{Battle of the Champions} {Part 1}

Awnold·8/25/2015, 8:40:42 PM·1 votes·415 views

{This is about a summoner, trapped in League, forced to travel Runeterra. this is my first driven storyline, and I hope you enjoy.}

                                                                                                                                                                                                                       The cries of anguish. The moaning.  It won't stop, I swear. This war, has driven me to the point of insanity. More moaning, more crying. Nothing besides violence. Horrible people. The summoners, those traitors, they... they tricked me. How could you do such a thing... Damn...

I was a summoner, tricked, damn tricked by my fellow colleagues. They pushed me into the gate, closed it, and pretended nothing happened. Damn you, Vain, I trusted you... Nothing is worse then being betrayed, it feels like you just got punched in the stomach, and lied to. I'm stuck here, there's really no way out.


{Back to the past, where the betrayal happened.}

"Hey, Whizl. Come over here, gotta show ya something quick. We made something new in the gate.", as Vain motioned me over the gate.

"Huh? Alright." As I followed his gesture, I walked on the marble floor, and take a glance at the gate.

"You see it? Right there? Look closer, you'll see it." Vain pointed his finger at the gate, showing nothing.

"What? I don't see anything..." I put my face closer to the gate, and squinted, to see if I could see any noticeable difference. Nothing.

"Let's get you a closer look." Vain chuckled.

Then, at that moment, me wondering what he meant by that, he puts a chair for me to stand on.

"Look from above, might help you." Vain murmured.

"Wait, what? I couldn't hear you, what did you say?" I asked, trying to make out his words.

He shoves me into the portal, and the portal engulfs me, as I slowly sink into the portal, I stare in horror as Vain smiles at me. I look below me, and watch as the liquid of the League sinks me down. It was thick, and as I slowly sank, the liquid began to drown me, and after an eternity of desperately trying to fix myself out, I disappeared into the goop.


They wanted me gone... Damn summoners. I was always the best of them, and they'd always tell me, "Why don't you just join the champions since you're so good?", damn jealousy... I can't believe they did that to me...

I'm now here, a couple hours later. In a mysterious place, sandy, dark, and have no concept of where I am. Every step I take barefoot scorches my feet. I can't see much, only a dusty old mummy, short, and small, with dust and spiders over it in it's tomb. It seems that someone decided to put water over the mummy, because that coffin where the mummy is in is leaking with water. It's impossible, how it can be so hot in such a tomb...

(I don't think I'm a good storywriter, so depending on the feedback, I will continue, or not.)

2 Comments

Mimy8/25/2015, 8:52:05 PM1 votes

Seem's a little slightly rushed.. perhaps you can add bits and pieces later on.. like why they wanted you gone.. Perhaps that something the main character figures out on the way.

Also some questions.. While playing league.. notice how some of the champions know they're being controlled? Sona recognizes you as the only person who can hear her. And Nocturne asks, "Are you my nightmare, or am I yours?" (Could that hint that him being controlled is his worst nightmare)

How would the champions react to "Being controlled" by a power outside their force? And Is this power corrupted to choose a side in this war to favor?

Another question is.. As a summoner... How would they react to you, would some of them hate you?

Darn it.. now you got me all thinking....

darapier178/25/2015, 8:55:26 PM1 votes

it's decent, but it lacks some flavor. Try adding more description. All i know is he went through a portal. there is a guy called vain. he got betrayed by vain