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It's not a murder simulator, it's not for kids, and it's not just a game anymore

Kobe 99··5 votes·1,113 views

Please tell me your thought, I need my Viktor MasterYi A+

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Cale0172 votes

You might want to work on your wording. If you're trying to debunk common misconceptions, you're not making it clear what they actually are.

For instance, you say that "video games does not cause violence". Aside from that sentence being grammatically incorrect (it should actually read "video games do not cause violence") you aren't stating the actual misconception. The popularized idea is that video games do cause violence, and that should be what you're bringing up to disprove, not the other way around. And you've done the same for pretty much all of these, stating the opposite version of the misconception you're trying to disprove.

If you want to do it like that, reinforcing the positive aspects instead of debunking the negative ones, change your intent here from disproving misconceptions to stating the facts. Then what you're saying, and the supplemental information you're giving, are much more in line.

Kobe 991 votes

Hey, thanks for the feedback I didn't even know the "does" error, thank you for that. I wanted to debunk the misconceptions by stating the facts, but I found out it would take a bit too long.

SlackerboyTC1 votes

ok

DrCyanide1 votes

The stick figures limbs don't look right. Other than that it looks OK. If it was me I'd change the violence picture from one actually shooting to one just holding someone up (GTA maybe?)

Legostrike1 votes

is this for a project or something? Because it's fine, but there are no sources, not much support, and not entirely clear.

Kobe 991 votes

Oh, the citations on the bottom with the link with MLA citations :D

Envy Sin1 votes

Because google/internet never lies

PPPPPPPPPPPP2701 votes

That stick figure is really weird. Also where the fuck is your citations and stuff.

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