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[Champion Concept] Ceilidh, The Dancing Penance, Forfeit to the Elements

The Anagram King·2/22/2016, 2:44:51 PM·12 votes·2,688 views

An attempt to tie passive emotes to in-game ability effects, Ceilidh (pronounced kay-lee) was dreamt up - literally - as I lay face-down on my pillow, in a puddle of my own drool. Emotionally scarred and seething with vengeful rage at those who did her wrong, Ceilidh was once a prodigal dancer destined to shine as a sacrifice - prepared to accept a physical death for her family's benefit; and promised a blissful reawakening as a bride of the elements. Fate had other plans, however - forging her into a weapon. An elementalist. Well, one fourth of an elementalist, at any rate - capable of drawing and directing the rage of air and lightning to decimate those around her.

... though such power does not come to the unprepared without cost.

The goal here is to create a champion whose kit relies on the /dance emote to function correctly. I've also tried to add an element of reckless destructive impulses to the character, because League could really use some anarchy!! Let's see how it turns out...

#Good Neighbour Bonus Post (For the CCOS)

#Character Theme

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The forest churned and popped as the flames continued to spread; the air swirling and crackling beneath what little could be seen of the blackened sky. From beneath the stage crafted for her performance, held tight in the arms of a young boy not much older than she, Ceilidh screeched in pain. Her hands were blistered - the sheer heat of the charred earth pushing newly-bloomed petals toward the teetering branches from which they had fallen only moments before. But all things existed in balance. And on an illusory horizon, Ceilidh could hear the gradually rising tide in its approach.

The grip around her tightened.

"Don't worry, Ceilidh! I'll protect you! I won't let go, no matter what!"

Spurred on by the crashing of water on bark, Ceilidh opened her eyes... and screamed.

#The Promised Bride to the Elements

It's finally time! I feared the night would never end, yet the moon has come and gone again. Grandfather told me that the ceremony wouldn't begin until much later tonight and that - after practising form - I would have the whole afternoon to myself. I wasn't sure what to do with the free time, so I tried to find Brannon. I couldn't, though. His mother said that he'd taken off this morning to who knows where.

I hope I get a chance to see him at the ceremony.

"Ceilidh! Where're you hiding at? The dressmakers are getting impatient! You don't want them to leave, do you? Ceilidh? Where are you?"

Between the branches of the cherry trees, the pair snickered, quietly. Both hands of the boy were frozen; one mid-pluck of a flower-petal, the second on his first hand's arm, lest he accidentally rustle the leaves of the great tree they were perched upon. Grunting, the old man soon waddled off in his old man way, leaving the two children to breathe a sigh of relief.

When it seemed safe, Ceilidh laughed.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "He's going to be mad at me, you know!"

The boy grinned in response, yanking a petal from one of the tree's many blossoming flowers. Leaning forward, he pushed the girl's head to one side; fitting the petal amidst the delicate cluster he was slowly building beneath a circlet not-so-expertly placed to draw the attention from her unkempt hair.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Does it look okay?"

Reaching for another petal, the boy nodded enthusiastically.

"The petals look really good on you. I think pink's your colour. The priestess is going to be really jealous, I bet."

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "It might be too late. They'll probably just fall out when I start dancing anywa--"

Ceilidh froze, mouth open. Slowly, her eyelids began to flicker. The boy could guess what was about to happen, and stretched his hand out.

"Wait, don't!"

And at that moment, Ceilidh sneezed; sending a shower of rosey-pink petals gliding toward the face of the boy sitting opposite to her. When the girl opened her eyes, she couldn't help but giggle upon seeing him spit and splutter. Blinking the dust and petal fragments from his eyes, it took a moment before the boy regained his composure; but when he did so, he mustered a frown.

...

"You did that on purpose!!"

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "No, I didn't!!"

#The Voice of the Infirmed

I hate this. ...I hate this! Ever since the ceremony... my head hurts all the time. I can feel myself slipping away; but just before I do, my body pulls me back. It feels like I'm drifting in and out of some kind of horrible dream. The nurses here don't know how to fix me. Don't know anything! They think I'm telling stories about what happened and won't let me finish the Dance! And he knows... the wind knows what I've done. He keeps blaming me. But it isn't my fault!

... It wasn't my fault...

"Ceilidh! There you are! Wow, just look at you! Did you do that by yourself?"

The girl smiled coyly, inclining her head to allow her grandfather a better view of the hastily scrabbled collection of petals that ornamented her hair. A hand brushed its way through the petals and - at first - Ceilidh thought that the elder had brushed them from her hair. When the man's second hand joined the first, however, the girl relaxed.

"There! I've tied up your hair into a make-shift basket. There's no way the petals will fall out, now. Go on - find a mirror and see how precious you look! The dressmakers are just putting the finishing touches on your outfit, now. Soon, you'll look just like a princess."

Ceilidh beamed a wide smile at her grandfather, then turned to find herself a mirror. As she scuttled away, the elder yelled out, behind her:

"And remember to visit your mother! You don't want to leave without saying goodbye, first!"

Skipping joyously along the cobbled stone trail that led back to the village, Ceilidh began to hum. She couldn't believe the day had finally arrived! A bride to the four elements; just as though she were the fabled Princess of the Crimson Petals. In a moment of whimsy, the girl hazarded a twirl, her foot connecting with a root protruding from the earth and causing her to fall flat on her face. As her hair untangled itself and the petals fluttered onto the cobbles, she almost began to cry... but then a familiar voice called her name...

"Ceilidh?"

... And her eyes lit up.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Brannon!!"

#It's Lonely At the Top...

The other children in this place hate me. They're frightened of the way my bruises and blisters come back whenever I try to dance. They think they'll catch some kind of disease from me, even though they are the ones who are sick! They told the nurses that I talk funny; and rat me out whenever I find somewhere to practice. So I've started hiding on the roof. It's been two days so far and they haven't found me. The boys don't care very much, but the nurses are afraid they'll look bad. One or two of them think I'll starve.

It wouldn't matter if I starved. Everybody I know is gone anyway.

The softwood warped and reshaped itself beneath the feet of the blindfolded girl, the air around her contorting as she glided from tile to tile. Every step of the dance was marked in thick ink upon the floorboards, but at this late stage in her training, the imprints served only to impress upon the confidence of the other villagers who had yet to see truly see the girl in action. Ceilidh's expression was without emotion; the girl's every waking thought devoted to her form. Behind her, the grandfather looked on in concern. Adjacent to him was a doll-like woman, dressed ornately in silvers, golds and a flowing, white, dress. Similar to Ceilidh, her face betrayed zero emotion.

"She's far too good at what she does."

Afront the pair, Ceilidh pulled at the space between herself and the doorway. And, for a moment, the room seemed to collapse as though to encompass only her. Extending her arms and releasing the grip she had held, the walls parted and the floors expanded once more, allowing the two observers to fade back into vision.

"Such a thing is to be celebrated, is it not? After all, a single mistake could very well doom this village to destruction. The world along with it."

The grandfather frowned as the wood beneath them splintered, giving way to rising saplings. As the stems twirled their way up his legs, his face gained lustre. His aged hands softened. Before long, he had become a young man. But no sooner had the change taken place, than the stems receded. Seconds passed, and he was an old man once more.

"The girl is not simply imitating tradition. Every step that she makes has been fine-tuned to her own personality. I worry, High Priestess... I worry that this kind of control over the elements may bring about an ego in her that we cannot simply suppress."

The Priestess responded, but her voice was muffled. This did not seem to phase her, however, and she continued to speak her part. After a brief period, the words fell out of the air; as though simply waiting for the opportunity to be heard.

"It is your duty to prevent such a calamity, Elder. And I would suggest you make every effort to do so. Our very existence hangs in the balance. I should not need to remind you of this."

Gritting his teeth, the grandfather did not dignify her statement with a reply. Instead, he rose his palms and clasped them together. Afront them, Ceilidh pirouetted and made to bow. Grinning widely, the girl removed the blindfold that had been obscuring her vision.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Exactly like the Crimson Princess!! Right, Grandfather?"

As the High Priestess turned and made to leave the studio with a self-satisfied grunt, the Elder worked up the effort to feign a genuine smile.

"Maybe not exactly, Ceilidh. Maybe not exactly..."

At this statement, the girl's smile faded. But the Elder waved his hand, dismissively.

"Don't pay me any mind. Your form is perfect! In fact, why don't you take the rest of the afternoon off? Just make sure to be back in time for the Midnight Ceremony, alright?"

Smiling again, Ceilidh nodded.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "I love you, Grandpa! I promise I'll be back in time!"

#When One Good Deed Deserves Another...

One of the boys fell from the 2nd floor, today. I wanted to teach him to dance on the roof with me, but when the sky turned black, he began to cry. I tried to tell him that it was dangerous to stop halfway through. I didn't want the same thing that happened at the ceremony to happen here... but when I heard him hit the pavement after he tried to climb back through his window... I didn't know what to do.

The wind kept telling me it wasn't my fault. He said I could keep dancing and he would forgive me. I didn't want to stop. It just happened. I tried starting again, but it made him furious. He struck me. I wanted to tell the boys to run, but he took the entire house while they were still inside.

When the guards came, I told them everything that happened. I was afraid that they would blame me... stop me from trying to dance. But they were ordered around by a beautiful woman, and she was very kind. They believed me. They told me that they knew the name of the stranger who had destroyed my village; and that they might help me find her. I was sad. But I was also sort of happy.

"Ceilidh! Your Grandfather wants to speak with you about your training! Have you finished the morning chores yet?"

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Not yet! I just need to get water for the horses!"

"Don't take too long! You know your Grandfather hates to be kept waiting!"

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "I know, I know! I'll be finished really soon!"

**As her mother retreated back into the family household, Ceilidh turned her head away from the village well and wiped the sweat from her forehead. Lifting the overflowing twin buckets from the ground, the girl began to waddle toward the not-so-grateful faces of the family's horses. Well, horses-and-a-mule. For some reason, the Elder had always preferred his old pet donkey. He was pretty dumb - even for a donkey. But the girl would be lying if she said she didn't have any affection for him. **

Emptying the buckets one after another into the trough was greeted with general interest, and the horses soon began to wander over. This was about as close to a 'thank-you' as could be expected, and so Ceilidh breathed out a dramatic "Phew!" before saying;

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "You're welcome! Don't drink it all in one go. The buckets are pretty heavy, y'know."

Irelia "Really? They don't look so heavy."

Ceilidh jumped in fright at the sudden statement, but rallied magnificently; spinning on her heels to face the stranger in rehearsed pout.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Well you're an adult! I'm just a kid and those buckets are way too big for most people my age!" Irelia "I'll have you know that, at your age, I was beating up boys twice my size." https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "... That doesn't sound very nice. Were they mean boys?"

Lazily, the woman shrugged her shoulders.

Irelia "Maybe. Listen - you'd probably save time carrying buckets of water from place to place if you connected them to a pole or something and lugged them around on your shoulders. You don't look like the kind've girl who needs muscle - so why do it the hard way?"

Frowning, Ceilidh leaned forward at the stranger.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "I do too need muscles! I'm training to become the best dancer in the world." Irelia "Really? I'm something of a dancer, myself. Why do you want to be the best in the world?"

Ceilidh hesitated.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "... I-It's a secret." Irelia "Can't be that big a secret if you've already blurted it out to me." https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "..." Irelia "Then again, you're only a child. You probably haven't danced a real day in your life." https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "..." Irelia "Like I thought. The worst dancers are always the first to brag." https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg ""That's not true! I can dance! Really well, too!" Irelia "So why don't you prove it?" https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "..."

Again, the woman shrugged. Turning her back to the girl, she began to make her way along the cobble path leading away from the village.

Irelia "Children always make up such stupid stories."

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "It's NOT stupid! I can dance - watch!!"

... And, wide-eyed... Irelia watched.

#As a Petal to a Rose

It's finally time! I feared the waiting would never end, yet the seasons have come and gone and the sword-master lays dead. Part of me wishes that I could have stared into his eyes as he gasped his last and told him that it was I who had corrupted his flesh. But now is not the time for regrets. The master's daughter lives, yet. I've tried to find his son, but I cannot. Informants tell us that he's taken off to who knows where. Presumably to request reinforcements.

I hope he returns, soon. I'd hate to have him miss the ceremony.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Grandfather, wait! Stop! It hurts!"

The Elder snorted dismissively as he hastily worked to un-knot the young girl's hair. His hands moved in a blur, misplacing and restoring the scattered rose petals hidden under Ceilidh's circlet, one by one.

"Cease your complaining. we wouldn't have to do this, had you not run off with that boy and hidden yourself away. Did you ever stop to consider how worried I was? Or how worried your mother was?"

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "I did, it's just Brannon said he could fix it and I--Ow!"

"Stop fidgeting so much! Just sit still - I'm... almost... there! Done. Finally. See? That wasn't so bad, was it? Here, turn around and let me have a proper look at you... Hrm... Ceilidh, sweetie... is that you... doing that?"

Ceilidh shook her head in general denial.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "No... doing what?"

The Grandfather shook his own head violently in return, gripping the girl by her shoulders and ushering her around him. As he did so, petals shook from her hair. But whereas they should have fallen unceremoniously to the ground, they floated delicately - set in perpetual orbit alongside her. Above the girl, the remaining petals began to glide and twist, joining in to gradually form the silhouette of a crown.

"Don't worry about it! You need to get on stage right now! No, leave the ribbons! Move, move, move!"

Ceilidh grunted quizzically as she was dragged toward the stage. Looking up at her grandfather with an expression of bewilderment, she opened her mouth;

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "But the ceremony's not supposed to be until midnight, is it?"

Once more, the Elder shook his head.

"The Elements have already taken notice of you, girl. We have to do this now!"

Stopping just short of the stage, the old man knelt down, maintaining eye-level with his granddaughter.

"You can do this, right? Are you ready? You aren't feeling sick, are you?"

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Yes, Yes, Nope!"

The girl's Grandfather smiled, warmly.

"You look so beautiful, Ceilidh. Remember to watch over your mother from your cloud throne, alright?"

A smile almost as wide as her face, Ceilidh nodded. And, before the Elder could bat an eyelid, she was standing upon the centre of the wooden platform in the centre of the grove.

In an instant, the scenery drained away, leaving only the bounding form of Ceilidh, shadowed by the petals that fluttered and twinkled around her. Heads turned, but the effort was wasted. For, within seconds, the Dance had occupied the entire grove. Maybe the entire village. For those in attendance, there was nothing, but Ceilidh. Nothing, but the Dance.

Irelia "..."

Her arms reaching out toward the horizon, the girl released her grip on the space around her. And, suddenly, a second figure emerged...

Irelia "..."

The High Priestess' ornamented robes jingled in low-pitched tones as she stepped onto the stage, eyes tightly shut and hands modestly folded into each other beneath her sleeves. Methodically, the woman began to pace in tandem with the young girl. With each pass they made, a piece of jewellery was bequeathed and, before long, Ceilidh seemed to be struggling under the weight of the ornaments. Around her, the air began play tricks on the imagination. Visions plagued the mind without first passing through the eyes.

A gushing stream... a burning inferno... a resilient sapling... the roaring winds... and last... the glimmer of silver...

Irelia "... I knew it."

Irelia moved faster than the Priestess could, catching the woman in her side with the full force of her blade. A look of pure bewilderment stared back into the face of the warrior, before the Priestess' eyes rolled backwards and the rearing dagger slipped from her fingers. Wasting not a moment, Irelia tightly gripped the wrist of the young girl. From her hiding place, a contingent of soldiers flooded into the grove.

Irelia "Move, Now!"

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Stop! Let go of me!! What are you doing?! Grandfather, help!!"

A sound likened to a whip-crack startled the warrior as the sky began to darken - but Irelia's senses were refined. Raising her blade, she struck precisely at the flowing air as it parted behind her.

"..."

... And the Elder gasped.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "GRANDFATHER!!"

#The Stand at the Placedium

Idiots! Months of careful planning, thrown out the window. What should have resulted in an uneventful surrender of the Placedium has turned into an all-out brawl in the streets. Typical. In an effort to stem the tide of momentum being gained by the emboldened resistance, I've been forced to redeploy onto the battlefield.

The coven reports that Irelia has already been struck down. I don't expect the resolve of the defenders to last once the skies begin tearing them apart. But, then again, I suppose I didn't expect things to progress this far, either.

Irelia... What I would have given to tear you body apart, myself... Piece by sordid piece!

Irelia yanked her blade from the old man's stomach with little ceremony. Grunting, the Elder leaned forward and stared into the teary eyes of his granddaughter. Opening his mouth to speak, his expression suddenly went blank; and the man's body crumpled on the stage.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "--GRANDFATHER! NO! GRANDF--Let go of me! LET GO OF ME!!" Irelia "Shut up, you imbecile! Can't you see that I'm saving your life? Stop kicking at me!" https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "You can't! You can't do it - YOU CAN'T!!"

Gazing out over the melee unfolding within the grove, Irelia noted that order was more or less restored. One hand still gripped tightly around Ceilidh's wrist, the warrior lifted the girl up into the air.

Irelia "I want EVERY last one of these people bound and ready for transport. This sick, ritualistic, cult is done. You hear me? Don---AGH!!"

Irelia cringed; but did not hesitate. Fearing for her safety, the warrior dropped the young girl and spun on her heels; swinging her arm around behind her in reflex. All that greeted her, however, was empty air. Pausing, she gazed downwards to see the ceremonial dagger, once wielded by the Priestess, buried deep in her waist. Connected to it, was a small boy's hand.

"Leave her alone!"

... And, behind the warrior, Ceilidh's eyes lit up.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "...Brannon!"

#The Dance of the Elements

"These bull-headed soldiers are something else. It didn't seem to matter how many of the poor souls I fried; the next in line would just take up the weapon of their fallen comrade and dive right into the fray. We were overwhelmed through sheer force beneath their unrelenting charge. And leading them, I could swear that I saw her. Irelia. She lives.

She is different, somehow. I am certain that I struck her in the chaos - yet she remained entirely unaffected! Line after line of our men, rent through as though they were training dummies. The witch didn't even grip her own blades! This doesn't make sense. She's just a soldier! Did her father bequeath some kind of secret on his deathbed?

... I missed my opportunity. Worse still, her brother has disappeared from the face of the continent... What else can I do, but practice my form? Grandfather. Mother. Everyone... I'm not done. I'll grow stronger. I'll reach into the heavens, themselves and draw upon your strength. I'll turn this world upside down and inside out; until the eyes of your murderer are turned milky white in the face of their just reward.

... Let the Elements guide and decide my fate. If they still blame me when the time comes... then, on your behalf, I will gladly accept their final judgement...

Just know that I truly miss each and every one of you. Every single day.

Irelia "Eeeyah!" https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Brannon!"

The boy skipped along the stage, violently - caught alongside the chin by the back of Irelia's gauntlet. Arching her back, the warrior grunted. The dagger had pierced her deeply - clearly fashioned to draw a large amount of blood from its intended victim. Motioning for a concerned soldier to ignore her and restrain the boy, Irelia clenched her teeth and forcefully removed the blade. There was a weak spray of blood - and a lot of pain - but it seemed she'd managed to luck out of any major artery wounds.

Irelia "Grrrah! Where did he come from? Please tell me there aren't any more children hiding under---hm."

As Irelia turned her vision back to the boy, she was greeted in kind. His expression was stern; a shortsword gripped tightly in his left hand and dangling precariously afront the neck of the soldier tasked to restrain him.

Irelia "Easy, now... trust me - you don't want to do anything silly..."

The boy spat his next words and, as he railed, his grip on the hilt of the blade tightened.

"Trust you?! You killed the High Priestess! You've killed the Elder!! What now? Are you going to kill Ceilidh next?! I won't let you."

Irelia "Listen to me! There are things at play here that you do not fully understand. Think this whole thing through very, very--"

"I don't care about what you have to say! Leave this village right now, or I'll kill him! I swear I will!"

Irelia "That just isn't going to happen. And you know it. Let's talk about this, okay...?"

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "They're coming from behind you!!"

The boy turned his head, only to receive a stomach full of elbow from the soldier in his grasp. As the pair struggled over ownership of the blade, the other soldiers began to converge on the boy, from behind.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "Brannon! NO! Wait, I'll - I can help!"

Darting back to avoid Irelia's reactionary attempt to swipe at her legs, the girl twirled through the air to the far end of the stage. A fleeting moment passed; and the grove was encompassed by the Dance, once more. From among the crowd of bound onlookers, tears began to fall, collect and swell; From the swaying trees, petals bloomed and fluttered to the dirt, below; From the lanterns that lined the grove, flames licked at the air; And from the sky, a bolt of lightning drove its way toward the Earth, striking Ceilidh and knocking the spectators from their feet.

Scrambling to his feet, Brannon made to cry the girl's name. But he stopped short. There, in the centre of the stage, she danced - crackling, brilliantly, with the energy of the heavens. Screaming, twisting, crying - the energy seared at the skin of the invaders, one after another. With each bolt that she unleashed, another fell from the sky and, soon, her hair was singed. Her face bruised. Her hands blistered. And yet she persisted.

https://befunkycartoonizer.s3.amazonaws.com/C4026734-1500676027678007large.jpg "LEAVE HIM ALONE!!"

The sight was horrifying; and Irelia found herself frozen, watching her contingent fall, man by man. Even so, she couldn't bring herself to muster the strength to attempt to strike the child down. Not like this. Not while she was losing blood as she was. Shaking her head - half in doubt, half in terror - she finally gave the order:

Irelia "RETREAT! Everybody out of here, NOW!"

... ... ... ... Ceilidh! ... "Ceilidh!" "CEILIDH! Are you okay?!"

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The forest churned and popped as the flames wreaked by the lanterns continued to spread; the air swirling and crackling beneath what little could be seen of the blackened sky. From beneath the stage crafted for the performance, Ceilidh screeched in pain - held tight in the arms of her childhood friend, Brannon; a boy not much older than she. Her hands were blistered beyond repair - the sheer heat of the charred earth pushing newly-bloomed petals toward the teetering branches from which they had fallen only moments before. But, like all things, the elements existed in balance. And on the horizon, Ceilidh felt the gradually rising tide of water from the nearby riverbed announcing its imminent approach.

The grip around her tightened.

"Don't worry, Ceilidh! I'll protect you! I won't let go, no matter what!"

Spurred on by the crashing of water on bark, Ceilidh opened her eyes... ... ... #"THIS BOY COMPETES FOR YOUR AFFECTION." #"BUT YOU, GIRL, HAVE CONDEMNED HIM TO DEATH." ... ... ... and screamed.

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#TL;DR Lore

From childhood, Ceilidh was reared to serve as a sacrifice - a bride to the elements that make up life as we know it; Earth, Water, Fire and Wind. During a grand ceremony in which she would summon and dance with the 4 elements, a fledgling Irelia - backed by a contingent of soldiers - would interrupt the precedings with the intent of preventing the ritual; killing the Elder of the district - Ceilidh's grandfather - in the process. Fearing for the safety of her friends and family, Ceilidh deliberately trapped the element of wind and air within her own body in an attempt to try to save her village. Abusing the Dance to direct the confused rage of the Wind, Ceilidh struck down the invaders man by man, forcing Irelia and the few survivors to flee. Engaging in such heresy, however, would not come without consequence. Angered by her ego, the 3 remaining elements would unleash their rage upon the village; dooming it and everything else Ceilidh had ever held dear to destruction. Unable to restrain the rage of the wind spirit still trapped inside of her, Ceilidh would eventually attract the attention of Leblanc's predecessor (also named Leblanc), and was, over time, goaded into joining the Noxian military. Her talents and deeds would help to pave way for the invasion of Ionia, where she sought revenge on a much more experienced and determined Irelia. Overwhelmed by the warrior's ferocity, Ceilidh retreated from the battle with her pride wounded and reaffirmed her intent to gain revenge. For the first time in years, she would turn her thoughts back to the Dance; and begin to refine both her mind and form in ways none could have predicted.

#Playstyle Overview

Before all else, Ceilidh is a dancer. Channelling the power she commands through the methodical steps she was once taught by her Grandfather, Ceilidh is capable of gliding across the battlefield and engaging her foes in combat without ever interrupting her own dance; making her presence on the Summoner's Rift quite the sight to behold. As Ceilidh dances, lightning rains down around her, damaging nearby foes. But Ceilidh is not simply beckoning lightning; she is capable of catching it - mid air - and redirecting it toward her foes. Whether this is done in the form of an empowered attack or ability is entirely up to the player; and makes for some very interesting combo potential. Boasting a diverse arsenal of knockbacks, ms buffs, vision-alterers, resistance steroids, damage auras that grow in size based on damage taken and an ultimate that engages enemies in a Duet to the Death, Ceilidh is more than capable of utterly decimating any foe that takes her at face value.

Every dance is more than the sum of its parts. But take solace in the fact that lightning cannot strike in the same place, twice.

... I mean, surely...

#◘-▬▬▬▬-◘-▬▬▬▬-◘ #▼-▬CHAMPION KIT▬-▼ #◘-▬▬▬▬-◘-▬▬▬▬-◘ .

|Primary Role(s)----------------------|Secondary Role(s)-------------------------|Standard Attack Range |- |MAGE| TANK | ** 575 (RANGED)**

|Base Stats------------------------------|Growth per/level----------------------------|Stats @ 18| |- |Health: 490| (+73 | 1611.5 | |Mana: 355| (+50 | 1205 | |AD: 42| (+2.7 | 87.9 | |HP/5: 6.8| (+0.65 | 18.3 | |AS: 0.645| (+2.45% |0.914 | |Armor: 23| (+3.6 | 91.2 | |Magic Resist: 35| (+1.15 | 54.55 | |Movement Speed: 345| (+0 | 345 | |. |. |.|

#♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪ #☼ PASSIVE - Dance of the Crimson Rose - ☼ #♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪

Upon casting an ability, Ceilidh will begin to dance. While dancing, she will travel 25% slower and may attack or be attacked without causing her /dance animation to end or interrupt. During the dance, lightning will prime to rain down from the sky at a nearby location every 4/3/2/1 seconds, with the projected point of impact (PPI) instantly marked visible to Ceilidh and her allies. Lightning strikes prime for 4 seconds before striking the PPI. Additionally, enemies will be capable of seeing these PPIs up to 2.5 seconds before the strike.

Stepping onto a PPI with 2 or fewer seconds remaining before a lightning strike will enable Ceilidh to instantly catch the bolt in the palm of her hand; dealing 5% of her current HP in magic damage, granting her 50% bonus MS for 2.5 seconds and empowering her next ability or standard attack. Ceilidh may hold up to 2 bolts at a time (one in each hand), but will still take damage and gain the relevant MS buff if hit by successive lightning stirkes.

  • Empowered Attacks deal an additional 30-275 (+0.65AP) magic damage to the initial target and 1/2 this amount to hostiles in a 125 unit radius.
  • Lightning bolts that are not caught by Ceilidh will damage enemies and monsters in the PPI, equal to 5-90 (+0.38AP) magic damage.
  • The magic damage effect of Empowered Attacks and Lightning Strikes benefit from spellvamp.

Foes who /dance while in vision of Ceilidh will only do so at 3/4 normal dance speed due to their own self-consciousness.

#♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪ #☼ Q - Lamentation of the Heavens - ☼ #♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪

|Mana Cost------------------------|Cooldown-------------------------------| |- | 35/ 40/ 45/ 50/ 55|13/ 11.5/ 10/ 8.5/ 7 |Cast Range-----------------------|AoE Radius-----------------------------| |625 Units|200 Units|

Ceilidh calls a bolt of lightning down at the target location, striking the terrain after a brief delay and dealing 25/55/80/125/155 (+0.7 AP) magic damage to any hostiles caught in the blast radius. If Ceilidh is hit by the blast, she will attempt to catch the bolt upon impact, gaining the relevant passive effects for doing so. If Lamentation of the Heavens makes contact with either Ceilidh or an enemy unit, the player may cast the ability a second time within 2.5 seconds. (Lightning CAN strike in the same place, twice!)

☼-WHEN EMPOWERED-☼ Enemies struck by Lamentation of the Heavens will be knocked away from the centre of the impact point.

#♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪ #☼ W - Midnight Sky - ☼ #♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪

|Mana Cost------------------------|Cooldown-------------------------------| |- | 50/ 55/ 60/ 65/ 70|18/ 17/ 16/ 15/ 14 |Skillshot Range---------------|Debuff Aura Radius---------------| |1200 Units|225 Units|

Ceilidh throws her arms forward, launching a thin, black, string that collides with the first non-friendly unit that it makes contact with; expanding into an aura of midnight that persists for 3 seconds. Enemies caught inside the aura will gain true vision of Ceilidh, but will have their standard vision range dramatically reduced. Additionally, damage dealt to Ceilidh by hostiles caught inside the aura of midnight will be 10/15/20/15/30% less effective. The player may at any time reactivate Midnight Sky to sever the string and end the effect.

Thematic Description The Midnight Sky is a product of the Dance - an inspired culmination of the drawing of moisture (clouds) to block light; and the dance's innate capacity to warp space. Seemingly growing to encompass the gap between Ceilidh and her target, the Dance becomes the focal point of vision - functioning somewhat like the event horizon of a black hole. Though you may see yourself falling into the dance; you are unable to see past it. There is only Ceilidh. Only the Dance.

☼-WHEN EMPOWERED-☼ The aura of midnight is electrified and deals 10 - 55 (+0.2AP) magic damage (based on champion level) every 0.5 seconds .

#♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪ #☼ E - Crimson Penance - ☼ #♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪

PASSIVE

While she is not dancing, Ceilidh will begin to amass an orbiting flurry of petals - with every 100 units she travels converting into 1 stack of Crimson Penance. Upon beginning a new dance, Ceilidh will convert all current stacks into 5 seconds worth of bonus Movement Speed, at a rate of 1% MS per stack (Max Stacks: 20/35/50/65/80).

ACTIVE

|Mana Cost------------------------|Cooldown-------------------------------| |- |36/ 42/ 48/ 54/ 60|16/ 14.5/ 13/ 11.5/ 10 |Initial Aura Radius-----------| |125 units

Ceilidh plays upon the rage of the Wind, summoning a violent bolt of lightning that saturates her in an aura of crackling electricity for the next 6 seconds. Enemies within range of this aura suffer magic damage equal to 20/40/60/80/100 +(0.2 AP) every second for the ability's duration. ...But this is just the beginning! For every 1% of her max HP that Ceilidh takes in damage during this time, the aura's radius will increase by 2 units, expanding evenly outward in all directions.

  • Damage taken is calculated before resistances and the debuff effect caused by Midnight Sky.
  • Damage Ceilidh deals to herself through catching lightning from the sky is also counted.

☼-WHEN EMPOWERED-☼ Ceilidh gains an additional 10/12.5/15/17.5/20% buff to her BONUS armour & magic resistance for the ability's duration.

#♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪ #☼ R - Bride To The Elements - ☼ #♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪♫♪

PASSIVE

Whenever Ceilidh catches a bolt of lightning, she gains 1/2/3 bonus Magic Resist for 3.5 seconds. This effect may stack up to 10 times, and refreshes upon stacking. Additionally, bolts caught by Ceilidh now damage nearby foes, dealing 7.5-135 (+0.62 AP) Magic damage to hostiles within 150 units.

ACTIVE

|Mana Cost------------------------|Cooldown-------------------------------| |- |100|120 /90 /60 |Cast Range-----------------------|Impact Zone Size------------------ |575|300

Ceilidh marks an enemy champion as her dance partner, causing a flower icon with 7 distinct petals to bloom above the heads of both she and her target. Every second, a petal will fall from both flowers until one (or both) have no petals remaining. When either partner successfully attacks or lands an ability on your the other, they will steal 1 of the target's petals and add it to their own flower. Petals may only be stolen in this way if the attacker is missing one or more petals (the cap is 7!!) The first partner to exhaust all 7 petals (or die) will be struck by a devastating blast of lightning that instantly deals 180/320/460 (+1.0 AP) magic damage to the target and any of the target's allies within the impact zone.

Should Ceilidh win the Duet - either through superior petal acquisition OR killing her opponent - she will be struck by two sequential bolts of lightning. These bolts will deal no damage, but still provide the relevant passive benefits.

  • If both partners exhaust their petals simultaneously, then both will be struck by the blast at the end of the duration, damaging both targets and any of their allies within the blast radius. Ceilidh can not catch this blast.
  • Multiple ticks or hits with the same ability do not restore additional petals. Only 1 petal per ability cast!
  • Lightning caught by Ceilidh that successfully damages her duet partner within the AoE will steal a petal as though it were an ability cast.

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Ceilidh is a broken shell of a human being. Putting on a strong front, her self-esteem and emotional maturity have more or less been stunted since the destruction of her village. She seems cold, detached, nostalgic and, at times, poetic. Ceilidh sees her life as a story of redemption. But, at the same time, she never truly felt invested in it. Were it not for Leblanc and the new purpose Ceilidh was given at her hands, there would be nothing to tie her to the world at all. Indeed, in the wake of (the former) Leblanc's death, Ceilidh found her future uncertain. Only upon being denied her vengeance, did ambition begin to fester in the Crimson Dancer. Viewing her allies in disdain; former enemies in ambivalence; Ceilidh wonders if the path she travels is correct. She has more value than a soldier. More value than a tool.

... And certainly more value than Leblanc's current successor...

QUOTE UPON CHAMPION SELECT http://i1317.photobucket.com/albums/t627/AllottedTimeframe/70669aa5-03a7-4b1b-9e8e-8bf46a241b8f_zpscq5cqrrt.jpg

  • A rose by any other name... would be just as deadly.

UPON STARTING A GAME

  • "For Noxus, I suppose."

  • "Do you hear it? Like drums... on the horizon."

  • If Leblanc is on Ceilidh's team: "Matron... It's an honour. Are you much of a dancer? ... I could show you how..."

  • If Vladimir is on Ceilidh's team: "Crimson Red seems more fitting a colour than black, when it comes to roses, Vladimir... "

  • "If Elise is on Ceilidh's team: "Your allies seek immortality, Priestess. Once they have it, how much longer will they need to tolerate you?"

  • If Swain is on Ceilidh's team: "There is a reason you left their fold, Swain. It will only be so long before their ambitions conflict with your own."

ATTACKING

  • "I am more than a soldier! I am bride to the elements. ...And there is no reel... before a lightning strike."
  • "You've gravely mistaken my grace for weakness."
  • "Nothing, but the dance..."
  • "Their gapes shift. Awe... and terror."
  • "Another scar, set to my fingertips... I cannot even feel it anymore..."
  • "They are so rarely prepared for the carnage I wreak."
  • "The heavens are unable to comprehend mercy. Brace yourself - you will not be granted a swift death."

WHILE MOVING

  • "The air is tense, here..."
  • (Ceilidh suppresses a weak whimper) "... Hmph. No time for regret."
  • "I barely hear the battlefield, for the constant ringing in my ears."
  • "And so the miles turn to metres."
  • "They urge me to glide."
  • "Our formation is a joke."
  • "I am unassuming. They, unprepared."

WHEN LIGHTNING STRIKES NEARBY WHILE CEILIDH IS DANCING

  • "Not yet! We cannot complete the dance just yet..."
  • "I hear you! Stay calm!"
  • "His rage must be focused. I must direct it."
  • "Hmph. I missed him."
  • "... I suppose that collateral damage comes with the territory."
  • "I can refine this. Let's try one more time."

WHEN LIGHTNING BOLTS STRIKE AN ENEMY

  • "It seems deft reflex was not a part of your training regiment."
  • "The smell wouldn't be so unsettling, were it not so appetising."
  • "Did I not tell you? It's quite dangerous to end the dance halfway through."
  • "Struck by a stray bullet. Pathetic."
  • "Each step I take, weighed upon the charred corpse of an adversary."

WHEN CEILIDH CATCHES A LIGHTNING BOLT

  • "EEEYAGH!!"
  • "It hurts!"
  • "Damn it!"
  • "Grr..."
  • "Face me!"
  • "Kch... Got you!"
  • (Breathes heavily) "This power... is mine!"
  • "Nnng... Every time..."
  • "AGH!... Alright... now where to throw you..?"
  • "NO!" (heavy panting) "... Haha... Now you're in trouble."

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When I first dreamt about this character about a week ago, the Ceilidh that I saw wasn't called Ceilidh. In fact, she didn't have a name at all. The segment of the dream wasn't long - just 30 or so seconds of dancing as lightning tore into a mountainside and silhouetted her frame. When I woke up, I couldn't get the scene out of my head. I soon made to tell my brother about the dream, but when I tried, I couldn't put the scene into words. After all, what exposition/explanation is there, in "A blonde-haired girl dancing under lightning"?

That didn't do the scene justice - and I didn't want to forget it. So I wrote it down. As I wrote, I found myself writing from the perspective of the dancer. Over time, it turned into a story. Then multiple stories. Anger, loss, romance - fleeting shifts from emotion to emotion; step by step; moment to moment - just like in a dance!

I'm far from the most concise when it comes to putting words to my thoughts, but - all the same - I really enjoyed trying to, with Ceilidh; and I sincerely and genuinely hope someone derived even an iota of satisfaction from the attempt.

I tend to make champion concepts as an outlet whenever I'm passively inspired. So if you enjoyed this one, then I encourage you to check out a couple of my others. Most concepts link to an older one, and you can really see the evolution of my style over time! :P

The obligatory: Thanks to any and everybody who read this far. Don't hesitate to leave any feedback, opinions or suggestions down, below. I'd love to hear them! Even the really vicious ones. No - especially the vicious ones!

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36 Comments

David Haller2/22/2016, 3:18:49 PM2 votes

You lost me at "Ceilidh (pronounced kay-lee)."

Candurill2/22/2016, 3:45:05 PM2 votes

You again with your huge lore for which my knowledge of the English language isn't even remotely enough... No seriously, I cannot even determine if its good writing because i don't understand half of what you write...i like usually have a visual of whats happening when i read a story...but I simply see letters when i'm reading this...And please don't take this as bad comments on your writing skills....because it could just as well be my lack of language skills/longer attention span

I DID read the TL'DR version. That was understandable. Good call.

As for the abilities...I'm really getting the feeling that you have this amazing vision of her in your mind, bursting to the rim with ideas and fantasy...and try to put it on paper...but somewhere between those two stages, something goes wrong...I see 4 awesome abilities and an equally awesome passive...but i don't see one coherent and clear champion....the whole kit screams artistic and poetic skill, but not a realistically playable champion..... Additionally, I saw in the short lore that she has "Absorbed" all elements...yet the only elements i see are lightning, wind, night (for some reason) and more lightning...

To be honest...i don't really know what I have to say about this...it looks amazingly worked out and of great quality, yet what i actually read either does not come over to me or does not really make sense to me game wise...

Now as a disclaimer...this is my personal opinion...and i really wish that you take my feedback, do something with it, but not completely override your won idea...the most important thing is that YOU are happy with what you made and that YOU understand it. Also please never stop making concepts, cus they are just amazing to look at :D

jmaishere2/22/2016, 4:48:21 PM2 votes

This is good, but the ult is too feast or famine I think, it has the potential to instantly kill yourself in a team fight. and your own team as well if you end up marking and adc or someone who can cast very quickly.

LeifTheExplorer2/23/2016, 3:25:58 AM1 votes

I really like this champ idea! The lore and art are amazing! However, I have a few questions concerning the kit.

Passive:

  • So, it's really confusing how you worded it, but I gathered this. Basically after using an ability, you begin to dance. Lightning will fall at a predetermined place, and if you go to the predetermined place, you will pick up a buff, empowering your next autoattack/ability while giving you bonus movement speed. You can hold up to two charges of this buff. Enemy units that stand on the predetermined place when lightning strikes take damage. Amirite?

  • Remove the self damage upon receiving the buff. It's already got a HUGE skillcap, no need to make it more difficult.

Overall, I think it's a cool mix of Bard/Fiora/Quinn passives?

Q:

  • Basically a lightning bolt AoE that you can cast twice if you hit yourself or an enemy unit. I think it's a cool ability. Great poke.

W:

  • A sortof Graves's smoke cloud that grants sight of you but nothing else plus damage debuffs? I could see this being used in 1v1's alot in lane.

  • How long will the ability last before automatically ending? Please include that, as it helps determine how useful at zoning it is.

E:

  • So the passive basically increases your movement speed while dancing based on how much you moved since you last danced. Nice synergy.

  • The active is an AoE that increases in range the more your damaged. (I could totally see people building full tank on Ceilidh, maxing this, and owning teamfights kek)

R:

  • Very risky, very high reward. I like the gamble aspect of this move, I would nerf the self damage though. Imagine going against full AS KogMaw or Ryze .

Overall Summary:

  • There are so many new and unique aspects to this kit, and I love the theme. However, I would include a discussion section that breaks down the abilities and draws some analogies to pre-existing ones. (I do something very similar in my champion concept post.) There is alot of text in this post, and it discourages people from reading everything.

  • Love the art. Keep it up!

  • Keep this entire thing up! I love it!

BTW, could you please check out my champion idea? I've been working on it for a while, and I'd enjoy some of your critique. I also have some expanded lore, and I'd like you to check it out! Nefalz, The Herald of Silence

And I know I'm asking a lot, but It would make my week if you posted some art of what you think my champion looks like.

Thanks so much, and continue the good work!

Bârd2/23/2016, 4:04:18 AM1 votes

E radius too low.

Ult has too much potential to go wrong, even with good intentions; cancel one auto and you could end up taking your own carry to half HP. Because her autoattack animation is likely not instant, and she won't be building much attack speed as a tank/support, it will be difficult for her to match the likes of a carry type champion if she dances with them.

TheTarians2/23/2016, 8:05:22 PM1 votes

That ult, makes me wonder what would happen if you used it on a ryze.

JustMomentai2/22/2016, 3:11:47 PM1 votes

This is surprisingly well made.

The Anagram King3/25/2016, 8:46:34 AM1 votes

Entered into the February/March CCOS. Bumping this up one time for possible feedback.

OmniOmega2/22/2016, 6:10:58 PM1 votes

TL;DR: at bottom

The "created to dance" identity is currently filled by Orianna. I'm not sure if there's room for another champion who focuses on dance to such an extent. League has a couple of music focused champions, but they don't step on each other's toes as Sona's primary focus is music while Bard's primary focus is wandering.

I understand you designed Ceilidh as a control mage but her abilities don't really convey that. Self damage for bonuses (Olaf, Dr. Mundo). AoE DoT ability centered around self (Sejuani, Shyvana, Amumu, Dr. Mundo). Damage reduction (Maokai, Alistar). Bonuses based on her bonus armor and magic resist. An ult that encourages enemies to hit them and takes a fair amount of time to proc. If you took away the numbers I would have thought this kit belonged to a tank. Reworking the kit to be tank focused rather than mage focused might be worth considering.

I'm assuming the passive calculates location similarly to Zac's blobs which give preference to locations between the champion and nearby enemies. Will PPIs be visually different than Q strike zones? To my understanding enemies don't take damage from PPIs but do take damage from Q.

Ceilidh's W doesn't thematically fit the rest of her kit. Mechanically I think it's fine, but in my mind midnight and lightning are tenuously connected at best. Perhaps change the description to be that she blinds her opponents with a lightning strike and they maintain vision of her because they can feel the power (static electricity) coming off of her or she's as bright/brighter than her lightning bolts.

Ceilidh's ultimate takes a long time to proc. She only gets 1 proc off of E since the ult specifies that it doesn't proc multiple times off of DoT abilities. She can get 2 procs from Q and 1 proc from W in a reasonable amount of time (a total of 4 procs from abilities). Adding in autoattacks and the proc per second, you're looking at about 4 seconds before she can trigger her ult if she lands all her abilities and gets autoattacks in which is a really long time for a mage to be in autoattack range of an enemy carry. She will lose this battle to almost every ADC once they get a couple of AS items. Most mages and assassins have the burst to delete her before her ult even triggers. This encourages her to use her ultimate on tanks (which isn't particularly helpful). Or hit and run, dropping her ult on a target that she can tag with an ability and then run away from, relying on the passive proc per second to trigger the damage (at which point you may as well have run an assassin or burst mage).

TL;DR: In short, the kit has some really neat ideas in it (self damage for bonus effects, catching lightning bolts, a lot of zone control) but it isn't exactly cohesive. Most of the kit identifies closer to a tank or an AP bruiser and the ultimate sounds pretty clunky in its execution. I would recommend that you consider removing dance from her identity and focus more on the fact that she TRAPPED A LIGHTNING ELEMENTAL IN HER BODY. Holy cow is that badass. I'd also recommend reworking the ultimate to have more utility and control than damage (once again, more in line with a tanky champion than a bursty one).

ShatteredSkys2/22/2016, 6:21:29 PM1 votes

Hey! ^_^ First of all great concept! I've seen a bunch of nice concepts this month and this is up there among the best! But enough of my flattery, you want savage? I'll give you savage! Here are my thoughts on Ceilidh, The Dancing Penance(Or Forfeit to the Elements?)!

Lore: It's a nice piece of lore but it's..... a bit much and well doesn't tell me much about the current Ceilidh. -My first issue with your lore is that it's really long and honestly a bit tough to read. While I've got nothing against a long lore it turns off a lot of people, also the best lores are those which are short but compact with detail. Take a look at Fiora's or Gangplank's lore, the story section. Both are relatively short yet they tell you a ton about both characters. GP's shows how he tries to constantly act tough to control his crew no matter the situation while Fiora's shows how she handles her family's honor. Both of these lores are short but they clearly paint the kind of character these two are. Honestly you could this lore a LOT shorter, there are a few bits that aren't really needed or could be shortened.

-Another issue is that well this doesn't tell me anything about the current Ceilidh. This story tells me how Ceilidh was as a child, before the Noxian invasion and before her battles with Irelia. You mention in tldr version that these events are now long gone and Ceilidth is trying to focus on her dance again. So how's she like now? Does she still resent Ionia? Is she stable? Is she trying to get revenge? What is she like because I have absolutely no idea, the lore is great at telling me about her as a child but as an adult/teen I have no idea.

-Kind of a lesser concern but in my experience mentioning other champions in lore tends to hurt the story overall. I tried doing something similar with a concept I made a while back; I had Poppy help talk my character out of his depression and set him on the path of heroes but honestly looking back it really hurt my narrative. It was honestly fairly deus ex machinna(however you spell it) and it came out of no where, it was just a really random event in my story. Another problem with adding other champions to lore is that it's really hard for us to understand their personality(Though honestly she doesn't really have that much personality.......). Like how do you know this is how Irelia would've responded in this situation? If in someone else opinion you mess up it really hurts the feeling that your lore fits in with the rest of LoL.

Thematic: When I read this concept "blonde girl dancing under lightning" is not my first impression, I think blonde girl throwing around lightning and zapping people but not dancing. I don't see anything really related to dancing in her kit, most of her damage is coming from blasting people with lightning and zapping them with her aura but is that dancing? But then again these kind of things are REALLY hard to implement sometimes... I recently tried to do a concept on a feral child and the one comment I got again and again was that he didn't feel savage enough, but I couldn't figure out what would make him feel like a savage beast. Sometimes these things are hard to implement but no offense I think you could do a little better.

Overall Kit: I personally don't like looking at individual abilities, most of the time they're fine or need some minor tuning but i'd talk about how overall all the pieces of the kit come together, to me that is more important. That the kit all work toward some central idea/theme, do you believe Ceilidth conveys this? To me Ceilidith feels a bit split: i had a hard time how her W fit in with the rest of her kit, the q is a tad weird for me too , but I like how the E , R and passive sort of work together. But perhaps I'm just babbling nonsense, maybe your kit flows together incredibly well. If you feel so tell me how, how do you feel Ceilidith's kit flows together?

Overall I think you have a nice concept, I do believe your lore would be better if you told about the current Celidith not the past and i do think your kit overall could use a bit of work but isn't bad either. i do believe you have a really nice concept, I can't wait to see what you make of it! ^_^