[Concept] Untitled, The

Rockman·12/3/2017, 3:29:18 AM·1 votes·379 views

KIT

Innate - Muse

The Untitled forms a bond with the closest allied champion after 3 seconds. The bond can be broken if they remain more than 1100 units apart for 3 seconds. The Untitled and his Muse's damage generates paint for The Untitled to use.

Q - Graffiti

Active : Swipes with its brush, shielding allies. Hitting a wall creates a trap that roots enemies that walk in front of it.

W - Stroke

Active : Uses paint to mark the ground. The paint gains a different bonus based on which basic spell was used last.

Graffiti - Uses less paint and creates traps after a delay.

Repoussoir - Uses more paint and creates walls.

E - Repoussoir

Active : The Untitled becomes camouflaged, turning into invisibility if it remains still. Taking damage will remove the stealth. Reactivating Repoussoir will fear nearby enemies and The Untitled will gain Repoussoir charges based on how many enemies are feared. While Repoussoir is on cooldown The Untitled can use charges to teleport to a nearby location that is unseen by enemies, leaving behind a body double that breaks the first time it takes damage.

R - Impasto

Passive : Any AP or AD The Untitled buys will change stats based on the primary damage of his Muse. (Not 1-1 conversion)

Active : The Untitled attaches to its Muse or recently feared enemy champion. Allies gain a shield and do extra damage while enemies take damage and are revealed. While attached to a champion The Untitled can only cast Stroke. If an enemy or ally dies while under Impasto, The Untitled uses their body as a skinsuit temporarily gaining their abilities. The Untitled retains any cooldowns from the original. The skin suit naturally falls apart over time. While in a skinsuit, the dead champion is considered The Untitled's Muse.

LORE

Caitlyn furrows her brow while she attempts to decipher Vi's note. The illegibility of Vi's handwriting was enough, but the contents didn't have any understandable train of logic. As far as Caitlyn could tell Vi had been working on a missing persons report a few days ago, only for the person to show up while she was talking with the wife of the missing man. "Common for a man to go 'missing' while he was being a delinquent in Zaun", Caitlyn muttered. Vi's scribbles ended with the address of the 'missing' man. Caitlyn sighed.

Caitlyn knocked on the door, only for Vi to quickly open the door and pull Caitlyn in. Caitlyn fixed her hat, before crinkling her nose. The stench of the house smelled like Zaun on a bad day. She looked over at Vi, who was holding her nose while pointing at the next room. Caitlyn tosses some cotton balls into her nose before heading into the kitchen area of the house. In the kitchen was the dead body of woman, 30s, with spine broken in half. "The wife?" Vi nodded. "I had a bad feeling about this guy, and when I came back-" Vi stopped talking upon hearing the door open. Quickly Caitlyn and Vi rushed into the nearby dining room, hiding against the wall near the door frame.

The man walks into the kitchen, dropping groceries onto the counter. "I got the meat you wanted, doesn't that make you happy?" The man stoops down, lifts the woman's face, and kisses it. He lets go of the head and it drops back to the ground with a thud. The man massages his temples. "I don't like it when you ignore me. I already said I was sorry." His voice wavered. The man attempts to rub the dead woman's shoulders. "You like massages right? Or was it-" The man cuts off as Caitlyn turns the corner with her gun aimed. "Stay still and put your hands on your head. Move and you'll be riddled with bullets faster than Vi can punch you." Caitlyn moved closer towards the man with gun trained on his head. As she walked closer the stench grew stronger. The rancid smell of death was coming from the man. "Vi handcuff him." Vi shook her head no. "You do it, that SOB smells like a dead chembaron." Caitlyn looks at her gun, to the man, then back at Vi. Vi sighs. Before Vi can take a step, the man rises to full height and takes a direct headshot into the eye from Caitlyn. "Nice shot cupcake." Vi grins. "Pain. Know. Dislike," the man says, his voice flat and emotionless. Vi whips around to see the man getting up. Caitlyn drops another three shots into his chest. The man staggers back and grabs the kitchen counter. He laughs. "No. Wrong. Cry," The mans mouth doesn't match up with the words, while his eyes swell up with tears. Vi rushes fist first into the man, crashing through two walls into the bedroom. Vi grabs the man's arms and pins him to the ground. "Cupcake what the hell is this guy?" The man's legs and neck are broken, but Vi can still feel him resisting Vi's gauntlets. The man's neck snaps back into place, and he faces Vi. "He was afraid of you. I see why." The mans mouth never moves. Vi winds up a punch, landing straight on the man's head. His body disappears leaving naught but a bloodstain. Caitlyn rushes in through the door. "Where did he go Vi?" Caitlyn yells. Vi gets up, sweating. Vi looks at her gauntlet, still covered in blood. "Do ghosts bleed?" Vi shakes the blood off.

The man collapses to the ground outside the back of the house. Out of the body steps a wooden puppet, clad in a clean trench coat and hat. The puppet takes a finger to its head, feeling the new hole he acquired. Interesting. It dips out into the street, mingling with the crowd.

CHANGE LOG

Currently working on VO lines and a shitty MS paint loading screen

2 Comments

Fine Ionian Silk12/3/2017, 5:29:43 AM1 votes

Hello, I hope you don't mind, but I'm going to comment my thoughts about Untilted... the? Well, I'll just address everything one at a time!

**Passive - ** From this passive, I'm guessing that they have a unique resource? I'm not really a fan of this, it feels like it's just there to force them into playing support. Also, making them have to have damage done in order to gain their resource feels kind of wonky.

Q - So it is an AoE shielding tool that can also set up a trap? It feels like it does too much and that is what's holding it back. Perhaps focusing on one or the other would help, but that's just my thoughts. Also, from the way it's written it seems like the trap is impossible to dodge, which can be pretty unfortunate. The trap could lead to some neat combos, such as with Vayne E.

W - Mmmm... I feel like I'm missing enough text in this ability? Does it go off multiple times, or is it just that once? Anyways, going off based off of what I can read it seems more liked a forced attempt to tie a kit together than something cool. That's not to say it doesn't have potential, but perhaps giving the ability some more depth would help.

E - This kit is pretty overpowered, and kind of random on the kit? It does too much, and for seemingly no reason. Having a stealth, AoE fear, and multiple teleports that can also be used to detect if an enemy has wards in a certain area is a lot for an ability. I would recommend toning it down and

Ultimate - This ability has quite a lot going on in it, and is pretty strange. For starters, I'm having trouble finding a purpose for the passive. It just makes things more difficult for ratio scalings on his abilities. The choice in this ability isn't really much of one, so there is no "do I do this or that" in this, as targeting an enemy really does not do much compared to targeting an ally with it. Besides that, the ultimate locks him into using his W... which depends on his other abilities for it's effects. It locks him into something that can be pretty frustrating. The second part of the ability... it is certainly unique, but the issue I have with this ability is that it can encourage you to want your ally to die. If your ally is low health or something along those lines, you can just choose to let them die so you can have their abilities and continue from where they left off. In regards to this part over all, it can also be frustrating as now he has been locked into another champions kit which can break a fight since he is no longer use his enchanter items to their full effects... I'm just assuming he is an enchanter.

Lore - This seems more like an introduction to a fanfiction more than a champion lore. We learn little to nothing about the champion unfortunately, but it does a good job of including Caitlyn and Vi (I don't know much about the champions myself, so I cannot say too much about personalities).

Overall - The kit and the lore don't really match up, and the only thing that ties them together is the ult (albeit I would consider that loosely). Additionally, the kit has no damage outside of the ultimate... which is definitely not something I would recommend. Even if a champion is a support, they have someway of dealing damage to enemies. Also, the kit has a lot going on, but not a lot going on at the same time. It seems more like a collaboration of ideas than a synergized kit. I would recommend setting out a goal list for the champion and then working a kit towards that, but that is just my opinion.

Please let me know if you have any questions or comments, and good luck!