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[Champ Concept] Kassadins Daughter Concept! Valari: The Portal Weaver WIP

DriftThruTheRift·4/19/2016, 5:00:10 AM·4 votes·1,844 views

Valari is an ap Mage who specialized in mobility through void portals. She can be played as an assassin due to the mobility. All names and such aren't finalized but are just a placeholder and I may change things later on. Anyways feel free to comment and constructive Criticism if you would please and thank you! If there's any confusion just ask and I'll try to clear things up.

SIDE NOTE: This is my first attempt at making stats and damage numbers so please bear with me on them. If it looks like something is to overpowered or underpowered or whatever just let me know so i can fix it. Also I had posted this two times already which I know but I deleted one so I can have the full title I want and this is the most updated version of this concept

Valari: The Portal Weaver

Role: Mage, Assassin Lane: Solo lane/Mid

Visuals: Her skin color is gray from the corruption of the void. Her body was infused with dark purple metal armor. She has a purple aura the surrounds her where she goes.

**Lore: ** After the feud between Malzahar and Kassasin, Valari was pulled into the void. Valari was able to harness the power of the void like her father before her. After gaining these new powers her physical appearance had changed. Her skin altered to a lighter gray color and her body became infused with dark purple metal armor and Her body blanketed in a light purple aura. Valari was a new resident to the void and knew nothing of her new acclaimed home. She wandered aimlessly within the void only to have her mind corrupted over time, learning the secrets to her now profound abilities. She found she was able to open void portals to new areas within the void. After any years passed she slowly harnessed the full potential of her abilities and spent many weeks creating a portal outside of the void. She nearly grew to the breaking point to finally gain the chance to escape the void, until she released what little power she had left and a portal grew anew. Within the portal the city of Zaun was seen, one the few memories she still had. Valari entered the portal to be sent in the world in which she belonged. After all the years of corruption in the void her mind wasn't where it was before the incident that happened to her, and the only thought that came to her mind as she entered Zaun was "I must kill Kassadin!"

Enemies: Kassadin

Friends: None

Stats: (Bear with me on stats please first time ever doing this)

Health: 505.80 (+75 Per level) Health Regen: 6.201 (+0.9 per level) Mana: 392 (+55 per level) Mana Regen: 6.3 (+1 per level) Ranged: 520 Attack Damage: 50 (+ 3.5 per level) Attack Speed: 0.659 Armor: 25 (+3.25 per level) Magic Resist: 27 Movement Speed: 335

Abilities

Great escape (Passive): after using 4 abilities Valari has the option to dive in cursor direction. If you choose to do so Valari dives through a portal a short distance and summons a ranged voidling to aid her in battle. (Portals disappear after use) this is similar to kalista passive.

Cooldown: 0

Voidling cooldown: 15 Voidling damage: 50% of base ap damage per second Voidling Duration: Until killed

Void bomb (Q): Valari throws a void bomb dealing magic damage in target area. Once it's landed the bomb it deals 30 magic damage the bomb stays and after 1 second it can be deactivated and deals 50% of the original damage magic damage (so if you deal 30 it'll deal 15 once activated again). Can be used through portals.

Cooldown: 15/15/10/10/8 Mana cost: 40/50/60/70/80 Damage: 30/65/120/180/240 (+60% ap)

Portal weave (W): summons up to two portals. These portals only allow both enemy and friendly projectiles and champions to pass through them. Portals can be setup on obstacles but only short distances. Any objects sent through has 20% increased range of the original range. (Similar to jayce) Portals will only stay for 1 minute. (max two portals at a time)

Cooldown: 10/10/7/5/5 Mana cost: 20/30/50/65 Damage: o

Void shot (E): Valari puts her arms out in front of her and shoots an void bolt in the target direction. Any champion that is close to Valari and gets hit by it gets knocked back but doesn't become immobile.

Cooldown: 12/12/10/7/7 Mana cost: 25/35/50/60/75 Damage: 20/55/ 100/165/220 (+40% ap)

Into The Void (R): ULT REWORKED AGAIN: LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK Valari Places a Portal in desired area lasting 4 seconds. The portal will suck in any champions that are within the radius of the portal dealing magic damage the longer the enemy stays near the portal.

Cooldown: 180/ 140/100 Mana cost: 120 Minimum Damage: Undecided **Maximum Damage:**Undecided

Valari does well against:Anivia Katarina Kayle Leblanc Orianna Yasuo

Does poorly against:Zed Fizz Diana Lux

Does well with: Yasuo Vayne Zilean

Lux mains would have a blast lol

Quotes: TBA

25 Comments

regonas4/21/2016, 7:41:18 AM3 votes

Ok, lets do this. I will probably not praise you and focus on things, which could be improved. I am not being mean here, i just gonna help you to improve your concept, if you want to.

Great escape (Passive): after using 4 abilities Valari has the option to dive in cursor direction. If you choose to do so Valari dives through a portal a short distance and summons a ranged voidling to aid her in battle. (Portals disappear after use)

Cooldown: 0

Voidling cooldown: 15 Voidling damage: 50% bonus ap damage Voidling Duration: Until killed

Dive thing is clearly a bad thing. How would you activate it? How can you chose to dive or not? Passive have no button to activate, so how would you activate or chose not to activate. Also, what does this voidling do? You didn't specify his stats (except damage), so i assume it have 1 health, 0 armor, 0 magic resist, 0 movement speed, 0 attack speed. In addition, 50% of AP is huge damage. With 600 AP, this voidling will be hitting for at least 300 damage per basic attack.

Void bomb (Q): Valari throws a void bomb dealing magic damage in target area. Once it's landed the bomb waits one second deals 50% extra magic damage. Can be used through portals.

Cooldown: 15/15/10/10/8 Mana cost: 40/50/60/70/80 Damage: 30/65/120/180/240 (+60% ap)

You need to work on your descriptions. All i got for this is: you throw bomb in targeted area, when it lands it waits for 1 sec and then deals 50% of its damage, but you can throw it through your portals. Also, cooldown progression is strange. It should be constant or repeat itself, like -2 sec with each rank, -2 every other rank or -0/ -1/ -2/ -3/ -4 for example. So, it should be similarto something like this: 15/14/13/12/11 or 15/14/12/9/5 or 15/15/10/10/5. Your cooldown progression is -0/ -0/ -5/ -0/ -2.

Portal weave (W): summons up to two portals. These portals only allow both enemy and friendly projectiles and champions to pass through them. Portals can be setup on obstacles but only short distances. Any objects sent through has slightly increased range. Portals will only stay for 1 minute. (max two portals at a time)

Cooldown: 10/10/7/5/5 Mana cost: 20/30/50/65 Damage: o

"These portals only allow both enemy and friendly projectiles and champions to pass through them. " so, it only allows you anyone to go through it and do anything through them? "Only" is not needed then. In addition, will long range abilities from enemy champions gain even more range? And how much bonus range enemies get to kill you from even further distance. Lux should love fighting this champion.

Void shot (E): Valari puts her arms out in front of her and shoots an void bolt in the target direction. Any champion that is close to Valari and gets hit by it gets knocked back but doesn't become immobile. Bolt disappears after use.

Cooldown: 12/12/10/7/7 Mana cost: 25/35/50/60/75 Damage: 20/55/ 100/165/220 (+40% ap)

"Bolt disappears after use." why this is needed? What kind of unknown bonus information it provides? If you don't use it, it will not disappear? Looks good, but this "bonus information" is strange. You launch projectile, which deals damage and knock back enemy hit. Why you specify that it doesn't immobilize? Could it immobilize enemy if you do something?

Ring of Portals (R): ULT REWORKED: LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK Valari goes into the portal to the void and becomes untargetable and chooses an area near her. A ring of portals will surround the desired area and everything outside the area becomes fog of war. No champion can leave or go into the ring of portals including allied champions. Valari can choose up to 3 portals, when she does the portal will light up for 1 second and shoot a straight void beam into a portal parallel of it. After the first beam hits the next beams will deal 20% extra damage. If Valari doesn't use all three beams after 7 seconds the portals will go away.

Cooldown: 180/ 140/100 Mana cost: 120 Damage Minimum Damage: 200/310/405 Maximum Damage: 288/446/588

R explained. aoe spell, valari chooses three different portals, every beam it does more damage, long cooldown

sorry if the ult is confusing, i did my best to explain it and i tried my best here to balance it out by reducing the base damage and making it so the portals light up before they shoot.

So, you isolate enemy for 7 sec. That is beyond broken :D you don't even need to kill enemy, you just have to isolate it. Target an enemy ADC and isolate him/her. Now, damage is also pretty much broken. If all 3 beams hit, rank 1 will deal 728 damage. At rank 3 it will deal 1479 damage. Combine that with 7 sec isolation, 7 sec being untargetable and you will pretty much get 100% banned champion forever. No kind of updates or balance will fix this. This ability just have to be removed completely and changed into something else.

DriftThruTheRift4/20/2016, 4:37:28 AM1 votes

Well there's no need for three hit passives for every champ lol :P also I wanted an ap Mage assassin-like champion, but if it were you how would you change it?

impishDullahan4/20/2016, 12:39:46 PM1 votes

Nice concept, seems balanced, except for the move speed that is. The highest base move speds are Panthron and Janna with 355. It would take many champions 2nd tier boots just to catch up. The way the ult is described is a little confusing. I'm also slightly worried about the AD. Seems a little too high at 18 but there's no full AD scaling, or any AD scaling for that matter, so it should be fine.

Lore-wise, this is cool and intriguing. The interactions with the portals would interesting.

One final thing, I'm a stickler and grammar nazi. So please fix your grammar and spell the right words in the right places.

DriftThruTheRift4/20/2016, 12:44:20 PM1 votes

Thanks for the feedback! Yeah sorry sometimes I had to rush what I typed because I have a busy schedule so I did the best I could on that and thanks for telling me about that, I wasn't sure what to do on stats so that's just what I put down but I'll fix it now

LeifTheExplorer4/20/2016, 2:53:10 PM1 votes

I think the idea of portals that allow projectiles to go through them is an interesting idea, but the amount of bugs that could happen is nearly unthinkable. Also, the cooldowns for some of these abilities need to be nerfed, as the spammability is too great. Also, please make the scaling more consistent.

BTW, could you check out my champion concept? I've worked hard on it, and would enjoy some critique. Please let me know what you think! Gid, the Carefree Fawn

DriftThruTheRift4/20/2016, 3:34:40 PM1 votes

Yeah I can check it out in a bit and how would u change it to balance it out a little better? And hey maybe a challenge accepted from rito? Lol

Mushubaby4/20/2016, 5:35:02 PM1 votes

i really like the idea of using portals to manipulate projectiles. maybe you could push this concept further by giving her the ability to swallow enemy projectiles using portals or something.

not a big fan of the ult though. i feel like her ultimate could be waaaaaay more interesting and provide more options for interactions. like a circle of portals or something.

DriftThruTheRift4/20/2016, 6:09:00 PM1 votes

Well I was gonna make her ult on one of her abilities but I was trying to find a way to make her ultimate useful in team fights and that was what I decided on because it slows and immobilizes everyone while they fall through. And how do u mean by a circle of portals?

CrimsonCobra34/20/2016, 6:14:02 PM1 votes

Um... Is the ult a straight copy from Janus? I was going to look the other way because the idea is rather good, but it seems exactly the same.

DriftThruTheRift4/20/2016, 6:21:52 PM1 votes

Well to be honest it was a placeholder ability since I wasn't sure exactly what I wanted for her ult since her kit revolves around her portals.

Dis The Chris4/20/2016, 6:50:33 PM1 votes

Hey! So it looks like we had the same idea of utilizing portals but I'll get to that later.

As for her passive, I'm curious as to how to trigger the void dive of her passive. After casting 4 spells, do you just need to click on a targeted direction to dive towards it? (Akin to Kalista's Passive) or does it have a special method to do so?

Your concept of portal is sort of like Bard's Magical Journey but instead transports projectiles (from both ends or just the entrance?) as well as limited range it can cover. While the primary thing you'll be throwing through the portal are actually skill shots but over walls - I believe skill shots can actually do that right now by aiming their skill shot over a wall - your portals only acts sort of extender (which acts like Jayce's Gate thingy) and while at it, can be predictable for both you and your enemies as they can send their own projectiles through it (if you can transfer projectiles from both ends that is).

Lastly, for the ultimate - like what CrimsonCobra stated, it plays similar to Janus's ability (haven't played Smite yet but I keep track of their champions as well as Heroes of Newerth to inspire some of my ideas). Like what I stated above, it is quite predictable in a sense and can possibly act as a good wall in tight corridors and could possibly shine if used in brushes as to hide your ability so they would easily fall prey to it.

Overall, her Q and E are rather... let's say - sweet but not spicy, while it is certainly viable, it doesn't really make Valari a fun to play champ. Shooting her E through the portal will knockback the target which basically says "Get away or you'll get hit by more".

If you have time, I would love to get your feedback on Muz the Anomaly

DriftThruTheRift4/21/2016, 12:34:32 AM1 votes

Yes it is similar to kalista passive and as for the q and e, I figured she needed skill shots and I don't think there's a whole lot of fancy things you could do as an ap Mage and yeah the portals pretty much act like Jayce but except you need to work it with portals instead and lastly I do have an alternate ult I can use which I'll post soon thanks to mushubaby.

DriftThruTheRift4/21/2016, 5:03:45 AM1 votes

for those who are checking back into this, i changed the q and e cooldowns and reworked the ultimate and tried to balance it out the best i could, so let know what you think!

DriftThruTheRift4/21/2016, 12:44:31 PM1 votes

Thanks for the feedback, and I tried making the ultimate unique as I could since people weren't to fond of the other ultimate and I tried to lower the damage the best i could so it wouldn't be to overpowering and gave it a long cooldown timer so it wouldn't be as unbalanced but I see what you mean with the other abilities. I haven't had to much free time to go and fix everything 100% but I'll do my best to clear everything up so it's much better. But as for the stats though it was my first attempt at that and the damage as well.

But if you think about viegar ult can deal over 1k damage and it's click to win this ability you still have to actually hit the champion

impishDullahan4/21/2016, 3:41:11 PM1 votes

That ult is really cool but definitely needs some work. As far as damage goes, find similar existing abilities and average their stats. Then tweak them slightly if you think they're a little off. Also not that you can add limitations that don't exist already. That's how I've been doing abilities for while now.

DriftThruTheRift4/21/2016, 6:26:13 PM1 votes

Ok I made some minor tweaks lemme know what you guys think

PandaDestroyer174/21/2016, 10:25:47 PM1 votes

This new idea sounds amazing, I hope they come out with her.

DriftThruTheRift4/22/2016, 12:37:57 AM1 votes

Well thank you good sir :P I hope they release a similar concept it would be awesone

regonas4/24/2016, 2:12:07 PM1 votes

Could you spend some time and review one of these: http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/zlQfg63a-champion-concept-lady-fate-the-embodiment-of-destiny http://boards.na.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/skin-champion-concepts/opn5uM8A-champion-concept-luxuria-the-demon-of-desire

regonas4/24/2016, 10:22:51 PM1 votes

All Voidborn champions (except Kha'Zix ) can deal true damage with their kits. All Voidborn champions (except Vel'Koz ) have an ability that enhances their basic attacks in some way. All champions that are Void-related stack something.

BT BunnyLord4/20/2016, 4:32:25 AM1 votes

I like it! I am a huge Void fan and this is an interesting idea, but I think you forgot one thing. This is Tank Meta (max health damage). Also you don't have any three hit passives. [slayer-pantheon-thumbs]

DriftThruTheRift4/24/2016, 10:40:55 PM1 votes

You know I actually really like that idea I think I can work that into something for sure and I was trying to to make this concept so related to recent champs with 3 hit passives and such cuz like every new champion has some stacking effect which is what I was branching away from