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Nylisa11/21/2018, 7:22:30 PM6 votes

Pantheon's Pastries! HUH!

I'm just happy Soraka is part of this and more about her has been revealed, she barely had anything in previous stories. also Cinnamon Rolls :O

Felvyne11/21/2018, 7:21:33 PM3 votes

It's nice to read something so warm, cheerful and silly. Each character is well portrayed without being overwhelming over the others, really neat. It's a wonderful read to chill a bit, yup.

Dessem11/21/2018, 11:15:23 PM3 votes

I liked the overall story. The prose disappoints in some spots; lots of adjectives (show, don't tell), Lux informing us with certainty what others are thinking.

But either way, I liked the overall piece, and in the end that's what a story's about. I especially liked how in the end, Miss Fortune decides to get closer to Lux. It's a nice juxtaposition to her early attitude (easily the least interested of them all), though I kinda would've liked to see the entire thing narrated from her point of view. For a short story, there's no real conflict for Lux: she's just troubled she has unexpected visitors who may or may not like her, but without her doing anything in the story, something changes anyway.

Would've been nice if protagonist and narrator were the same person, y'know? Even short stories have a plot.

Anyway, again, I still enjoyed it.

Terozu11/21/2018, 11:34:16 PM3 votes

I love Thermal Kitten's work, though I am sad I have to rewrite a large portion of my fanfic.

Ifneth11/22/2018, 12:48:41 AM1 votes

Poppy: Patience, rules, hammer.

Sounds about right.

NemeBro11/22/2018, 3:42:29 AM1 votes

So is Ezreal trying to fuck the girls in the slumber party?