mezzark, The forgotten

deathblade12100·Dec 11, 2014·2 votes·747 views

                                         I have been wanting to submit an idea for a league champion that I created and balanced. I unfortunately don't have art for him or a lore yet. I do have all his abilities, how they work, cool-downs, the price to use them, the balance of damage with each level added to it.I have his actual stats like his starting health,attack speed, damage, health regeneration,armor,magic resist, and movement speed. And to include into that, I also have how much he gains in each of those stats per level(except the movement speed of course). I could really use help making a character look and a weapon for him to use (blade like but original anything, looking for any ideas really). If anyone is looking to help, I will post all his abilities, stats, and cool-downs.Also if you would like to help me create a better caption at the end than "The Forgotten" please share with me.Before I forget, if anyone decides to help me make a lore or they make one, try to include something having to do with putting a cursed mark upon his heart or somewhere on the body so that his ultimate ability will make sense.
                                          Just in case anyone wants to know what he does right away, here are his abilities and so forth.(All ideas I will listen to, so please post!)

Passive: For every 12% of health he is missing, he gains 0.8/1.5/2.5/3.0 armor and magic resistance.

Q: He slams his weapon forward in a direct line dealing 80/115/160/200/230 (+%40 of attack damage.) damage. Anything in the middle of the casting range will be slowed by %35 for 1.5 seconds and if they are hit at the end of the casted ability range, it will be knocked up for 0.5 seconds and applying the slow affect afterwards.

Q Cool-downs: 14.0/13.2/12.4/11.6/10.8 seconds. Q health usage: 8% of current health.

Really sorry for this inconvenience but I have to go somewhere and when i return to this I will edit this more and continue to tell his abilities and more. Sorry for the trouble.

W: passive: 1% lifesteal bonus (+1% per level) W: Active: lifesteal bonus doubled for 5 seconds

W cooldowns: 9.6/9.2/8.8/8.4/8.0 W Health usage: free

E: He pushes off the ground, sliding in the direction of the cursor.If he hits any enemy target,he will be stopped and hits the enemy struck in the opposite direction a short distance and dealing 60/80/110/140/160 (+%80 of ability power).

E cooldowns: 12.2/11.4/10.6/9.8/9.0 E health usage: 6% of current health

R: he latches his cursed mark upon a single target for 8/9/10 seconds and he deals 15/25/35 % more damage to that target.

R cooldowns: 110/100/90 seconds R health usage: free

24 Comments

HadesHellfireDec 11, 20141 votes

well it would help if you gave us the abilities or something to go off of then i would love to try to help you

deathblade12100Dec 11, 20141 votes

sorry about that, i have them up now.

HadesHellfireDec 12, 20141 votes

Idk, i wanna say that the lifesteal bonus is too much but then you look at nasus' passive and there isnt much you can really say. he seems like a jungler, and a fairly good one at that.

i was thinking someone kinda buff like braum but with a huge hammer that has markings on it and he's shirtless with the curse mark on his chest where his heart is.

then with his q the animation shows him slamming the hammer (maybe it will extend) then where the handle and staff part of it is thats where it will slow and where the head of the hammer is thats where it will knockup.

with his w his hammer markings could change colors when you first get the w so then enemies know he has the bonus and the markins will glow when you activate the active.

then with his e he puts the head of his hammer on the ground and throws himself forward with it.

then with his ult his curse will glow on his chest and he'll point his hammer at the champion he is cursing and while the enemy is cursed his curse will continue to glow.

if theres any confusion on anything im saying just ask me and i'll clarify. im also trying to think up a good lore. i want to try to involve another champion in it.

deathblade12100Dec 12, 20141 votes

thanks for the help towards this.And honestly I am loving your ideas. I would be glad to hear your lore. Thank you.

HadesHellfireDec 12, 20141 votes

oh and to further explain the hammer, it could be a basic long hammer with a brown wooden handle with almost unnoticeable markings on it with a silver hammer head with also almost unnoticeable markings (because the markings are the same colors as the materials) the when he gets his w the markings turn black, then when he activates his w they turn red. obviously the color schemes can be different i only chose those two colors because he's cursed and those are the first two colors that came to mind

deathblade12100Dec 12, 20141 votes

yea lol had it since it came out and i use it everyday so i seem a bit original but knew there had to be others XD And you were right I was hoping for maybe a bruiser jungler or top laner that can sustain well and have how single target damage.

deathblade12100Dec 12, 20141 votes

That actually sounds really good and tbh when i started making him i thought of dark people like aatrox or someone else kinda darkish lol. Btw i will be on here for about 10 more minutes and i may be back on next class, idk for sure yet but i most likely am.And yes I do this during school most of the time lol it kills time for me.

HadesHellfireDec 12, 20141 votes

XDD lmfao i get on here during class too! thats where i am right now is my web design clas because i comlpeteed the class in 2 weeks so i have a shit ton of free time. i got about 10 more minutes then we get out cuz school ends early today, but thats pretty funny

but yeah i was also thinking more of a darker scheme since he was cursed. like maybe he had a thirst for power and he kept trying to get more power and that thirst for power gave him his curse

deathblade12100Dec 12, 20141 votes

Sounds good and what if he was enemies with kalista because he had betrayed someone in his past for power and that person called upon kalista at the price of their soul and from this day on kalista seeks to kill him and collect his soul.Plus this could be a good thing for in game like rengar vs kha six with the better hunter thing.Let me know your thoughts on this.

HadesHellfireDec 12, 20141 votes

that sounds great actually. it should be mezzark starts out with a small buff and when kalista kills him she collects the buff and when he kills her he gets the buff back. it will be a permanent buff and it could be called "Soul Buff"

deathblade12100Dec 15, 20141 votes

sorry to answer late but my home computer was being toddtarded as i call it and yes i love the idea of the permanent buff. What if the permanent buff was stronger per kill. Say kalista kills mezzark twice, the buff gains another small but helpful buff like dragon for example. But when swapped between mezzark or kalista it is set back to original first buff.

HadesHellfireDec 15, 20141 votes

Sorry I didn’t get back to you sooner, I was a bit busy this weekend. But this is what I thought for a lore.

Mezzark, growing up as a Noxian boy, never had to worry about food or water, for his parents were wealthy. So without having to worry about meals, unlike most Noxians, he had his eyes on a much bigger prize. Power. His thirst for power seemed unquenchable, so he thought a good place to start is the Noxian Army.

Mezzark was a natural fighter, so it wasn’t surprising when he quickly worked his way up the ranks. Things were working perfectly for Mezzark, until one fateful day. Darius sent Mezzark and his regiment out to scout out an area said to be a Demacian camp. But when they showed up, they quickly found out there were a lot more Demacians than expected. Mezzark’s regiment was found and was outnumbered 3 to 1. But they couldn’t retreat; failure was not an option to the Noxians. So they fought, and it was a slaughter, and by the end the last man standing was Mezzark.

It was obvious to Mezzark that Darius had set them up. He had always seen Mezzark as a threat to his position in the Noxian army. But Mezzark had survived and knew that when he returned he would be greeted as a hero. But as it turns out, Darius made him out to be the enemy, and Mezzark was exiled for having lost his regiment.

Bent on revenge, Mezzark knew he had to destroy Darius. But he knew his physical limitations were not good enough to beat the general, so he turned to magic. He sought out the legendary Kalista and asked her for power. She explained to him that if she killed Darius, he would have to give Kalista his soul. But since he wanted to watch Darius die by his own hands, they made a different kind of deal. Kalista gave him a legendary war-hammer, retrieved straight from the depths of the Shadow Isles. The weapon granted the wielder immense power, but it came with a curse, that was engraved over his heart. Whenever Mezzark would use his hammer, some of his life force would be drained and given to Kalista.

Some may have seen this as a curse, but Mezzark saw it as a gift. Once he better learned to use his power, he figured out he could bestow his curse upon others, causing them to feel his pain. Now having mastered his newfound power, he is on a new mission. A mission to avenge his regiment, and to restore his name and honor. Darius will know true pain.

Now my initial thought was to make it where Mezzark betrayed his deal and never gave Kalista the soul he owed her but I thought this would work better, especially considering his abilities cost health, and using his hammer cost life force in the lore. Then I was thinking that maybe in game, whatever health he used to use his abilities, half of that would be given to Kalista, whether she was on the enemy team or your team.  Now hopefully if this champion concept was ever made into a real champ, by that time Kalista would be a bit balanced so this passive wouldn’t be giving Kalista a huge laning advantage. But considering that abilities have cooldowns, and she would only be gaining a small amount of health every once and a while that could be deleted with a supports auto attack, I don’t think it will really be that big of an issue during laning phase. But it will just be a little passive to make the game a bit cooler with the way the lore and game would connect.

And then with his ult, it would also make it where whatever health he used for his abilities, that health would also be taken away from whoever he cursed (along with the extra percent damage). Then it would work with the lore and it would also make since considering he is bestowing his curse on someone else.

deathblade12100Dec 16, 20141 votes

I love your lore overall and it was quite breathtaking, but on the idea of giving kalista health for him using ablities, he is more of a jungler or top laner type so if he is jungling and spamming away health, it makes it unfair for the bot lane on his team because she would just be healing and lifestealing. And also about putting the cursed mark on someone, the percentage damage is the main curse to hurt someone but what do u think about this. When he puts the mark upon them, the cursed champ now costs health at the same price of mezzarks abilties. This doesnt seem like it would be op but if u think about it like when he would vs a darius. darius would be sitting there wasting away health to use his simple and normally cheap mana cost abilties. Tell me your thoughts on this.

HadesHellfireDec 16, 20141 votes

thank you and that was my main problem is i was worried the health bonus would be too much. and i do like your ult idea, but gimme a sec to upload this alternative lore cuz it opens the door to some new ideas

deathblade12100Dec 16, 20141 votes

im excited to hear your ideas.

HadesHellfireDec 16, 20141 votes

the lore stays the same until the 4th paragraph.

Bent on revenge, Mezzark knew he had to destroy Darius. But he knew his physical limitations were not good enough to beat the general, so he turned to magic. He sought out the legendary Kalista and asked her for power. She told him she would give him a legendary weapon, that would grant him enough power to defeat Darius, in exchange for his soul. Mezzark said he would make the deal, as long as he could see the weapon first.

So she led him to the depths of the Shadow Isles, and took him to a chamber with a great war hammer in the center. So she re-offered him the deal, but instead of keeping his end of the deal, he snatched up the hammer and trapped Kalista in the chamber. He did want to destroy Darius, but he wasn’t going to trade his soul for it. So he stole the hammer and went after Darius himself.

But he didn’t leave the Shadow Isles the same person he came in as. He became more tainted, more evil. So he would destroy anyone in his path and take what he wants. The Shadow Isles cursed him. He had to feast on others pain. He would even bestow his pain upon others to make them feel pain.

Now, in the never endless hunt of Darius by Mezzark, trying to restore his honor and gain revenge, Mezzark is also being hunted by Kalista. Kalista has escaped and his hunting Mezzark to collect his soul. Who shall catch their prey first?

Now in this alternative version it would make him more of an evil champion, and we could have the stacking kill buff. But I was thinking to go more with the lore, instead of using hp per ability, it could build something like rage. Then when it builds up it gives him an empowered ability. Then his passive could say something like this.

Mezzark gains power from his enemy’s pain, building up power. Upon gaining 100 power, Mezzark gains an empowered ability. Auto-attacks and abilities build power. But the longer Mezzark stays out of battle, he loses power. After staying out of combat for 8 seconds, he loses 5 power per second.

let me know what you think of this and if you like the idea we could discuss what the empowered abilities would be

deathblade12100Dec 16, 20141 votes

i love the rage idea and i saw the out of combat part would have to be shorter like 5 seconds because having it for so long could be major advantage in fights or heading to gank lanes. And since there are quite a few champs who get empowered abilties like that from certain things, what if he used an ability with the rage and it made it a bit stronger and reduced cd or made cc affect better. what do u think? (btw im really enjoying the idea of enemies with darius because darius doesnt have many besides demacia and darius is one of my favorite champs)

deathblade12100Dec 16, 20141 votes

Hey you should add me on league sometime you seem to be a fun person lol.

HadesHellfireDec 16, 20141 votes

yeah it would have to be reduced. but heres an idea. what if all of mezzarks abilities and auto attacks built up 5 power, but each ability costed a different amount of power to use the empowered ability. i.e. if his q costed 30 power to use the upgraded q, and his e costed 60 (these arent real amounts, just for an example) and if you built up 30 power you could use empowered q, but not e. and if you had 90 you could use both. but if you dont have enough it just casts the original ability.

sorry if that wasn't very clear. kinda hard to explain. i guess the best example would be like renekton, but instead of all his empowered abilities costing 50, they would cost different amounts of power.

deathblade12100Dec 16, 20141 votes

sounds greats.

HadesHellfireDec 17, 20141 votes

but that would also require a bit of reworking to the abilities but i think it could work

HadesHellfireDec 18, 20141 votes

ok, so i havent thought of anything for the w yet, but what if for the q, when it's empowered, he slams his hammer, then drags it back in. the anyone who wasn't in the knockup range gets pulled. because a knockup plus a pull might be a bit much so i was thinking its only the people in the slow range get pulled.

then for his e, its more of an aoe. so, for example, if there are 3 people near each other then whoever is in a small-to-medium sized aoe circle will all get knocked back. its aimer will kinda be an arrow, just a standard aimer like you would use for an ezreal q, but there is a circle in the end. anyone in the path of the standard aimer just takes damage with no knockback (maybe there could be a slow) then anyone in the circle gets knocked back.

tell me what you think of this and ask me any questions if i wasn't clear enough.

i would love for a rioter to get in here and tell us what they think

HadesHellfireDec 16, 20141 votes

i also have an alternative lore that i made, if you want to make him more evil. i will put it up here in a sec

HadesHellfireDec 12, 20141 votes

no problem, love helping you out i'll try to think up that lore asap. and btw love the summoners icon xD