Short Story Based off of one of Jhin's Teaser

Hammered Chief·11/12/2016, 2:48:42 PM·1 votes·756 views
Anguish of The Victor

This is just a story i wrote a while back - probably about a month after Jhin's release, and I didn't really know what to do with it, so i figured i would post it here. Wanting to work for riot as a writer for their lore, and what-not, I figured this could be one of the ways i could get my name out there.

Credit for the first image i used obviously goes to riot: https://i.ytimg.com/vi/_duIwbExV4c/maxresdefault.jpg

Credit for the last image i used at the end of this story goes to Headcrabed, I'll link the source here: https://www.reddit.com/r/LoLFanArt/comments/3ztmyw/death_is_never_perfect_by_headcrabed/ http://i.imgur.com/vHmCKNZ.png

If i get good feedback on this, I may write another short story about his other works, but I'm not sure yet. As well, I can/will make changes to the short story if i like someone's recommendation/s.

2 Comments

TyrekGoldenspear11/12/2016, 2:54:39 PM1 votes

Its definitely well written, but I just want to point out a few things.

  1. The League isn't canon anymore. If you want to write for Riot this is crucial information.

  2. Shen is far too stoic to react this way to Zed's death. True he would be grieved, but he has trained his life to live without emotion and to be the Eye of Twilight, keeping the human and spirit world in balance.

Other than those two things you did good.