Riot, please don't take this down again.
Also, I would appreciate it if you took a look, you don't have to watch the whole thing or anything. Justbwanna know if it's worthy of being called funny.
Imperial Japan1 votesWatching it and the jokes seem fine but it's just that it seems monotone. I think the use of spacing, dynamics, maybe a bit more think time after the jokes would help. But overall it seems fine :)
Also I need help on something, Would you mind contacting me or replying me when you get the chance? thanks :)
Melledoneus1 votesI appreciate the feedback.
Also, what's up?
Imperial Japan1 votesCould you please add me on either skype (shikahiyo) or discord (Fried Grape ⚔) so I could discuss it?
Melledoneus1 votesSure, but I'm kind of worried that you're keeping it so secretive.
Imperial Japan1 votesOh don't worry, I'm not pulling off anything shady
BLACK REALM GOD1 votesim watching it. it reminds me of the hotness vs crazy graph. it's not really that funny. the reason it's not funny is because of the nervous and unrehearsed delivery. had you delivered it with a more deadpan act or hyperbolic yet serious tone even though you're copying something that was basically a popular meme it would have still stood out as a funny joke.
allow me to show you the original
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vwbKYcBdVyk
the reason it was so successful is because he believed himself to be right or at least appeared to believe that. his jokes were extreme and hyperbolic. also very offensive if you're easily offended by sexism.
the equivalent would have been making fat jokes.