Kindred's poem finished

Messenger Raven·10/19/2015, 5:41:16 PM·183 votes·61,699 views

Kindred has a V/O for a Joke in which Lamb says "The weft and weave of fate guides...um...uh....how did that poem go again?"

As a poet, I wanted to finish that poem. So I wrote this:

The weft and weave of fate guides the hunters to their prey From the bush the Lamb will wait, while Wolf begins to play. “Can you hear me?” says the Wolf, within his target's ear. Nothing satisfies his hunger quite like fresh cooked fear.

The Lamb appears so swiftly, “Dear Wolf, let her be." “I understand your hunger, but she belongs to me.” Lamb brought forth an arrow and raised it to her head. “Today your life no more shall be, welcome to the dead.”

The masks showed no pity as the arrow took its course, Simple and unchanging was death without remorse. Wolf looked at the Lamb with an unrepentant grin, Their souls are one, a Kindred; the hunt again begins.

-Saint

It would absolutely make my day if Riot actually saw this.

58 Comments

RiotFauxSchizzle10/19/2015, 6:21:49 PM105 votes

Nicely done! I really like this

Couple of tiny points to help out: always initial cap Lamb and Wolf.

target's ear, not targets.

"Today is your entrance fee" pings me as off, mostly due to its connection to currency, which I think is the wrong choice of word for Kindred.

Agreed that some of the last rhyme feels off.

Other than those things, **nice job! ** I can't underscore how happy it makes me to see you guys embracing the poetry angle for Kindred.

RiotMhija10/19/2015, 9:36:39 PM17 votes

Oooo this gave me shivers! Would have liked to see the metaphor started in the first line (weft and weave) expanded a bit more before being dropped, but otherwise--nice haunting tone!

Kats Pajamas10/19/2015, 9:42:59 PM16 votes

Roses are red Poems are hard Kindreds OP Unless she's with bard

RiotRiot Brightmoon10/20/2015, 12:44:24 AM11 votes

really well done!! CHILLS!

ChaosReignsDown10/19/2015, 9:56:00 PM6 votes

I liked it. Add me and if you don't have Kindred yet I will gift Them to you. :)

Chaosreignsdown

SpartenA799110/19/2015, 5:44:30 PM3 votes

Not too sure about the last rhyme with grin and again. But I will upvote so Rito see this. RITO NOTICE THIS!

Virgin Ray10/20/2015, 10:35:23 PM3 votes
KnivingDude10/19/2015, 8:47:53 PM2 votes

This guy wins.

LOL Spammer10/19/2015, 10:54:23 PM2 votes

Holy moly this is amazing. I don't know what time and effort but this is some top notch stuff dude. Very impressive.

AATTRROOXX10/20/2015, 12:34:56 AM2 votes

Dude, I never get chills. Well, almost.

Jack º10/19/2015, 6:26:45 PM2 votes

going to bump this... Kindred

Messenger Raven10/19/2015, 6:53:58 PM2 votes

Can I discuss how much I'm freaking out right now at how awesome this is! Thank you for the feedback, I wrote this in like 5 minutes of excitement after I read some voiceovers lol. I haven't bought kindred yet so I actually haven't heard them so I'll definitely revise and edit and take suggestions thank you!

ihaveapotion10/19/2015, 7:41:01 PM2 votes

Nothing satisfies his hunger quite like fresh cookie

TacticalRice10/19/2015, 7:55:18 PM2 votes

I think you did a very nice job! I'm not gonna comment on the slight revising you might wanna do to make it have a better tone with Kindred but seriously though, nicely done. It appeals to Kindred very nicely when they say “I understand your hunger, but she belongs to me.” Good work, you should keep at it . Makes me wanna post some poetry as well. :D

Xx1337SnipesxX The Gnar main Gnar

Messenger Raven10/19/2015, 7:55:51 PM2 votes

Ill be able to post an edited version in about an hour, I took some suggestions. Once again, thank you so much.

DragonShea10/19/2015, 8:26:09 PM2 votes

{quoted}

Kindred has a V/O for a Joke in which Lamb says "The weft and weave of gate guides...um...uh....how did that poem go again?"

As a poet, I wanted to finish that poem. So I wrote this:

The weft and weave of fate guides the hunters to their prey From the bush the lamb will wait, while wolf begins to play. “Can you hear me?” says the wolf, within his targets ear. Nothing satisfies his hunger quite like fresh cooked fear.

The lamb appears so swiftly, “Dear Wolf, let her be." “I understand your hunger, but she belongs to me.” Lamb brought forth an arrow and raised it to her head. “Today is your entrance fee, welcome to the dead.”

The masks showed no pity as the arrow took its course, Simple and unchanging was death without remorse. Wolf looked at the lamb with an unrepentant grin, They walk as one, as Kindred, only to hunt again.

-Saint

It would absolutely make my day if Riot actually saw this.

It's ain't fannon. It's Canon. Riot hire this guy.

Dicerson10/20/2015, 12:53:57 AM2 votes

Much Awaits Thee.

BEHOLD! The cookie!

Mini-poem :P

ModAttysu The Poro10/20/2015, 12:56:11 AM2 votes

I must sing this like a lullaby and post it; EVEN IF I CAN'T SING WELL! Thank you for destroying everyone's ears. :3 Shall post shortly.

Teslablade10/20/2015, 1:10:58 AM2 votes

Holy shKindred t. Riot, add this to their lore!

Arakadia10/20/2015, 2:25:41 AM2 votes

Kewl. Obviously there are things to be changed, but that can be expected. I wish i got more into poetry like dis!

Sidewayzz10/20/2015, 5:56:24 PM2 votes

Gave me chills

RetroRage9610/21/2015, 12:28:24 PM2 votes

Oh my god this is so good.

I saw farther down that you might be trying them for other champions?

If so, I would suggest Sion. He seems to have something like a poetical storyline in my opinion.

RottedApples10/20/2015, 12:44:07 AM1 votes

this was wonderful. well done.

EverTokki10/20/2015, 8:27:23 AM1 votes

what about something like, "let the hunt again begin" @ last line for a better rhyme?

Dreamspitter11/24/2015, 2:24:33 AM1 votes

The weft and weave of fate guides our people to their death, Though arrow pierce our ancient hearts, we fear not our final breath. Teeth and bite break bone for those who fear their cold embrace, So run we not from Lamb and Wolf, our lives they shall erase.

  • old Freljordian poem
Messenger Raven10/19/2015, 8:56:17 PM1 votes

Edited version is up :D thank you for the suggestions

The Dοctor4/13/2016, 11:45:23 AM1 votes

Nice Poem . I like poems , but poems are hard . I was playing Yoric the other day ... this poem came to my mind....

I dig , you dig , he digs she digs , it digs we dig you dig , they dig.

Yuppers10/20/2015, 7:04:42 AM1 votes

Such an elegant poem for Kindred, it fits in beautifully with her lore. <3 I always love seeing champions with great stories behind them; having said stories applied in-game just makes League that much more special. Well typed.