Darwyn - Of Vengeful Oblivion

sneezing slug·6/15/2015, 6:09:47 AM·7 votes·2,616 views

Darwyn: A boy sent on a path for revenge after the Demacian Royal Family slaughtered his parents. But his ambitions were not always to end the Demacian way of life.

_Early in his life, he spent most of his time in his father's shop. His father, as well as his mother, were artificers. They spent most of their time constructing automatons for janitorial uses. In his younger years, his father and mother passed down their ways of artifice, so that one day he may too become a full fledged artificer. _

His family was making a business trip to Demacia when Demacian patrol stopped the caravan, as the parents were accused of smugging weapons of war onto their borders. During this time, Demacia was having official affairs with Piltover, their home, and the patrols had begun to be more aggressive against Piltover caravans. After their caravan was searched and finding parts that the father pleaded were parts to make an automaton, were deemed as parts of a doomsday device. Then, the parents were taken away from the child and sent to trial. Being found guilty of creating weapons of war, the parents were set for execution at sun's rise, when the clocktower struck nine. As Darwyn rushed through the crowd into the streets, his parents by the gallows, he tried to rush up there, as a child's attempt to "save" them, but he was cut off by a large armored knight, with a huge sword. The boy was shoved down to the pavement, away from the guard, as he thrusted his sword on the ground infront of him, blocking his way. The guard spoke few words. "Run home, boy. Don't try to save these pathetic criminals. They will die by the justice of Demacia."

With that, Darwyn witnessed his parents hanged, and with a shocked look on his face, it faded into a vengeful demeanor at the guard, getting up, and walking away with clenched fists.

Moving away from Piltover after his parent's death, he found refuge in Noxus, but only as a lowly bum. He found himself on the streets doing dirty work for the Noxian mobs to get money, for food and shelter, and some jobs even from Noxian High Command. These jobs could be as simple as break ins and stealing things, gathering of certain reagents, and as grim as assassinations. With the gold sought out from the jobs, he bought himself his own warehouse where he continued his father's work as an artificer. However, his work was far more simpler than making janitor automatons. With the work passed down to him from his father before his passing, he worked on much more violent things, and his plan to destroy all of Demacia came the day he made Pathrazer: A large laser that could destroy a mountain. His plan was simple: Destroy Demacia. For a child at a mere 13 years of age, he felt he could take on the world.

The night he finished his work, he sat on the roof of his workshop in city, looking up at the night sky, assuring that his parents would not be unavenged. However, as he glanced up into the moon in the horizon, he had a sudden realization. One that would destroy Demacia for good. With this laser he could probably blow a hole in the side of Demacia's walls, but that wouldn't be good. He couldn't destroy it fast enough, as he'd probably get caught. Not worth it. Instead, he looked up again at the moon, and smiled.

"I will take you down with them."

_ With that he began modifying the laser the very next morning, rerendering it as unfinished on his own personal agenda, which ended up making the canon larger, and larger. His original plan to make the laser a mortar that could have easily been set up to be planted on the ground, vanished when he found only one way to make the laser power: The life force of a living being. He tried to advertise his invention on the street and ask for volunteers, but none heeded his call. With that, he grew angry and inpatient, and hooked up the large laser to his arm, which permanently clamped onto his limb, replacing it for good._

He stomped outside later in the week one night when the moon was right, into the middle of the town's center, where a fountain was. He climbed to the top of it, standing on it with pride, and a vengeful look as he glared unto the moon's light. The crowd question what the boy was doing, before he announced he was going to destroy all of Demacia. The townspeople became intrigued, and with that, he pulled some levers and twisted some nozzles on Pathrazer, and it began to charge up. Light beaming out from his creation, it nearly sucked almost all of his life from him, and then, all of Noxus echoed with a large shockwave, as a giant, orange laser shot up from the town center, and blasted the moon directly. In the sky, the Moon could be seen taking the impact largely, explosions from the center of the moon sent rocks flying in space in all directions as the boy drilled an entire hole into the moon.

His plan was to blast the moon down onto Valoran and hit Demacia head on, destroying the entire town. However, the boy's miscalculations would be the end of him. As the laser powered down from hitting, the crowd cheered for a moment before realizing, that the parts of the moon that were shot down, were not only hitting Demacia, but all over Valoran as meteorites from the moon rained down on the town, and the denizens ran in horror. After the atrocity was over, Noxus High Command arrested Darwyn on crimes of nearly wiping Noxus off the map, blowing a hole in the moon, which can now be seen every night, and nearly declaring war against other nations and cities with his machine.

As punishment for his crimes, he was sent to the Institute of War for life.


Abilties and In-Game play.

Melee attack range. Utilizes mana.

NOTICE:_ I dislike making statistics (beyond cooldowns) like how much damage something will deal, or how much mana it will cost, or their starting stats, because I believe Riot would prefer to do that themselves._

Passive: Fueling the Hatred Whenever Darwyn receives any form of damage, he gains a small temporary bonus movement speed and ability power, which can stack overtime.

Q: Shockweave Darwyn shoots a skillshot that continues until it explodes after four seconds or hits a champion, damaging not only the champion but also hitting enemies in a small radius. On it's way, it shocks nearby minions/creeps for minor magic damage. Darwyn can activate this ability again to force detonate the skillshot in it's place. Cooldown: 7 seconds.

W: Slow Mode Darwyn shoots a long range blue laser in a specified direction, contrasting from his regular orange lasers. On hit the laser slows the target, and deals slight magic damage. Champions facing towards the laser are also silenced. Cooldown: 16 seconds.

E: Immolate (Toggle) Passive: Basic attacks burn the target upon hit, dealing small magic damage overtime. Active: Darwyn's basic attacks become a channel laser (Think the Nexus turret's laser, for example), giving greatly increased range and increasing attack speed and draining mana overtime while attacking. While toggled, all basic attack damage is dealt in magic damage. (Sorry, turret snipers. D:) Cooldown between toggle: 1 second.

R/Ultimate: Beckon the End Times Darwyn channels for up to 5 seconds (which can be quickened by activating the ability again), then dealing minor magic damage in a small shockwave radius shooting a large laser in the air and landing wherever the cursor is located, beaming down on the cursor's location for 4 seconds, dealing magic damage based on the amount of time channeling. This ability has no range as it can be used globally, and can be used on the minimap (however I wouldn't suggest doing so as the laser doesn't take up too much area. We're talking about Nasus E size?) The amount of mana spent is dependent on how long the channel is, as it will drain actively during the channel. The laser does not go at the speed of the cursor, as it will have it's own set speed, but it will follow the cursor. The laser also leaves a temporary trail behind it that deals minor magic damage to those that step in it. You will have field of view of your laser at all times. Cooldown: 85 seconds.


Quotes

Upon selection Annoyed sigh, sounds as if he just rolled his eyes.

Moving "Alright, Alright!" "Fine, I'm going!" "Whatever you say, grouch." "Leave me alone already." Annoyed Sigh

Attacking "Take some of THIS." "Get out of here!" "Go to hell!" "Die!" "Let's get this straight pal, one of us ain't gonna leave alive, and it sure as hell ain't gonna be me."

Taunt "Oooo so tough! You act like I care."

Joke "Knock knock who's there stupid joke that's who."

Any and all criticism is welcome!

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29 Comments

Kuzja17/9/2015, 5:43:29 AM2 votes

Damn, and they say Tryndamere was the angry one

Buttèred Biscuit6/15/2015, 9:41:30 PM2 votes

Lasers for everyone. Cool concept. He might do well, but you might want to be clearer on what role he would mostly play as. Right now he might go well in all lanes.

Omega Alchemist6/15/2015, 9:46:45 PM2 votes

10/10 with this i now have a reason to bait my allies and get them killed lol. I like the idea.

i also make concepts if you want to check it out.

http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/FjyA5aEt-andrelick-the-shadow-of-despair-champion-concept

meme cat alpha6/16/2015, 12:36:00 AM2 votes

That ult seems like the range is a bit too long unless it's slow. It reminds me of the jinx ult. maybe a medium range like jinx's shock skill shot. Maybe a buff with a slow or a suppress. Or maybe a longer cool down with where he gets a speed buff and they get slowed. But those are just some ideas.

Snow Taradien6/16/2015, 2:14:18 AM2 votes

I dont really think people will really stand by that passive because it only benefits you when your team is doing poorly, and is it global or is it within a radius? If its global its not so bad because it can help you snowball a lot easier, especially if he's intended to be a top laner.

I like the mark/dash nature of the Q a lot, the W seems a little awkward though, there are no champions in the game who have mana regen. It could work a la Yi's heal though, or perhaps you could make it a damage mitigation overshield of sorts that works in a similar activation style to twitch's q?

The E is really nice, its like Anivia's Q and I like that a lot. Maybe you could have some interaction between this and his Q? Like if they are marked by the E they can auto dash to them with Q? Or something? Or maybe just take more damage from his Q?

I like the ult a lot, its kinda like Tess's ult in some ways.

HolyPaladin176/16/2015, 4:25:29 AM2 votes

I think it's cool you check out other peoples champions too.

30562438_DEL6/16/2015, 6:32:59 PM2 votes

I'd do a few more passes on the lore, and everything thematic, but I think the abilities are good. the W and R are particularly *fun, though they may be a tough sell for Riot. I do have a couple of questions though:

  1. why does his basic attack consume mana?
  2. what is the missle speed on his E? with normal missle speeds this could have a VERY long range (~2000). I don't have a problem with that, and actually think it would make for an even better ability that way, but I wasn't sure if you were aware of the detail.
HolyPaladin176/15/2015, 6:42:31 AM2 votes

Interesting but with those cool downs I think he'd do well as a bit of a hybrid.

luiskeniosis6/19/2015, 2:47:20 AM2 votes

I think his ult is a bit like Gangplank's ult. and i love, LOVE the lore! Nice job overall!

WithMyHoodieOn6/19/2015, 5:40:49 PM2 votes

Told you I'd come check it out! Very cool. You obviously spent a lot of time working on the story. That, to me, is great because i feel that lately some of Riot's characters have had lackluster lore. Personally, I feel that the character's story is as important, if not more so, than a character's ability and game play. Good work

Bigg Fuddgee6/20/2015, 5:23:24 PM2 votes

Got an up vote from me, when you originally linked him to me I didn't have time to read his lore and i believe you had an ability that he could channel and get mana back that I didn't like cause it didn't really fit his kit.

however I will say that he should not in any form be a melee champion given that his E sounds like a ranged toggle, and he has 2 pokes. What I would suggest is tweaking the passive a little bit to have synergy with his ranged attacks and ranged abilities. For instance you have really high cd's on his Q and E and I kind of see him like an AP ezreal in a way, I'd make his passive lower the cd's of his Q and W in some way. So to organize my thoughts out in the way i used to review champions.

Lore 10/10

Make him a ranged champion or make his Toggled E make him have ranged, cause i just don't see an animation of a toggled laser at melee attack, and a laser cannon arm sounds like a ranged champion all the way.

Passive: If you make him ranged or make his E make him ranged, I would change this up a bit because if he were ranged he wouldn't want to take damage. So i would enforce some kind of mana management or CD reduction because the Q and W are on pretty high cd's

Q: 10/10

W: 9/10 is this a line or just aoe blast at the end like his Q?

E: 7/10 again i'd make it to where it makes him ranged or just increases his ranged, i would maybe even suggest that the longer he attacks a single target the damage increases, don't know if you ever played SC2 but sort of like a void ray from that, like after 3 seconds of attacking the same target you'd deal bonus damage. Oh, also, draining mana can never be used, riot doesn't like resource draining abilities.

R: 6/10 I'm kind of confused if this is a skill shot or if it like a ziggs ult, I feel like damage increase on a channel is kind of pointless as this would primarily be used as a finisher for someone who escaped like all globals or longed ranged ults are. I'd suggest the channel increasing the radius or the speed that is falls down, accuracy is everything with globals, not so much damage.

sneezing slug6/18/2015, 11:29:31 PM1 votes

Concept has been heavily updated!

Changes:

  • Lore is more detailing, leaving less questions and plotholes
  • E was switched to Q
  • W became a slow instead of a Yi heal with mana regeneration.
  • E became a long range basic attack laser.
  • Passive reworked to keep theme with the lore, but not be based off of your team failing.

If you have any qualms or futher suggestions with this update, reply here!