or anything ^^

Swampmajikk1 votes

looks too much like TF.. i'd say just rework his look.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Not entirely seeing the resemblance except from the whole hat thing and trench coat XD

Their faces are definitely not a match.

ModAcademy Kayn1 votes

Well remember that you are looking at them in a top-down perspective. We'll only be seeing the Trenchcoat and hat, much less the face.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Definitely true. In a way they are similar then, but also different. For example. Valen always has a small electrical charge going through him that grows with his passive, and he has a dagger. From the front (Top down) you can see their faces a little bit.

Could easily make a different design for the trenchcoat or something, but it is one of his trademarks of a contractor. Kinda like concealing himself in a way. Useful for hiding daggers and such. Could make it a leather cloak instead of course, but the hat man. Gotta stay XD

ModAcademy Kayn1 votes

They could share the quote "Nobody touches the hat"

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

xD Most definitely. Adding that now. XD

TendajiX1 votes

Looks too similar to TF. This concept is very thorough and awesome but the ult is op and all champs that can be untargetable are or have been op as it is very difficult to play around. I would say make the dmg on his w really low if it makes him untargetable.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

They both have a hat and trench coat, yes, but besides their attire they are completely different looking. The way their attire is shaped and made are different as well, but Shrugs XD

Anyways, the ult itself is no more OP than Tibbers imo. In fact, she is slightly weaker than Tibbers. She has less health, and Tibbers can go off on his own without being restricted in area. I've seen Tibbers chase people far away from Annie. Though, of course there can always be tweaks. Tibbers has more health and range with 10 less armor and magic resist, She has less health and range while having 10 more armor and magic resist. She uses his abilities (Only his Q and W) with her own static attack power and ability power. That's the only part that I could see people having an issue with. If you would care to elaborate I wouldn't mind listening to it.

How much lower in damage can the W get? I'm just wondering your suggestion as it is probably one of the weakest damage abilities I've seen on a champ besides damage over times which the highest max rank base damage is like 60. Though, I am open to suggestions. Currently the damage is 30/50/70/90/110 base damage with 50% AP added to it. That itself isn't much especially considering he is more of an AD champion. Not saying you can't play him as AP.

But, anyways. If you have a suggestion in how much lower and why then I wouldn't mind taking it into account ^_^

TendajiX1 votes

I suggest removing the untargetability compeletely and buffing the dmg maybe increasing the range. Untargetability itself is an extremely broken mechanic.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Perhaps, but Yi and a few others have untargetable abilities. Not nearly as broken as Kats (Imo her combo is just insane). Yi's Q though isn't too bad, but it is annoying. It's really his only saving grace. Yi is one of my favorites too.

I just find it hard not to have him be untargetable due to him being particles and hitting particles is pretty much just hitting air which really does nothing to the air and would pretty much just go right through without hitting anything. I definitely appreciate the feedback though. I think over all feedback and definitely appreciate all the input people give me. ^_^ So thanks!

I might make it where physical attacks and AoE's cannot hit, but Magical AoE's can. Might give mages a counter to the mage killer while still keeping his idea of being particles and lightning immune to attacks (Most attacks) since magic can control and damage particles, the air, etc. But only AoE's because targeted or missile likes would simply pass through imo. Food for thought for me. Definitely many ideas and I appreciate the spark to my imagination and thoughts.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Also, in case I forgot to say so earlier in the previous reply. I appreciate your feedback ^_^ I really do.

Svddenly1 votes

Nitpicking grammar mistakes in the lore (I'm going to post a kit review soon):

"loftily wedded wife"

lawfully* wedded wife

"husband to be"

husband-to-be* (for sake of clarity)

"led to a knife throw to the back of the heads in front of me."

led to a knife thrown* to the backs* also this sentence feels really awkward and clunky (I also only counted 5 of 6 guards killed in that paragraph)

"the knives slide"

the knives slid*

"I had just slight the throat of"

I had just slit* the throat of

"Jumping over and running to her. Stopped short and thrown back by a field of force. Groggily getting up to the sounds of laughter."

All of these sentences need a subject. They aren't imperative and therefore don't have an implied subject.

"Our families were in league with very powerful sorcerers. Enemies of our families, but upon a truce lay our lives."

Who were the enemies of their families? Were they enemies of both families? Or just enemies of his family?

"glared down my father."

glared down at* my father

"demonic looking metal catalysts"

I don't think catalyst is the word you're looking for there.

"and in fact. It was."

and in fact, it was*

"My eyes glared into my fathers."

My eyes glared into my father's*.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

xD Yeah, it was really late when I wrote this. Apologies if things were misspelled, used wrong, missed punctuation, or anything like that.

However, there were six guards that were taken down. The first was from behind, the next two were the ones with the knives thrown to their heads. That's why I put heads instead of head. Then he stabs the next two and finally plunges both daggers into the final, and sixth, guard. So, not there were not 5 of 6. First died by having their throat slit. The next two with knives to the back of the heads of the other two. That's why back didn't have an s. I could've said "Backs of their heads" but instead I said "To the back of the heads". If I had said "To the backs of the heads" it would've sounded weird (To me at least).

But anyways, apologies for the very minor spelling mistakes. The lore was written pretty late. This was also a few day process. So I did change a few things and had to review and all that other stuff. I might have slipped on a few things. Everyone also has some preferences over certain things that others.

Btw, the slide and slid I understand, but slid is past tense to me whereas slide is in the moment.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

xD Yeah, it was really late when I wrote this. Apologies if things were misspelled, used wrong, missed punctuation, or anything like that.

However, there were six guards that were taken down. The first was from behind, the next two were the ones with the knives thrown to their heads. That's why I put heads instead of head. Then he stabs the next two and finally plunges both daggers into the final, and sixth, guard. So, not there were not 5 of 6. First died by having their throat slit. The next two with knives to the back of the heads of the other two. That's why back didn't have an s. I could've said "Backs of their heads" but instead I said "To the back of the heads". If I had said "To the backs of the heads" it would've sounded weird (To me at least).

But anyways, apologies for the very minor spelling mistakes. The lore was written pretty late. This was also a few day process. So I did change a few things and had to review and all that other stuff. I might have slipped on a few things. Everyone also has some preferences over certain things that others.

Btw, the slide and slid I understand, but slid is past tense to me whereas slide is in the moment.

EDIT: Who were the enemies of their families? Were they enemies of both families? Or just enemies of his family? It definitely says that it was their families. Both Ilia's and his. I may have worded it weirdly, but those who had captured Ilia were enemies of both the Moon's and Ravenore's. They had bargained for a truce. Which is why they were able to do all that they did and why their families were there when the "ritual" had happened.

Svddenly1 votes

Well, the lore does say "a knife" and not knives, so one knife = one guard (more nitpicking I know).

As for slid vs. slide: the rest of your narrative is in past tense. So slid would be the correct choice here.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Ah, yeah. I tend to accidentally do that sometimes. Especially if I am writing in past tense and then start to speak of an action. How I was trying to portray it was in the "Now" and such, but must've been writing past tense sub consciously.

As for the knife thing.....yeah. I read it again and now see where it got confusing XD I had imagined him pulling two knives and throwing them at their heads.....but didn't write that XD Apologies.

Svddenly1 votes

Kit Review:

Passive: I am very opposed to temporary CDR. Basic Attack: 50 (+50% AP) magic damage on an AD champ isn't really noticable. Especially for a one-time bonus. Electrical Surge: On the other hand, 110 (+50% AD) magic damage is HUGE on an AD champ, even if it's just for a few seconds (imo it shouldn't scale with AD).

Q: "damaging and siphoning 10/20/30/40/50% of the damage dealt physically from the opponents mana healing his own mana for the amount stolen." A few things here: Is he draining someone else's mana (please no)? The word "physically" is unnecessary. And mana doesn't "heal", it's restored (nitpick alert).

21s cd? Too high.

W: Another dash? And with an extremely negligible amount of true damage.

E: Does he need more mobility? And with confusing wording so much so that I don't know what the rest of this ability does.

R: Very fitting with the lore.

Overall: Very compelling lore. But does he really need 3 mobility spells? Also, he feels like he should be AP based, not AD ("Energy surged through me and I felt a connection to all magic within this world." emphasis mine). Last thing: I can only see one scaling ability. This may be problematic.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Thanks for the feedback! I'm going to address things so I can get a better grip on things, explain some things, and so we can converse. I like to talk about things with people over their feedback ^_^ I'll go in order as best as I can.

First things first though: You comment on him having lots of mobility. Yes. Indeed he does. He is a very high mobility champion. His strengths are his mobility and chasing down enemy champions. Hampering, harassing, and making it difficult to get away. After all he is a professional and can't let his prey get away. So yes, he is a high mobile champion. Hence all the mobility abilities.

Passive: Why are you opposed? Ryze has almost the same thing. Only thing is he gets it (Or did they change that with his update?) when casting spells. It is an instant CD reduction for Ryze, but it is still CDR. The reason I gave him CDR that grew was to get to max stacks quicker. The more he casts, the quicker he can get things out and move around. That's why he has such a high CD on some abilities. So as he isn't able to insta spam things.

I did comment in one of the comments or maybe several that he is an AD champ, but in truth he isn't. He is more of a mix AD/AP champion that is better if you just focus on the AD aspect because there are more AD/Attack speed items than there are AP/Attack speed items which attack speed is his friend. Hence his "Assassin/Mage" roles. I should probably mention that. So, the reason they are magic damage though instead of adding to his physical damage is because of this. It isn't physical damage that is happening upon attacking. It is is extra damage via magic means.

His main focus should be Attack Speed, so while the 50 (+50% AP) magic damage may seem weak it works over the long run. Especially if he focused on AP. It is pretty much magic that he accrues over time with his energy that he acquired during the incident.

Electrical Surge. It is AD because his attacks are AD. They are physical. It boosts his attack damage. The reason it is magic though is because it is electrical magic that is added into his attacks.

Feel free to let me know how you would change it to make it better. As is I would like to keep it. I wouldn't like to butcher it and change it completely, but I would probably tweak it if necessary. As for the CDR. Why don't you like it? Any better suggestions?

Q: Yes, the damage is done to the mana of the other champion. He is a mage hunter and before he became what he was he specialized in nulling and draining the magic of those he fought against. So, yes. He is draining/damaging their mana and replenishing his own. A bit nitpicky, but it's alright. As long as the message came across.

His CD here. Yes, 21s. The reasoning is because would you want someone able to teleport, drain you mana every 5s? I wouldn't. This is to balance it out, and as explained in his passive section. I had high CDs because of the CDR for staying on a target. To keep on using abilities and to get those stacks.

W: Yes, another dash. He is an extremely mobile champion. This ability also fits with how the magic had change his composition. His entire being changed. This one is used to help acquire enemies, weaken them, and then strike. Also can be used to escape whereas the others cannot. Well, E to an extent, but E has a different use.

Also, you are the first ever to say that the true damage is negligible. I've had the SAME exact damage on other champions for true damage and people always said it was OP. XD

E: Yes. He does. Highly mobile champion. This ability, while it gives mobility, it also helps to keep a target within range. His primary concern is to focus on a target and to keep them there. To whittle them away and hamper them. His E allows targets to not escape (Without at least trying and good skill), his W is to get out or to hamper and get closer while weakening, and his Q is to assassinate.

Confusing? Probably. I could've said it easier. Pretty much this ability is a field of electricity (Think of Viktors Ult if you want a visual). That field is centered on Valen. Enemies within that radius are slowed while his movements are increased. He is able to dash to any enemy within this field to attack them with a basic attack. At the speed of his basic attack. If you understand that, great. If not feel free to ask any questions! I'll do my best to answer them! ^_^

R: Thank you! Yes, I wanted to think of something unique, something amazing, and well. Ilia came to be. I knew I wanted to incorporate her somehow, and this was the perfect way.

Conclusion: Yes, he is a highly mobile champion specializing in taking down mages. He excels in it. If you are a mage....it is best to not go toe to toe with Valen. Ever. Unless you are extremely capable. His mana attack, his mobility, and his constant harass make him a death sentence to mages. Those who use Fury or other resource don't have anything to fear from him however except for his mobility. This gives plenty of counters to him, but also strengths and uniqueness.

His mobility is made in a way so he can't always dash around, and he has to choose WHEN to dash and WHEN to activate due to the duration of his E and his W doesn't do much without enemies around. His Q doesn't do him any good either without enemy champions.

All in all he is a very mobile mage killing champion good at chasing. Other areas.....not so much.

But again! Thank you for the feedback! I like talking about others feedbacks to explain how my champion is and to get a better understanding of their feedback! To hopefully converse on possible ways to improve my champions without completely destroying them.

Svddenly1 votes

Passive: Well, with the cooldown stuff on his passive it's a percentage, so eventually it does nothing if he builds CDR. Ryze's, on the other hand, always gives him something no matter what. And with the autoattack buff, it only happens once (right?). So that's 50 (and some) magic damage on a single basic attack after hitting 5 abilities.

Q: So he gets hard-countered by manaless champs (which seem to be more and more prevalent). (EDIT: so he completely counters one category of champs. This is not a good thing and should not happen, mage hunter or not) I also just don't like damaging someone's resource pool. There isn't counterplay there. You should control how you use your resource. The gaining mana is fine by me though. 21s cd at max rank is huge. I don't want it at 5s, but this looks like his main harass ability, so 13-16s would be fine here imo.

W: I mean, it's non-scaling true damage. 110 of it. Most champs have 1800+ health at higher levels. 110 isn't much at all.

E: So think Ekko E? He gets to autoattack and dash at the same time? He gets a slowing field, a movement speed boost, and a dash? Combined with his other abilites, how do you get away from this guy?

Note that I'm not saying that I think he's OP (he's probably more on the UP side). I'm saying that 3 dashes feels really repetitive.

Also his passive feels really counterintuitive combined with his 15-21s cooldown abilities (those are at max rank). It'll take him a really long time to build up charges like that. His passive is designed for a champ who can spam lots of spells, but the spells he has are for someone who goes all in every once in a while.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Thanks for elaborating! I appreciate conversing over these things ^_^

Passive: Would you suggest lowering the cooldowns of his abilities and completely taking out the CDR or make the CDR a flat rate?

Would you also suggest increasing the damage that the 50 (+50% AP) does to let's say....100-150 (+50% AP)? I don't want it to be too OP.

Q: He doesn't exactly make all mages useless, but he is supposed to make it difficult for them. Much like champions who make it hard for certain other champions. Ranged with anti melee capabilities, or tanks built for mages, or even tanks built for melee and ranged. I mean, I don't want him to completely destroy mages, but to make it difficult.

I was thinking of a silence instead of the drain but keeping the mana restore. Would you think that would be more appropriate? I just think part of his uniqueness would be to deal damage to the enemies source. I like that he has a unique skill no champion has and makes people think before engaging him. Yes, it is harsh, but that's why I made it not happen very often with the high CD.

W: That's what I explain whenever I do true damage on my champions. I had one champion who, at most, would be dealing 200-300 true damage. However, this was considered too OP. Maybe it was, but that's why on this guy I lowered it. Severely. Would you suggest a higher flat damage? Or add in scaling?

E: I can't remember Ekko's too well, but yes. Just like that. However, the dashes are ONLY to enemies within the field. The field itself is slightly smaller than the cast radius for Anivia's ult. Not the spell radius, but the cast radius (If you watch the video for her ultimate it is the big circle around her, not the circle she casts for her ultimate). So, take that radius on that and make it slightly smaller. That's the radius of his E. Which isn't too big. This is a very close range ability. It is smaller than the range of Ryze's attack range. Most mages and ranged champions have a bigger reach than his E. Which can help to keep them out of the radius. Which is why he usually will Q->E. Though, if they are close enough an E->attacks works.

He is supposed to be very hard to get away from, but not impossible. His E, at most, lasts 5s. Which means it is possible to either wait it out, or flash out of radius and under a turret or into some kind of safety. It is definitely made to make it hard for enemies to escape for a few seconds at least. Also why I have such high CDs. Imagine being stuck in that for 3-5s every 10-15s. Granted, at max rank it is 17s CD. But lower cooldowns would make it that much worse.

What would you suggest though?

So, pretty much this guy is supposed to make it hard for enemies to escape, and yet not so hard as to make it a constant thing. He is meant to keep on an enemy, make their retreat hard, and also show them not to turn their back as well as for players of Valen to know when and how to play their cards right. With the CDR on the passive after the first ability that means less CD on the abilities and that goes down on the next one until finally they are out one after another, but then go back to having to wait and then build up to faster abilities so as to not overpower and overwhelm to often so he has counter play (Though he definitely already has counter play in melee champions and manaless champions). Though, suggestions would be nice as well. I do appreciate being able to converse ^_^

Svddenly1 votes

Passive: There are two options to deal with this (not talking about the CDR, I'm talking about how it doesn't synergize with the rest of the kit): You can give him a new passive or you can revamp some of his abilities so that they are more spammable. And 100-150 (+50% AP) still feels a bit low (look at the damage on Ekko's passive, and that's just for 3 consecutive hits with autos or abilities, not just abilities).

Q: A silence would be much better imo. Somewhere abouts 1-2s.

W: I'd just give it a low AP scaling (20-40%) and call it there.

E: Is he only able to dash once while this is active? Or multiple times?

I don't want to force my ideas onto you, but here's what I think:

Take off the dash on his Q and make it a skillshot knife throw with more damage and the silence and mana restore (and make the mana restore a flat 50% of the damage dealt). That way you can lower the cooldown quite a bit to help his passive. Maybe even increase the mana cost a bit to reward him more for hitting a target (and make it able to hit minions but not leech mana from them).

Completely rework his W into a spammable AP-scaling ability. Possibly keep the distortion mark for true damage on the next hit, though.

Keep his E and R as is.

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

I appreciate the feedback. ^_^

My only thing with making his Q a skill shot is it becomes less effective imo, especially if a champion JUST makes it behind minions. It is just way to easy to get him to hit something else and bait him. While it provides a counter to him, it is a very easy counter to get on him. Then he has to wait for the CD on it to try again where the enemy can just continue to keep behind the minions. Just too easy to cheese that ability and he becomes even more easy to counter (When in truth I feel he always was easy to counter once his skills were used since he fails in melee hard. Making him really good only against weak melee champions).

I understand the synergy thing with the passive though. How it would take a while for the passive to take place. I may do something like the Passive Yi has on his Q. Where basic attacks reduce cooldown and grant a charge. This would proc players to focus on attack speed as well as sticking with an enemy to be able to use his skills. I definitely have much to do and edit. As well as much to think about.

I appreciate your feedback and will think on things ^^ Thank you! As well as talking things out with me. That is the best thing ever. ^^

RinChee1 votes

Pretty amazing Concept even has icons for the abilities. I was just wondering if you mind commenting mine ( Rin-Ki )

Nikushimi Zero1 votes

Thanks! Glad you like my champion. Up vote if you want to and think he deserves it if you haven't already. ^_^ I read over your champion and I have to say that one of my other champions might have something to say about that joke you made towards Shyvana. XD

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