New champion Idea! (pretty unique) Enter: Monto and Lonzor

Mxnto816·10/25/2017, 1:28:22 AM·2 votes·1,121 views

[Story] This new champion idea is kinda inspired by kindred with the whole 2 champions in one kind of thing. This champion will be called Monto I guess, (yeah the name is part of my name but I made this name up at 5th grade let me be ;~;) and he will be related to kindred, Nami and Miss Fortune. The lore would be like this, Monto cheated death 5 times and kindred and wolf have been tired of trying to kill his soul after his death, so she hunts him down while he is alive which isn't part of her job really but since Wolf convinced her to hunt him, Monto is now they're prey. Monto starts dashing and running on walls and trees trying to know where he is heading which he doesn't have any sight. After the long chase, Monto gets to be cornered on a cliff that leads to water. As Kindred set her bow ready and shoots, a voice tells Monto to jump off. A light blue light comes from Monto and ice starts to surround him as he is falling into the ocean. Monto is still in the ice for a decade. While he was trapped something rises inside of him which is a crystal but since he is still in ice, it is also stuck. After being stuck nearly at the bottom of the ocean Nami finds him and uses her water powers to push him to the nearest land. Years later and Miss Fortune and her crew find Monto getting pulled back from the water and gets him out from being stuck nearly in the deep ocean. A bright red, white and blue light starts to glow from Monto as he is getting out of the Ice. As he gets free the crystal floats in the air and turns into a Demonic-like dog named Lonzor. Miss Fortune's crew started to get their weapons ready in case Monto and Lonzor engages for an attack. Miss Fortune commands her crew to not shoot and asks "who are you or what are you?" Monto looks at his body and realizes he changed from a mid-teenager to a young adult (23 years old) and says "I'm....Monto". Miss fortune looks at his torn and ripped clothes and tells him to follow her to get new clothes. As Miss Fortune leads him to a clothing shop, Monto asks where is he and what is Miss Fortune's name. She says "the name is Sarah, I don't normally tell anyone my name but since your unique, I'll let it slide. By the way, I don't know where I am also". Sarah laughs while Monto is looking at her worried if he is getting lead to a trap. Sarah and Monto arrive at the store and Monto picks out his clothes. As he is done he tears small parts of his clothes to where he thinks it looks cool (he made it like a Tech Wear clothing, search it up it's really cool). Sarah looks at him carefully and thinks he looks good wearing the outfit he torn. They get out of the shop and Sarah asks what he wants to do after they depart. Monto says he wants to travel the world and meet new people but since the entire map changed he doesn't know where he is or where to go. Sarah tells him to join her since she is doing the same thing. Monto takes that offer. Months past and Monto and Sarah start to bond and have fun. Lonzor talks to Monto in his head that he should start training his powers and his sword skills. Monto was confused what he was talking about until Lonzor tells him that he was the one that helped him escape death during all these years. And during those years magic started to serge throughout Monto's body without him noticing. Lonzor tells Monto to imagine a sword in his hand, a sword appears out of thin air. Lonzor says since he has been using his magic to save Monto, he is low on magic and he cant saves Monto in the near future that's why he is telling him to train. Then Lonzor says Monto and himself are in great danger for cheating death itself since Kindred and Wolf. Monto agrees to start training but he doesn't want to leave Sarah after her helping him out. Monto tells Sarah that he has to leave to train to defend himself from a reaper. Monto then says he will come back once the fight is over. Monto and Lonzor start to head out to start training. Until then Monto and Lonzor will train to defeat Kindred and Wolf. Ze end. :3 [In-game design] I have a couple ideas of what his in-game should be. He will be like an Assassin.His passive would be called Rising Demon, instead of him having mana he has a something like Renektons rage but it fills up when he kills units. After being full Lonzor will appear to help him out for a short period of time. When Lonzor is out he will help do extra damage and escape in unique ways. His Q will be called "Breaking slash", He will use his sword to make 2 slashes that does aoe AD damage and then he thrusts while moving forward while doing AD damage. His W will be like an engage and disengage type of ability. [Passive] when damaging an enemy they will have a stack, the max is 5. When at 5 stacks Lonzor and Monto will burst you with a heavy amount of damage. [Activation] target an enemy to jump on them, cover their eye sights and stab them in the heart and jump off of them after stabbing. The range will be from where he jumped but a bit more farther back and This ability will do AD damage. The name would be "Pierce the heart". His E would be him able to wall run and to gain more movement speed. When he jumps off to a target he would do additional damage, choosing a target is optional.Like Talon's jump, the wall you use will have a cooldown of 5 minutes. The name would be "Neverlasting run". The Ult "Resonating Hybrid" will have Lonzor going inside of Monto to make him a lot more powerful than he normally is. It will increase Monto's abilities to do more damage and increase his AD, AP, and auto range. He can ult again to use a powerful blast that will scale 60% AD and 40% AP. His death animation would be his soul was taken by Kindred and her saying "and stay down". The recall would be Lonzor appearing and say "Hurry up so we can beat that reaper and get to your girlfriend" then Monto says "OK...wait what?". I think this champion idea should be a thing since its more different from the other champions we have right now. At least to me -3-.

9 Comments

novac372110/25/2017, 2:00:02 AM3 votes

Ok, ignoring the self insert, lets look at the abilities as I understand them:

**Passive: **

build fury on minion, monster or champion kill. When full, summons a clone?

not clear... tbh I like the fury idea but the result should be clearer...

Q - Breaking slash:

Strike a target twice dealing damage in an AoE, before dashing through them dealing damage in a line.

I mean basic, but still cool. I like it.

W - Her teachings:

Fire a skillshot that charms the first enemy hit

I mean ok, but it seems kinda bland? its basically just Ahri charm.

E - Neverlasting run:

Upon activation, gain movement speed while besides terrain. Additionally, Gain the ability to lead to a target with your next basic attack, dealing bonus damage.

That just sounds cool AF. It's like Rengar passive but more badass.

R - Resonating Hybrid:

+damage, + range, Activate again to nuke around you.

I mean its kinda basic too, but an AoE nuke around yourself? On an assassin? This has teamfight potential. I like it.

Overall, there are some cool ideas, but a few flaws also. namely, no reliable escape for an assassin. The charm seems slightly out of place as well? I mean if there was a guaranteed way to hit the backline, sure. But you don't exactly want the frontline focusing you as an assassin. All in all, for The jumbled text given here, it shows promise. maybe present things a little better? but the abilities are solid starting points for the champ.

[slayer-pantheon-thumbs] keep being creative!

Mianta10/25/2017, 12:37:51 PM2 votes

Lore sounds like a fantasy of yours? Packed with unknown powers, arch nemesis, and getting the girl. Lol. Honestly, you're trying to connect so many champs in one story and it's too much. It ruins the other champs personas. Making kindred hunters of the living, creating weird companionship between them and thresh, creating conflict between them and bard for no reason, creating an unknown love story for miss fortune. Its too much.

Abilities are over the top. Ult should not be 3 abilities in one. Stat buffs, aoe knockback + reactivate aoe burst dmg? Like really? W should not have a passive that applies heavy burst dmg on 5 stacks of any damage dealt. Imagine the burst on a single ability combo: Aa-Q-Aa . Now imagine a full combo: E-Aa-R-W-Aa-R-Aa-Q-Aa. Thats 2 full stacks of 5 on a single target, all the while doing AOE damage. The fury bar passive shouldn't have stat buffs. W shouldn't make an assassin invincible. Imagine playing as a squish adc, you're super fed and positioned safely behind your team. All of a sudden, this assassin dives your front line and presses W to jump on you making himself invincible + redirecting any damage he takes onto you. Thats broken. E has a 10 minute cooldown? Thats 600 seconds. No ultimate has a cooldown that long. Thats one third of most games. You're saying it can only be used 2 to 4 times in most games?

Again, i dont mean to come off as rude or condescending. I enjoyed reading your story and the concept is definitely interesting/unique. Just broken.