[Fanfiction] Our Little Lonely Prince

unicornattac·Jul 24, 2014·1 votes·917 views

It's a fanfic featuring Veigar and Amumu as the main characters. Takes place before Amumu's admission into the League.

Summary on FF.net: It is said that the spirit of a sad little prince lured travelers in the Shurima Desert that are lost and alone into his pyramid where he rests...and it has targeted an evil yordle with a troubled past.

Prologue: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10440318/1/Our-Little-Lonely-Prince Ch. 1: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10440318/2/Our-Little-Lonely-Prince Ch. 2: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10440318/3/Our-Little-Lonely-Prince Ch. 3: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10440318/4/Our-Little-Lonely-Prince Ch. 4: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10440318/5/Our-Little-Lonely-Prince Ch. 5: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10440318/6/Our-Little-Lonely-Prince Ch. 6:https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10440318/7/Our-Little-Lonely-Prince

Feedback is greatly appreciated. :)

4 Comments

NegisunaJul 24, 20141 votes

so... I read the 1st chapter and it seems to be pretty good so far (though i think maybe veigar overreacted a little XD?). I will continue to read it and post what i think about the rest of the story. Just wanted to let you know you have a new reader ;3

unicornattacJul 24, 20141 votes

Yeah, he pretty much overreacted. That's why he's in this mess in the first place. Sorry if I made it too OOC though :(.

NegisunaJul 24, 20141 votes

nah i like it and it adds a bit of humor (to me anyways). keep up with the good work man/girl (not sure since gender is all over the place on the internet) and keep it just the way it is. Though you may want to go back a little and check some grammar (not major ones just minor ones) that may make it sound weird. This happens alot in fanfiction (i myself write a few adventure time ones and have also made a few mistakes,). Remember: reread and reproof all stories. It may seem like a hassle but it will help make the story clearer and easier to understand (of course, i'm only 17, so you don't have to take advice from me :D).

unicornattacNov 16, 20141 votes

Ch. 7: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10440318/8/Our-Little-Lonely-Prince