Short Story Based off of one of Jhin's Teaser

Hammered Chief·Nov 12, 2016·1 votes·756 views

This is just a story i wrote a while back - probably about a month after Jhin's release, and I didn't really know what to do with it, so i figured i would post it here. Wanting to work for riot as a writer for their lore, and what-not, I figured this could be one of the ways i could get my name out there.

Credit for the first image i used obviously goes to riot: https://i.ytimg.com/vi/_duIwbExV4c/maxresdefault.jpg

Credit for the last image i used at the end of this story goes to Headcrabed, I'll link the source here: https://www.reddit.com/r/LoLFanArt/comments/3ztmyw/death_is_never_perfect_by_headcrabed/ http://i.imgur.com/vHmCKNZ.png

If i get good feedback on this, I may write another short story about his other works, but I'm not sure yet. As well, I can/will make changes to the short story if i like someone's recommendation/s.

2 Comments

TyrekGoldenspearNov 12, 20161 votes

Its definitely well written, but I just want to point out a few things.

The League isn't canon anymore. If you want to write for Riot this is crucial information.
Shen is far too stoic to react this way to Zed's death. True he would be grieved, but he has trained his life to live without emotion and to be the Eye of Twilight, keeping the human and spirit world in balance.

Other than those two things you did good.

Hammered ChiefNov 12, 20161 votes

Thanks for the reply. I'm aware that the League is no longer canon, its just that at the time I wrote this, I was not thinking of working for riot, but I appreciate you pointing that out. Also, I agree with what your saying about Shen's personality that i portrayed to an extent. I feel that if i were to put more into Zed and Shen's conversation, the following scenes would make more sense. On the other hand, though, Shen may have dedicated himself to the protection of others and avenging his father, I would like to think that there is still some part of Shen that wishes he could see the old Zed, before the Forbidden Art, which could lead to such a thing as this.