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Ethereal31112/15/2014, 10:05:22 AM1 votes

Both are surprisingly good actually. Can't really find many ways that either could be better.

Carniverous12/15/2014, 8:56:23 PM1 votes

I actually liked how you managed sarcasm while having a stepped back view of what happened.

You actually know what you're doing with the camera, and have a good amount of cuts per minute. Nice man! The script was entertaining and so was the representation of the story. I like how you decided to tell it.

Good job on the voice acting as well. And tell the others who worked on it nice work for me. Thank you for actually putting credits in.

Not all things I say are positive though. So sorry for the following. I'd personally prefer if their was more interesting music And that it should be slightly more up beat. I'd assume your target audience are of the ages of 15-25. I believe those are the major ages for league players. I feel that your CPM is perfect though the whole thing. But somehow I felt it was slow, but I don't know why. And can't really elaborate on why.

I hope you message back.

Carniverous12/17/2014, 7:47:34 PM1 votes

I'm glad you appreciate what I said. And again, sorry, I can't say why I thought it felt slow. (Maybe I was having a slow day mentally?)

I didn't even think about copy right. Darn, I wish it had occurred to me. Here, this is a website my video production teacher handed out to students. Because in many projects we had to make something that followed copyright laws. (Because their were cases where schools were "fined" for breaking them.) http://freemusicarchive.org/ Go ahead and read the about section if you want. But all music here is free, and uploaded with the knowledge that it will get used. Most of the time you'll find music that has no lyrics. So it's great for back ground stuff.

In the beginning I did think why I was being told what chat lobby was. Comedians do the same thing when setting up a stage for jokes, but even the stage they set is built with jokes. So no one minds.

I really did like the video. I like the concept. My hope is that people will watch it and realize, not just right after a game; that people can look really stupid. I meet a lot of players who look like that. I also sometimes loose my patience and get very sarcastic. And be reminded what this community of gamers should look like.


  • A little story on the subject. It's skippable. We had quite the blazing troll one game. We manage to win, but this teammate of ours was the kind to get upset fast. I proceeded to argue with him, in a positive form, but still turned out to be gasoline none the less. In the post game lobby, I decided two things. 1: I'm too stubborn to leave. 2: I'm gonna screw with you. I'm by all means manipulative. And enjoy psychology too much. I argued with him to get him mad enough to not want to leave. I told him what I hate about this game, and this freaking world too. I made points that he made, to coax him into seeing a middle ground. He went on a rant about things he hates in League, during the rant I pointed out he did the same things in his last game. He is, and was, what he hated. He managed a half hearted apology. ANd told me why his day sucked and lead up to that. Long story short. Even Nasus dogs can be taught they made mistakes, and have the ability to correct themselves. I see that potential in this video.

Act 1 and act 2, probably were the funniest. But I did enjoy act 3 as well. As I watched this for the 3rd time, I thought. "Why not add subtitles from the lobby? Put them in the corner to help infoce it actually happened. Like using cut up screen shots. Also sub labes(Unread text) for the acts to clarify/suggest the tone. Saying act 3. But having the text "A serious reflection." Like chapter titles I suppose. I don't think the transaction was bad between acts.

I don't think I have much to say, that can help. I'm out of criticism. Keep in mind my over all view is positive, and I think you should keep at it.

P.S: I'd like to make a video request. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XMF6sTQ7dLM This video is ages old, and introduces types of players in league. I think you could do something similar, with more well thought out jokes. Others also have videos of this theme. I suggest watching them to see what jokes are relevant in the community. My teacher always said there are only two kidns of funny. Slap stick humor. Think Three Stooges. And the unexpected. It's funny, because we didn't expect it to happen. Even if you don't do this, give me hint to what you're working on next.

Carniverous12/20/2014, 7:19:10 PM1 votes

I feel that our walls of text have concluded. I'm glad to know you liked some of my suggestions. And I'm sorry that site didn't work too well. Join me for a match some time!

(/ Sarcasm / Joke /)

(Joke / Sarcasm)----> I do wut I wnt.

Edit- Uhh, totally don't see a friend add by YumikaQQ. Annd I also realize you know too much about league for a lvl6 account to be your main. Oops.