I'd be interested to hear you talk about his gameplay a little. What's his laning phase look like? What are his combos? How does he teamfight? Are there any champs he synnergizes well with? What makes his kit fun to play, fun to play against, and unique? I'm just having trouble picturing this guy right now.

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Hyrum Graff

Here is a version with all the grammatical errors fixed (and some verbal sprucing):

Velios, The Ancient Protector Primary: Assassin Secondary: Fighter This concept is the second oldest one I have. Its story is directly tied to the Void, as he is born of the magic of Runeterra to defend against the invasion of the void. His name (ANCIENT) hints at the fact that the Void may have attempted an invasion far earlier, his lines would also indicate that he may be older than even Anivia, Lissandra, and most assuredly Avarosa, possibly making this the first creature to ever combat the void in Runeterra and possibly a VERY old rival of Cho'Gath, or another (squishy) ancient void character. Anyhow this is the champion..... Abilities: ====================================================================================================================================================== Passive: Power of the Ancients: The primal energies of Runterra fuel Velios making him considerably more agile. Velios will gain bonus movement speed when he is hit with an ability. If an enemy minion or monster is below 50/150/250 health Velios's next auto attack or ability will execute that unit. ====================================================================================================================================================== Q: Tail Lash: Velios swings his razer-sharp tail a sweeping motion, dealing physical damage to all enemies in front of him. If there is only one target he will skewer that enemy instead, dealing bonus damage to them. ====================================================================================================================================================== W: Thrash: Velios attempts to rip his enemies to shreds, dealing physical damage and applying a small bleed that causes the bleeding target to take extra damage from Velios. ====================================================================================================================================================== E: Dodge/Charge: Dodge: Velios will dodge the next auto attack by dashing to the side of the attacker, if you dodge an auto-attack before the duration wears, you may activate Charge. Charge: Velios will charge to a target champion dealing physical damage and pushing them for the remaining charge distance if any. He moves with the target as they are pushed, even through terrain.

R: Slaughter Passive: Velios's ancient experience grants him a small bonus to his vision range. Active: Velios launches a series of high-damage spikes to all enemies in target area, these spikes emanate from his joints, thus allowing his now free'd joints a wider range of movement (speed). This means he can now jump to a target enemy, dealing damage. If the enemy he jumped to dies before the duration wears, he may jump to another enemy to refresh the duration.

This is the grammatically correct version of your concept:

Remove the minion execution from his passive, it makes last hitting WAY too easy for him, and doesnt thematically (that means having to do with his theme)make sense. His Q makes sense, well done. Thrash also makes sense, again well done. Dodge has a small problem, why not instead make it to where he may dash a certain number of times (maybe twice?) and during his dashes, he is untargetable and cannot be hit by abilities or AAs, allowing skilled player to actually dodge, as the name suggests. His ultimate makes very little sense, both thematically and mechanically: Thematically: He's been all about mobility and single target physical damage, now all of a sudden he's and AoE magic damage guy? Spikes from his JOINTS? Weird... Mechanically: An AoE magic damage attack that is somehow linked to a jump doesnt make much sense. I added that movement speed in there because you implied some sort of duration in the original post, although a duration effect was never given.

I really don't like his E, it reminds me of Renekton even with a 4 second gap