Sweet new Champion idea: Tytus: Champion of the People

TheFirstLego·5/14/2015, 7:58:50 PM·2 votes·1,244 views

Hey guys, just thought you might want to check this idea out, I have thought long and hard about this, seeing as how im getting a grade on this, and wondered what you might think. Read his backstory and tell me your thoughts please! :D

When Tytus appeared at the Institute demanding a place in its ranks, they asked him what he fought for, and why he had come here, he said that it would be a long story and to find him a comfortable place to sit. So they sat and thusly he told his story.

"One morning my mother woke me, screaming at me to run. I lived on a farm, and we were far from any civilization. I was young enough that I hadn't really left before. As i woke that morning, i asked her what was wrong. She said bandits had come and were attacking our farm. As i came out out backdoor, one of them ran up about to strike with fatal intent.

But that was when the oddest thing happened. A dragon, one that i know now to have been outcast by the rest of his kind. I was quite scared, its not everyday a fully grown dragon swoops down and starts killing things in front of you. But for all that, i noticed it never attacked out house, or my mother, the bandits had already "disposed"of my father. After the chaos was over, the dragon, who was unusually kind for being a dragon, asked if we were alright. Of course, the woman my mother is, she said we were find and coarsely asked him to leave. "I am not one to help people and have nothing as payment human." he said to her. "I have nothing for you, we keep to ourselves mostly and have nothing of value."my mother told him. so in short he said he would take me and train me to be a great warrior and in return i would be his attempt to build a bridge between humans and dragons. For his redemption. So i trained, for what seemed like forever, mach battling him, and training, getting bigger ,faster, stronger.

He once told me that dragons despise humans so much because they are weak. Because they lack the drive to be as strong as other races. He said "Their fear is what was the most despicable thing about humans to most dragons. So i plan to use your fear against them." This in all honesty scared the void out of me. Because he meant to make me fight one of them. Eventually i fought one of them. And i wound up the victor, and mortally wounded. As i lay surrounded by my mentor and a few other dragons, they were impressed, because he had raised a human to single handedly fight one of their own kind, but because i was mortal wounded it meant nothing. And because of this, they were royally irked that he had killed even a lower member of their race.

Suddenly the dying dragons' body started rapidly disappearing, and by the time it was done, there were these swords lying in its place. The dragons spirit respected my fighting in the face of adversity, and wished to fight by my side as to protect its honor. The blades rapidly healed my as i sat up astonished.The elders saw this and thought oddly of it, seeing as how i had spoken words to my enemy during my whole fight, they had thought nothing of it because they heard none of it.

But, the whole fight, as i fought, I told the dragon my story, and how i wished only to protect everything worth protecting. And as i did this, he only continued to try harder, because to best me, would mean besting an honorable opponent, no matter how much of a lesser species. So even as we fought i knew losing would be my death, so I fought harder, for who would protect the people from these fearsome beasts? Yes there were some to have slain them, but who knew them as i had, and who could teach others as i had been taught? So i fought for my life, and for all the lives of the people i was trained to bring closer to dragon-kind. For even as i knew these dragons to be honorable, there are some much darker creatures than them.

So i now had these beautiful twin dragon blades imbued with fire and regenerative properties, and as i had restored honor to my teacher, he let me leave him. "Leave, i have nothing left to teach you, and you might make a good snack if you upset me." he told me. So i left and here i am, because even with my limited human interaction, the places I've been since leaving, everyone i befriended told me to come here. Where i could hone my skills in case they were needed."

Stats:

Health: 573 (+92 /lvl) Hp regen: 7.24 (+0.67 /lvl) Mana: 436 (+32.75 /lvl) Mana regen: 6.85 (+.45 /lvl) AD: 58.4 (+3.4 /lvl) Attack speed: .634 (+2.8% /lvl) Armor: 28 (+3.2 /lvl) Magic Resist: 33.2 (+1.15 /lvl) Move speed: 340 Range: 150

Her are some ideas for abilities

Passive: The spirit of the dragon watches over Tytus, he has 10% tenacity.

(Q) Tytus charges for half a second, then heals for 5(at level 1) to 25(at level 5)% of his missing hp and lunges dealing dmg to whatever he hits.

(W) Tytus gains 1% life-steal for each time he is hit maxing at 3% lvl 1 and 15% lvl 5

(E) The Dragon Spirit in Tytus's sword bellows out, stunning enemy champions in a cone for 1 seconds think Darius pull in terms of range

(R)Tytus's swords become empowered, catching on fire dealing bonus magic damage over time and giving him 10% life-steal.

12 Comments

Mister Beane5/14/2015, 8:03:19 PM3 votes

Dear Legolas,

There is only one champion of the people. Allow me to introduce you to "The people's champ" known as Dwayne "The Rock" Johnson! http://www.wwe.com/f/styles/superstar_profile/public/talent/profile/2012/02/therock_1_full.png Best regards, Mr. Beane.

SpectralWraithX5/15/2015, 1:08:33 PM1 votes

Hmmm, lore seems ok but it probably would have been a better idea to flesh out the abilities before posting it. At least, if you want people to take your concept seriously. Quite a few contextual mistakes that could use fixing.

You had the dragon that saved him say "and have nothing as payment human." After which you then had the mother say "I have nothing for you, we keep to ourselves mostly and have nothing of value." The mother's statement is fine but the dragon's statement needs to be changed for him demanding payment. Otherwise it doesn't make sense.

"The blades rapidly healed my as i sat up astonished." Insert the word wounds between my and as.

I won't go over every single spelling mistake.

The question comes to my mind, when he's that child why does he accept the dragon's way of thinking? The dragon is uprooting him from his home and taking him from his mother. I dunno about you but I wouldn't be feeling very cooperative in that situation. So, what makes your character want to become this bridge between humans and dragons? Also, the ending of your lore makes no sense. You've stated that his master wants him to become a bridge between humans and dragons. He wouldn't just say to him to leave after having bested a dragon. That would mean his sole purpose was to raise a human with the capacity to defeat a dragon. A bit contradictory there.

Simply put, a good effort but needed a little bit more thought put into it.