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Symix, Syndra's Reaper

Final3clipse·11/16/2014, 1:06:01 AM·2 votes·1,055 views

Melee, Jungle, Assassin

Abilities Passive - Wraith After going into self-induced stealth, movement speed is increased by 40% for 2 sec. After stealthing, the next 2 basic attacks add dmg to his aa and deal splash dmg in a cone behind the target. Bonus dmg is +(.25 ability power).

Actives Q - Soul Comet Channel for 3 sec, Symix gathers energy and goes into stealth for 3 sec. After channel, Symix will immediately gain a soul charge (can hold up to 3, generates 1 every 25 sec reduced ever time an aa hits by .5 sec). Next attack command given will use a charge causing Symix to break stealth and charge to an opponent within a 1100 range. Deals 60/90/130/150/220 plus (.45 AP) as magic dmg.

W - Soul Rend Increases Attack speed by 30%. Lasts 6 sec. Increases Movement speed by 10%. Lasts 7 sec. Gives a shield lasting for 4 sec for 100/200/300/330/360 plus (.2 AP)

E - Soul Hunter *need to figure out how to make it more different from Q After .7sec channel, Symix enters a 5 sec stealth (breaks on attacking or moving outside a 1200 range). Symix's next basic deals branching dmg to enemy units in the area around the target (up to 3 enemies) or bonus dmg if no one else is around.

R - Soul Fission Symix enters stealth immediately and chooses a target within a 500 range to suppress an enemy champion to try to rip the enemy's soul from their body. During the 3 sec suppression, Symix deals 350/400/500 +(.4 AP) and +(.4 AD) and neither champion can move. If the suppressed champion is killed by anyone during the suppression, Symix's next 3 aa deal powerful cone dmg with bonus +(.7 AP)

The lore is something like after Syndra realized her true power, she captured a soul and empowered but corrupted it to do her will and the product was the reaper named Symix who eventually overpowered Syndra's control and has come for revenge on her.

Let me know what you guys think. Help me figure out what would make the E better or completely change it.

4 Comments

TheDeathstalker11/16/2014, 1:37:15 AM2 votes

Hey, so I decided to randomly review your champion. You have my condolences.

Let's see... first things first, you've themed your champion in relation to Syndra, but nothing ability wise really matches her pacing or style. You've got a stealth based assassin (with a LOT of stealth, sheesh!), but that's got nothing to do with Syndra. Uh... look at Zed, and compare him to the three Ninjas that came before him. He's not a carbon copy, nor does he do anything even similar to them, but he shares the Energy system with them, and that ties them together thematically. As Syndra uses mana, that's not really a good approach, so what I recommend is to just copy the core mechanic of her passive, but with a completely different Champion style.

What I'm saying is the best way to thematically tie your champion to Syndra will be making his Passive: Transcendent - Symix's abilities gain extra effects at max rank.

This also gives you more flexibility because your passive right now requires every ability to crap out stealth over and over again, without really doing anything more or different (How many ways do you have to deal bonus damage when coming out of stealth, again?)

Now, let's get to the meat!

Q - SOUL COMET - So, as a rough rule, Channels are really bad in terms of having fun, so I would avoid them as much as possible, and you've got plenty of room to avoid them here. So, let's ditch the Channel, and we've got a 3 second stealth that... honestly I don't understand the charges here. You gain them when you use the ability, but also over time, but they are only useful in breaking stealth? Too much is going on there, so I would recommend you either generalize, or get specific here. Let's see what we're trying to do...

What if we were to put all the stealth on one ability for this champ, and wheel everything around that one thing? it would have to be interesting, conditional somehow, and not just "press Q to Stealth", because that's no fun. If it's just Press Q, then it can't be incredibly strong and dynamic, because it's really strong as it is. So, what if we make the Q a short CD Skillshot that if it lands on a champion, you go invisible? This could be the E, but Q is better for spammy things, for some reason. We'll revisit the charge mechanic later.

Now, W is a straight steroid that does a whole lot of different things. Why is that? Couldn't it be simpler, more direct to something he really wants, rather than doing a whole lot of everything? Going with the idea of "Rend", let's try this:

SOUL REND - Symix gains a shield for (not 100/200/300/330/360) some amount for 4 seconds. Every attack made during this time increases his Movespeed and Attack speed for a few seconds. Stacks.

Now he's scary out of stealth too. Also, a note for the Transcendent Passive, Make them all have something to do with when he is in stealth. Make W at Max Ranks give 50% extra shield strength and automatically build one stack per second while he is stealthed when it's at max rank, or something.

Also, a quick aside: Not all of your abilities can be SOUL ______. You've got to have a different starting word. It's just... too much.

The E, oh, yeah. Just give him a simple charge skill here. Make it stun when coming out of stealth, and give it more range when stealthed at max rank. Done and done.

The R, man, if we're talking suppression, 3 seconds is waaay too long. Honestly, I would probably go with a Supreme Hunter mode here, where he gains some bonus, and he is immediately stealthed again every time he gets a kill for, say, 6/8/10 seconds. But I honestly don't have a really strong cohesive suggestion for this part.

Anyway, there's all the crap I've got for the moment for ya. Hope it wasn't too hard to hear and you get some good cohesive ideas from it. If you happen to have the time, feel free to crap all over (review) Melant, the Second's Hand for me. He needs it.

e5411/17/2014, 3:54:40 AM1 votes

Ok, here is the review that I have in mind for your champion. Please do not take offense to anything bad said about your character. So, first off I like your abilities uniqueness on a few of them, however some are copies. Your ultimate seems like a heavily copy of Malzahar ult, but some tweaks up in there. Also, all your abilities deal a horrendous amount of damage to champions (OP) and along with it comes with some really good scalings that would completely make your abilities even more OP. There is also to much stealth in your abilties. Your passive seems to be an Evelyn copy, but then again it is changed a little bit. Overall your champion is interesting and unique, but has to many op factors to it (damage and stealth) that I would recommend changing. Again I am not trying to be rude, but merely being truthful in my eyes. If you would like to review my champion (Aazulthra) it would be great, but you don't have to review it. Thanks