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please be gentle first champion idea (riot I'd love to hear your thoughts)

LJ2w1GhbNH·1/16/2015, 5:20:50 PM·1 votes·918 views

Champion Idea #1 Name: Raziel Type: Tiger Lore: During the start of the of the wars between Demacia and Noxus there was a very peaceful forest on the outskirts of the Demacian stronghold. The Noxus forces had tried to lay siege to the cities walls for some time but this time was different. A battle was brewing in the forest and soon, an unlikely ally would join forces with a side of the battle, but which side was still to be determined. Laying in the shade of a jungle tree a tiger cub, the cub was watching his mother and father who were trying to start teaching him how to defend himself should he ever need to. As the day rolled on and it got ever hot in the humid jungle the little cub decided to take a drink from the nearby pool of water that he would often jump into to cool off on days like today. On this faithful day everything would change. The young warrior in training Sona, who was out training with her Etwahl mastering her ability to fight with it, began to hear screams in the distance. Immediately she recognized the voices of fellow friend Taric and Xin Zhao who were on a patrol mission. She immediately enchanted herself with a speed boost chord she had been practicing and began racing towards her friends screams. At the same time the young cub and his parents had heard the distress screams and the parents immediately went closer to their cub and stood on either side of him. The screaming came closer and closer and then out of nowhere through the trees came a man who had been thrown through the trees, by what though the tigers had no idea. The man lay motionless on the ground and the young cub slowly walked up and licked the unknown man’s face. The man began to open his eyes. Just as he began to move a second man came running to the injured man’s side. He mumbled some wards and a green aura appeared around the injured man and immediately he sprang up and grabbed his long spear and went into a crouched stance. The man who came running put his shield up and stood back to back to the other man. Then it began. A rocket came flying out of the woods and the tigers and men scatters and out came a women with a massive gun on her back and a smaller one in her hands. She was attacking the men from the tree line and then out of nowhere a dark spell came flying out of the trees and it caused a pool of bubbling goo to form below the young cub and his parents. The shielded man immediately ran and grabbed the cub and pulled him out of the deadly goo, but his parents could not be saved they had collapsed in the goo and weren’t moving. He began to try and roar in a whimper almost and both of the men turned back and started at the sad sight. Then the little tiger began to drool and get ferocious looking, even in its small stature it didn’t look cute anymore. Spikes grew from his shoulders and then he lunged forwarded. As he did the women with the guns began to shoot and his speed he was able to dodge the bullets. Moving with such vigor and accuracy pounce to pounce, then just as he became in striking range of the women a noise came through the jungle and a yellow bright light hit both the women and they stood there and began to dance. The Tiger stopped in his tracks with a confused look. Then a voice screamed “ATTACK” and without hesitation he returned his attention to the still silly looking women and bit into the women who killed his parents. He attack with ferocity bite after bite and alone with this mysterious women he caused the two women to run away with their tails between their legs. He stared at the women and she looked back at him. Neither with a voice to use both with a connection, she made it possible for him to get payback. From that day forward he would stand beside her. In service to protect her and come to her aid anytime she would strike a chord he would be there to protect her and others like her. The demacian forces had gained a new ally in a sad way this day. But the forces that stood against demacian would never be safe again traveling this jungle. After he grew of age he finally had followed his friend to the place where she had trained for. The league of legends was his new home. Skills: Passive: Tiger Sense – The tigers high senses can hear battle happening. Anytime an enemy champion is in battle he gains a movement speed boost equal to 10% of current speed within 50. (scales in increments of 5 per level capping at 150.) Q: Deep wounds: Raziel lungles into an area kicking dust into the eyes within of 10. This blinds the targets for their next 3 basic attacks or on hit spells. (AoE spells are not affected by this). (Cooldown 10 seconds) W: Rending claws: Passive: Raziel causes target to bleed for 1% of its maximum HP every second for 5 seconds. While the target is bleeding it takes 5% extra damage from auto attacks from all sources. (This includes minions). Activate: If the target is bleeding Raziels does 50% extra damage to the target (based off of total AD), but the passive ability goes on cooldown during this period. (Cooldown 5 seconds.) E: Blood scent Passive: When an enemy champion dies and the blood fillers the air Raziel gains a bestial presence and begins to become more ferocious His basic attacks deal an additional 5% damage stacking 2 times. (scales to 5% from 2.5 / 3.5 / 4.5 / 5.5)
Activate: Gains (1% / 2% / 3% / 4%) attack speed. (cooldwon 10 seconds) R: Ferocity: Activate: Raziel mutates and gains razor spikes along his front shoulders helped deflect blows to his body. When the ability activates he gains 10% armor equal to his current armor. (this has no bonus against ability power). For each dead ally champion on the map this bonus increases by an additional 10%. (I.E. 100 armor active ability with 4 dead allies you armor goes to 154. It scales as such. 100 x 1.10 = 110. 110 x 1.40 = 154.) Pros: Great clean Up fighter Best in jungle position (passives to dmg apply to jungle creeps also) Great at bursting down squishies Strong verse AD base characters. Great lane entrance speed with passive Cons Ability power champs counter Can be kited, only 1 gap closer but no slows to counter Weak early game Snares completely shut him down Very reliant on snowballing

Base HP:530 Gains 80 per lvl No resouce source Attacked speed base : .69 Increase .05 per level Move speed base: 365 Increases: .005% per level

Be nice please. First time doing this

9 Comments

Vigilwake1/16/2015, 9:08:40 PM1 votes

Sounds alot like Rengar but still interesting

Aquaman7111/17/2015, 12:14:34 AM1 votes

So, there are a few things that you could definitely do to make this champion a bit more balanced.

Let's start with his passive. I'm going to assume you mean that Raziel gains attack speed when nearby enemies who are also attacking a source. First off, 50 units is a very, VERY short distance. You might want to up that to, say, 500. Otherwise, this ability is fine.

Now, for his Q. As previously stated, the current distance is very short. You may want to change it to about 300 or so, in a cone. Now, blinds just aren't very fun, which is why only two champs currently have them. Either way, what they do is cause auto-attacks to do no damage upon hitting an enemy unit for a very short duration. Ergo, you should change the blind to be for something more set in stone, like two seconds, and only have it apply to basic attacks.

His W is really OP right now. Every basic attack is guaranteed to deal an extra 5% true damage? Um... no. That's broken. And Raziel does 50% more damage to targets damaged this way? Just...no. A much better idea would be to have Raziel deal 5% true damage on a enemy he attacks, but only once every, say, 12 seconds. Also, his active W should only increase his damage by about 30%, otherwise it get really broken once Raziel was a high enough level.

His E is fine, but you might want to increase the attack speed buff to, say, 20 or 30 %, or something like that. 4% is nothing.

His R is pretty good, but it doesn't seem all that 'ultimate', if you know what I mean.

Final thoughts: You have a great concept on your hands here! Try to give him some sort of resource, though, like mana, etc. Anyway, keep up the good work!

Caetoma1/17/2015, 3:15:13 AM1 votes

Oooooooooo, a full animal champion? and by the looks of it, not one that turns into either a hunking male or a sexy female. Very nice!

I will now review this champion and give you my thoughts! (I'll try to be gentle)

First off, I must agree with Aquaman on some of the points he brought up. Those distances for some of your skills are very, very shot. You might not know the usual conversion of distance in the game (I myself have only a rough understanding of it) but to give you and idea of how things work, the range of a typical melee champ such as the one you have is placed at 125 units radius. That means from the center of the champ to the edge of its attack range is 125 units. The distances you put down would mean your Tiger would have to practically be sitting on top of the enemy champ's head to land some of his skills. Buff those distances up man!

Now onto the actual review

Passive looks like a big speed booster to me. if a team fight breaks and hes nearby, it seams like he would be flying across the distance into the fight even with the soft cap on MS. But did you mean for this to be a global passive or a certain distance passive? If it was global then he would have stupidly high MS to make boots almost irrelevant on him. I might suggest turning it into a certain range similar to the range on WW lvl 2 blood scent. That way he doesn't just zoom across the rift like he has a rocket strapped to his furry bum.

I'm a bit curious as to the name of Q in regards to its effects. A name like deep wounds would sound like the skill would make Raziel would leap at an opponent and take an arm off or something. Instead he just kicks sand at a champ's eyes to blind them for a bit. Might be either better to change the name of the skill to match its effects or make a different effect to match the name. Also 3 autos for a 10 sec cd? I have to say the same as Aqua and suggest making it 2 seconds. 3 AA's is no time at all for a ADC or even worse, assassins. Also might be a good idea to make it cause some damage depending on how you wanted it to act with the rest of his kit.

W is a bit... broken. Actually, its very broken. The bleed is very powerful against tanks if its just true damage instead of either physical or magic based damage. Making it do damage based off %max hp just makes tanks fall apart at the seems. I suggest changing it to current HP as the closer a champ is to death, the less blood they have in them to bleed out with. Also the 5% extra damage from all sources is also very over powered. Especially if you have Raziel as the JGer. Having him gank a lane where you have a high burst champ on your team just deletes foes is almost no time at all. (I'm looking at you Riven and Fiora!) Making so only he does the extra 5% lowers the insta gibbing by alot. Also that active is just plain broken in every sense of the word. Building him straight damage means that at 300 AD he can land one auto and then deal 473 damage on a 5 sec cd! [300+ 1.5(150)= 450+ 5% (23 rounded up)= 473] And that's not including critical chance if its an empowered auto! Lowering that active damage would make him healthier to fight with and against. Like maybe 20% or something along those lines.

I might suggest a slight change to the E as it looks like a more situational kind of thing. The damage increase can stay, but maybe changing it to a flat amount and taking out the requirement for a champ to have recently died to proc it. If your facing a team filled with the most slippery of champs (IE zed, fizz, etc.) Them dying is going to be very hard to do. Also buffing up that active is a must. At max rank 4% is not going to be noticeable in the slightest. 40% however is going to be very, very noticeable. Also is it based of his base AS or total AS?

The ultimate however I really like the concept for. It sounds like a last stand thing for when your defending the base after a TF that went very bad. I might suggest though to have him gain some mag resist as well as the armor bonus. The lore you made for him sounds like it was Morgana's pool 'o Tar that changed him, so him being resistant to magic would be a good idea. Also how long does the duration of his Ulti last? I might suggest making last as long or possibly longer than a Jax ultimate active. Also I want to point out your math is a bit off if i read your description of it correctly. 10% bonus if all champs on your side are alive but increases by 10% per dead ally champion. This would add up to 50% bonus armor if you pop it while everyone else is dead.

All in all this champ sounds like another duelist along the lines of Jax, Fiora, Aatrox and others. Good continuous damage on a short time delay between W activations. An ultimate that makes him deceptively tanky while allies are respawning. Its a good kit and concept, just needs a few buffs and nerfs in key places. Also what is his base AD? I didn't see it under his stats. Also making him mana base would be a good idea as well. It balances him out a bit by putting him on a battery to watch how much he spams his stuff.

Nice idea though, just keep an eye out in the future for glaring possible issues.