[Champion Concept] Jystir, The Hooded Swordsman

CanadianBagel·10/16/2014, 1:29:48 AM·2 votes·1,391 views

What he looks like. Jystir wears a hood so you can never see his eyes, he has 2 swords on his belt and a bit of armor worked into his fur outfit

Ability’s

Passive Jystir’s passive allows him every 15 seconds to get 15% more lifesteal on his next basic attack.

Q Ability Cooldown 10 seconds Mana Cost 60/65/70/75/80 Jystir launches himself at an enemy dealing 50 damage. If Jystir is hidden from the enemy when he attacks he will turn invisible for 1second. Damage 50/90/130/170/210 Invisibility 1/1.25/1.50/1.75/2

W Ability Cooldown 20 seconds Mana Cost 50/60/70/80/90 Jystir’s attack speed increases by 20% for 2 seconds also his next basic attack will also stun an enemy for 1 second. % 20%/22%/24%/26%/28% Attack Speed Seconds 2/2.25/2.5/2.75/3

E Ability Cooldown 15 seconds Mana Cost 55/60/65/70 575 Jystir jabs an enemy with his swords dealing damage. Damage 60/75/90/105/120

R Ability Cooldown 70 seconds Mana Cost 100/120/130 Jystir sprints at enemy's slicing through them dealing 150 damage and stunning them for 1 second. Damage 150/200/250

Lore

When Jystir was a young boy he lived with his parents in a quiet house on the country. Jystir was an interesting boy for all he wanted to do was watch his father while he trained. Everything was fine until one day, when Jystir got home from picking fruits in the garden, there were two men in the house talking to his parents. His mother looked to be in tears and his father was just looking down. When the men turned around they told Jystir he had to come with them. Jystir fought back so the men took him away and Jystir never saw his parents again.

Where they had brought Jystir he didn't know, all he wanted to do was get out. Always looking for an escape he finally found it when the took him into a room, left him there then left. Looking for a way to escape Jystir looked around to find a rack with 4 swords on it. Climbing up Jystir grabbed a swords and unsheathed it looking for an exit. When Jystir left the room there were the two men that had taken him away. He charged at them, remembering how his father fought he slaughtered the two men for Jystir had taken them by surprise. He escaped the building they took him too and started look for his home. After spending hours and hours he finally found it but when he went inside, his parents were gone. Jystir was overcome with great sadness only to take up his fathers swords and swear to be the best sword fighter, a goal his father was working towards. Jystir spent years training and learning how to become a great sword fighter and finally when he thought he was ready. He joined the League of Legends where he is today becoming one of the greatest sword fighters.

Quotes Champion Select: “I will fulfill my destiny” Movement:

  1. “Strike when least expected.”
  2. “Till death I fight.”
  3. “Never give up.”
  4. “I will stay hidden in the shadows.” Taunt Jystir twirls his blades around.
  5. "They put me up against you?"
  6. “Ill make sure to make it quick.” Joke Jystir balances his swords on his head.
  7. In all my years of training I really just wanted a pink fluffy teddy bear.

6 Comments

CanadianBagel10/16/2014, 2:43:20 AM1 votes

What do you guys think of this champion?

Cat Father10/16/2014, 5:58:56 AM1 votes

I think you need to give us a little more. Also try to distinguish your champ from talon. Not that the abilities or look are exactly the same but it seems very talon-esk. To begin, how long is the passives slow and by what percentage ( personally I really like this idea). Im not sure ireally understand the second part of the q, is he invisible while he's lunging or once he reaches his target. W is simple and good. E seems a bit too much like q and your passive combined (IDK). . I like your R, it it like Vi's ult where it is unstoppable.

Bourmegar10/16/2014, 6:31:16 AM1 votes

Well I have a list of critique for this champ:

The title of this champion is very lackluster and sounds more like a concept of appearence. Champs need a title that says epicness or greatness or personality like: Jinx, she is kinda like a loose gun hence why she is called the loose gun.

His lore is just a standart revenge story and way to similar towards other revenge lores since there is no unique thing that seperates this lore from others.

His passive is quite handy but nearly useless in the laning phase becsuse you need to farm and that will just waste the passive.

His q is quite nice to.

But the w, e and r are just to bland and already done by others. W is already used by tristana e is also already partly in his own q and his R is just a less usefull version of Vi's ult.

So here I will give you a few ideas that might help: -by giving his W a second effect will help him differentiate from other AS boosts

  • his e should change since he already has 2 other abilities that charges at his target. Maybe a melee ranged spell E might work.
  • try giving his ult a form of utility and make his charge method different so it wont look like Vi's ult

I hope my advice will help you nake this champion better and sorry if I was to harsh on this concept.

I also made a champion concept. Would you like to check it out and share ne your thoughts about it? here is the link to it: Mila, the Stray light.

AntonioSingh56010/16/2014, 10:24:04 AM1 votes

i cant say since it is pretty similiar to other champions abilities