U HAVE TO SEE THIS CHAMPION CONCEPT (LORE I WON'T REVEAL ABILITIS YET)

ArrowOfLight·4/16/2017, 5:51:58 PM·13 votes·902 views

Hi guys i wanted to show u this champion lore or concept however u wanna call her her name is Alura she's tall 175 cm, handsome, pretty girl with yellow hair (like the hair of elementalist lux or victorious janna) and blue eyes. So here we go this is her lore let me know what u thinka bout this! ENJOY!!!

Alura, The reformer of the crystal empire

Before Alura's birth her mother Vahira, one of the strongest sorceresses in ionia, fell in love with an angel , Lakaris he was Kayle's friend but they always disagreed about ways of their rase. That was love at first sight they couldn't live one without the other. A year later the couple were expecting a baby. During the parturition her mother almost died. From her second year she was showing sings of magic but of immortality too. Lakaris knew that if she inherited immortality he would have to bring her in a place where mortals do not belong or the rest of his rase would execute his whole family bcs of breaking their law, but he couldn't break Vahira's heart. So he requested from her to take his immortality away along with his wings and never to talk about this to Alura. Vahira did as he asked. Hoping to live in peace they moved in one village named Hirana's Monastery, where they knew they'll have protection if Lakaris's kind find them.

During the Ionian and Nexus war Vahira had to deffend her people and her child as well, Lakaris joined her. When the war ended and Ionia won, the monks of the village helped to the wounded. Alura came out of the temple and saw her parents dead. Her mother was still breathing and her last words were:

"Alura honey, i love you so much, take this necklace and wear her everywhere u go, in every moment of your life and u wont be alone my dear, daddy loves you too don't forget it..."

Scared and feeling alone Alura disappeared, she ran away from the village as far as she could into a deep forest. After a long running Alura hid in a trunk of one big three. She couldn't stop to think about her mothers eyes and her beautifull smile which made her cry. Then she heard something outside. She came out of the trunk and at the first look that seemed like an animal with big ears and hairy hands (like human hands but more hairy) in a yellow-blue t-shirt and blue trousers pulling his carts full of random things. She mustered the courrage and went close to the animal which was higher than her for 2 heads (she was six then). She pulled him by the shirt and the animal instantly turned. Seeing a kid crying and full of fear the animal said :

"Hi, i'm Tyka, you don't have to be afraid of me I won't hurt you, but what are u doing alone in this forest".

Alura started to cry and said:

"My mother's gone bad people hurt her and my papa".

Having empathy with the kid he asked her if she want to go with him in his village. Alura being afraid and not knowing how to turn back agreed. During the trip she observed him, his every single move. She noticed that the man can move faster than normal humans and saw generosity and goodness in him. Since she was quite the whole time he asked her what did she likeed. She said she liked flowers and butterflies but she wanted to have a brother or a sister too. He told her that he have 2 kids, a girl and a boy named Zaia and Gonik. Talking with Tyka she stopped crying and she wasn't shy anymore.

When they went to the village all the people was looking Alura and they whispered: "who is she, what is she doing here, why he brought her in our village". Seeing her afraid agian he told her that she didn't had to worry about nothing. This was one vastayan village not big but with a lot of people. Their houses were made of wood and all of them were equal some of them had different fur but everything else was the same. The elder of the village stopped Tyka and asked him why he brought a human child in their village. Tyka told him what happend. He couldn't leave her there in a place like that, she wouldn't survive a day in that forest without food. The elder allowed the child to stay but as much as she don't make problems or put them in danger. He brought her at his home and his wife introduced herself with a generous smile and said:

"Hi i'm Sineva and who are you?

"I am Alura" - she replied.

"So, Alura are you hungry?" - asked Sineva.

Alura nodded.

Sineva went in the kitchen and brought her some strange fruits and said:

"The violet one is luscious like the blue one, but the red one is a bit sour, take 1 before the dinner"

She left her and went in the kitchen to make a dinner and Alura didn't stop to watch that strange fruits. Few moments later Zaia and Gonik rapidly ran in the room where was Alura. Zaia was a little higher than Gonik with a red ribbon on her hair and clean clothes. Gonik was small and he had a bit of earth dust on himself. Alura liked them from the first moment she saw them. Then they brought her to their room and said:

"This is our room here's Gonik's bed and the pink one is mine, our father said that you'll stay here for some time so he will buy you a new bed."

Their room was really big with a lof toys everywhere. Right next to their room was theit parents' and behind the house they had a big garden full of various vegetables.

For the next ten years Alura lived a happy life here, she worked at the farm (of vegetables) along with Zaia, Gonik and Seniva. Tyka was a merchant who travelled from one to the other village to sell his products in order to feed his family. Of course with Alura's powers (water and air till that moment she didn't knew she had a crystal power) they finished fast a work in the garden so they could explore the forest around their house.

One day Alura was exploring the forest with Zaia, Gonik and few more vastayan kids. Since they were older they could explore deeper the forest. While Zaia and Gonik were busy claiming on a high and old tree to take the eggs of the Haguvary's bird Alura saw a small entry under a waterfall at the other side of one long bridge. Going there all alone she entered in that cave and it turned out to be an old and forgotten temple. On the wall of the temple were drawn some big cristals and a big one in the middle. Under the picture there were some strange words that were halfly damaged. Going forward she saw a lot of the things but none of it she could understand. In the middle of the temple was set a table made of stone (shape of circle) and in the middle was a shining small cristal in shape of star. She took the crystal and in the same moment she touched it the crystal brigtly lit up in blue color in 1 second she saw a lot of people casting a spell and crystalzing everyone there. She brougt the crystal home and hid it under her bed but that wasn't the end something weird started to happend. Something she didn't felt before.

The next morning wasn't like the others she felt more powerfull than usually but she couldn't explain it. When she woke up she went into the garden to to water the plants as usuall she just moved her hands but isntead of watering the plants she made a lake. All the plants withered. She was so dissapointed in herself and when Seniva asked her what happend, she couldn't explain. She told her that she used her powers as always nothing else and the water jsut keept comming. Going again in the misterious cave she saw someone sneaking in. She went closer to see who is he. When she entered in Alura started to observe the old. He had a long white beard in a white robe and one big stick with the same cristal on his top. But the old man knew that she is there and he said:

"Alura, my dear come out. I know that you're there there is no need to hide".

She listened to the old man and stepped closer. Then the man started again :

"Once this was the famous table of the 5 strongest mages in Runeterra, my leader named Alvudis was in charge there. But time passed and one other leader refused to listen to him he wanted to bring balance destroying one land, so he had to banish him. The furious man after being banished promised to Alvudis and siad that instead of that land he'll destory his'. But nobody know what am i talking about. People think that this is just a fairy tale. But one day the long forgotten empire will shine again. Now tell me what are you doing here!?".

"I'm... just... Before few days i was here too and a found a crystal in the middle of the table and when i touched it he lit up so bright that i couldn't see anything around me for few seconds". -answered Alura.

"The crystal lit up?" - repeated the old man.

"Yes and i can feel something throught me. Something i cna't explain my power just growed. Today i wanted to water the plants and instead i made a lake" - replied Alura with a big dissapointment in he eyes.

"I can't belive all the legends were true" - said a man with a big exnthusiasm - "You have a long and dangerous road infront of yourself but remember when it becomes messy you can't give up!".

Few moments later the man passed throught a wall and disappered.

Alura wondred and couldn't stop thinking about that questioning herself: "How he disappeared like that, why he said that i have a long road infrot of me, where did he get from a crystal same as mine?". She couldn't stop with her questions. Confused with what she saw she went strict to the elder of the village (an old man with long hair and beard he wasn't a vastaya like the rest of the village but the villagers talked that the old man had more than thousand of years). She caught him alone and said everything what happend her since yestereday. The old man looked at her and said:

"So, you're not an ordinary kid as i thought 10 years ago" - he said.

Pulling a head of a lion he opened a door under his desk and said:

"Follow me".

Alura followed him under ground and went in one huge room full of books and scrolls and said:

"Let's see... This can't be possible... They don't exist for centuries. The last one was born before 800 yers ago and he was believed for the last of them".

Alura didn't knew what is he talking about so she asked him.

"You posses a ability to use the ancient crystal magic. Which one you can get when the moon gets at his highest point and when Sylifixis flower bloom. When this happen the closest newborn get the ability to use this kind of magic in our case it is you Alura. Did you saw pictures in your head like memories that you couldn't remember where u saw it or if u even saw it?" - asked the elder.

"I saw but... everything was so confusing..." -replied Alura.

TO BE CONTINUED... i will continue tomorrow.

The last time when someone had a crystal power was before three thousand years ago, the ancient crystal empire where people lived in Utopia, everyone was accepted there no matter which rase he is but that empire is believed to be long gone. The Crystal empire was also known for their invincible army with a crystal armor there was no gun, blade, cannon or arrow that could've break it. Kids with this powers get born once in few generation. Since then there was no clue about this empire.

"Only you can determine what's possible... and what is not " -Alura

[zombie-brand-facepalm] "This Alura is so so so naive. she really think that she'll find the ancient Crystal Empire it's better to burn everything... She don't know what's fun"

If u have any comments or criticisms let me know. Some stuffs i didn't said bcs i thought it's to much and that nobody is gonna read all of this. Here u got some stuffs more: The necklace around Alura's neck was Vahira's necklace in the shape of the ionian twin dragon that is actually a talisman and inside of it is a part of Vahira's magic and every time when Alura put her hand on it and say: " Va sah ti e'" she can talk with Vahria but only shortly . Then before Lakaris died he wrote a letter to Alura that he know about her powers (crystal magic) he said that he knew from the first moment that she's a special kid not like the others who posses the magic. One of the main reason she started to search for the Crystal empire was because he gave her a trace. If we get someone from Riot saying something here and telling me to do it i'll write her diary during the travelling (i thought about this too) in the woods of ionia and going in unexplored areas along with Sheg' lai - a big avanturist and explorer.

I REALLY HOPE U LIKE IT!!! [slayer-jinx-catface]

17 Comments

CobaltTheMadMage4/16/2017, 10:23:09 PM8 votes

Oh my goodness the grammar on this is so atrocious it's painful to read.

So after an exercise in cryptography here's what I gathered: she's a hybrid of an Ionian sorceress and an angel Kayle was acquainted with, the latter of whom opted to be made human so he could stay with and raise his child when she was born. Her parents were lost in the Noxian occupation and when they were finally driven out she was fortunate enough to be found by Karma, who had her sent to the greatest magical school in Ionia for some reason. Her attendance was cut short when she started displaying anomalous powers not seen since the fall of an ancient utopian civilization. So instead she was trained by Karma herself, who taught her how to master all four other elemental magics just to stop her from actually learning about crystal magic herself. Which she did anyway because apparently wanting to keep an entire civilization secret due to the fear and suspicion surrounding its inheritors doesn't preclude leaving books on it in the library. So now she wants to learn more about said civilization in hopes of starting it anew.

I have SO many questions.

First off: what the heck happened to her being a half-angel hybrid? Was that just arbitrary Mary-Sue fluff just to excuse having an eternally young and beautiful champ on top of being inheritor of crystal magic? Does crystal magic only appear in half-angel hybrids? Was most or all of their utopian civilization formed of such hybrids? Was its disappearance due to full-blooded angels fearing them as abominations and exterminating them? Is she in danger of facing the same fate? If her father knew she would be immortal, why would he opt to have his immortality taken away if she would be in danger for being what she was? Of all the children lost to the Noxians, why did this one in particular stand out to Karma? How did Karma teach her all four elements if she doesn't even use them herself? Is magic even widely practiced in Ionia? I thought everyone did more chi-like stuff, hence so many Ionian champs that use the Energy gauge instead of mana.

I mean, this started out as a cool idea, but then somewhere along the line it just suddenly took a turn into full Mary-Sue and lost its appeal to me. The implications of a half-angel hybrid was interesting enough (I for one am looking forward to learning more about the true nature of angels in Runeterra), but then suddenly we just seem to abandon it entirely in favor of the whole "utopian crystal empire magic" thing right up until it's time to mention she's also immortal and stops aging at a prime age of 24. Oh, and she's also a magical prodigy that could one-shot the greatest of Ionia's mages in public venue competitions (which I still don't know if Ionia would even have) by the time she was 17.

All these things that make her special don't seem to naturally transition into each other in the end; it just looks like you're trying to slap on as many ways to make her "the best" as you possibly can while making her origins, motivations, and goals seem like misaligned afterthoughts. I wouldn't say give up on this idea entirely, in fact I highly suggest you do put more and more work and thought into the story of this young hybrid, I just feel it necessary to point out where and why exactly she needs work and consequently how long it's gonna take before she's good.

Mariusthehent4/17/2017, 7:56:03 PM5 votes

This sounds like a poor fanfic: Mother is a powerfull sorceress and father a freaking angel She has a once of a generation type of magic that is incredibly powerfull Her teacher is another champion who probably is really busy most of the time leading Ionia, but became her personal mentor

I know that people in general are too quick to proclaim a mary sue, but I think it seems very appropriate here

DOMGEDOON4/16/2017, 9:24:29 PM3 votes

This is awesome. No comment! [zombie-brand-mindblown]

TUFKE4/16/2017, 5:55:03 PM3 votes

Wow, you did really great story. Good details and everything, really like it. Riot should think about this one.

rockan024/18/2017, 3:41:19 PM2 votes

smthJanna

Pinki Jr4/17/2017, 7:55:34 PM2 votes

You did a great job there. This lore is original i read nearly all the lores in LoL but this one isn't like any of them. U have my full support with this champ i hope that Riot will see this one!!!Graves [slayer-jinx-catface]

ArrowOfLight4/17/2017, 7:48:01 PM1 votes

But you know even if we make a perfect lore and abilities that we don't have in the game now Riot wouldn't even bother looking at it. They have their own concepts so they made boards just for fun why should they listen to us. They'll start considering about the stories u write if u get a job in their company. Which one i would like i have so much ideas about new champs stories about Runeterra. I know that my english isn't perfect but if i get a job in there they would easly understand what i want to say. 😃 Till then i can just hope that some1 of them Even tell me to write a storie about something ☺