Hey guys what's up, it's me Nick. Like a lot of you guys i love the lore of League, but since the league no longer exists i wanted to write something showing what could actually happen in runeterra if the league didn't exist anymore.
Disclaimer i don't work for riot this is just a fun idea i had and all credit for creation of characters goes to riot the rest is all mine.
Narasimha1 votesI actually liked it, though the spelling and grammer mistakes made me cringe.
BigfootNamedYeti1 votesWhere oh god let me fix it
Narasimha1 votesI'll throw in a few, but honestly, theres a lot
Ashe scanned the now decimated tundra, her husband skulked towards her, his right arm immortally limp from carrying his mighty two handed sword for days.
This is grammatically incorrect, something about having two main subjects, I think. It can easily be fixed by saying something like
As Ashe scanned the now decimated tundra, her husband skulked towards her, his right arm immortally limp from carrying his mighty two handed sword for days.
Next
“The war is over my queen, Sejauni is dead, regretfully of course.”
This is best split up into two sentences.
“The war is over my queen**.** Sejauni is dead, regretfully of course.”
Then
She rode her boar into battle followed by her general Olaf, a true juggernaut, he had almost done the king rendering one arm barely usable.
That part just makes no sense.
A hulking mass of muscle that nearly fell through the ground and snow beneath himself and a light woman barely even forcing the snow to crunch beneath her feet.
This is just a very confusing sentence, I'd recommend rewriting it
One was a hulking mass of muscle that nearly fell through the ground and snow beneath himself**, and the other was** a light woman who barely even forced the snow to crunch beneath her feet.
BigfootNamedYeti1 votesMuch appreciated