Narrative, language quality, and apparent lack of proofreading (Nami's story)

"It was as if the villagers had been frozen in place it was so quiet."

10/10 syntax. Who needs commas and clauses?

To phrase it in a more serious manner, this honestly should've been proofread, caught and corrected prior to publication.

Unless the salaries that Narrative receives are puny. Which I doubt.

EDIT: Lmao at people seemingly thinking this thread and the highlighted error are a matter of opinion. Bad syntax is bad syntax. The end.