A thing about Lissandra.......... PART 2!

Ok ok, so you may recall that a few weeks ago I posted this:

http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/memes/hnVyEksc-a-thing-about-lissandra-i-can-do

If you're too lazy to click that link, it was me basically asking advice to marry Lissandra, as I was told to post my proposal on the boards (see pic attached) http://imgur.com/a/sIFor#197FhBi

I asked you all to help me write a proposal to Lissandra.

Some of your ideas we're really good

and some of your ideas we're pretty terrible.

Anyways, I decided to keep my proposal clean and simple. here it is:

"Lissandra, I love you very much, and I know this is sudden, but may I ask for your hand in marriage? It would make me the happiest person alive if I could call myself your life partner, to be able to wake up next to you every morning to see your smiling face. I know you are very busy and have an important mission to do, but with me by your side, I can aid you with your tasks while we show each other affection, and conquer the Freljord"

So how did I do? Should I change my proposal up a bit? Please give me a hand.