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[Champion Concept] Beruka the Dark Maid

Remurin·6/24/2016, 9:00:07 PM·3 votes·1,114 views

**To start off, Hello everyone who is actually reading this. I really appreciate that. Please comment if you got any suggestions or if you want to critisize me or the concept. ** Also, I am not that creative with names so I'll call her, the Champion, mostly what she actually is the concept.

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This concept is revolves around a young Maid called Beruka which works for a powerfull Wizard, a master of black magic. She secretly reads the books of her Master. Over the years, she learned powerfull techniques to aid her in battle. Many Knights wanted to hurt the powerfull Wizard. Usually they won't stand a problem.

But one day, a powerfull Demacian Commander and a troop of Soilders showed up infront of the Wizard's mansion. They knew where they were going into, relying on his own skill was the demise of many people attacking the Wizard. After a fierce fight with Shadowy Guards they managed to get into the Mansion, an effort nobody else managed before.

The Wizard was shocked. The young Maid, trying to impress her Master pulled out her Daggers and ran down a huge corridor. Room by room the troop got closer to the big hall the Master was currently in. He couldn't possibly face that many at the same time.

The Demacian soilders checked all the rooms they passed by. After just a few minutes, they entered a huge corridor. it was empty and only few doors were connected to it. "So this is where you are hiding, Wizard." said the Demacian Commander.

Just before they were about to open the doors to the big hall it suddenly it got dark in the whole place. A menacing laugh echoed through the corridor. "Be carefull, I heard something moving towards us." said the Demacian Commander.

Suddenly, men started to collapse. Shouts of pain echoed all through the corridor. Its total darkness. They can't tell what is happening around them. One after another the men started to collapse. After a few seconds, it began to become silent.

The Demacian Commander cursed. "Shit." he shouted. He knew what was going to happen. The lights turned back on. The floor was covered in blood, his men lying dead on the floor. He turned his head up, looking at the end of the floor.

He was shocked to see that this event that has just occurred was not done by the Wizard. At the end of the corridor, the young maid was facing the wall with a dagger in her hand, all covered in blood. He laughed. "Defeated by a Maid, huh?". The young Maid looked over her shoulders at the Commander. Blood began spilling out of his throat and eventually made him kneel. With his weakend voice he whispers "Sorry my king, I am not worthy." The Demacian Commander took his sword thrusted it trough his chest.

The Wizard entered the corridor. He shivered in fear and looked at the young Maid. Beruka said to the Wizard: "Sorry my master, I'm going to clean this mess up. Please forgive that I caused so much filth."

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Beruka is a short ranged Champion capable of immense magic power and is able to deal both physical and magical damage. Her Kit is about hunting down a target using her deadly techniques and her doppelganger.

With her basic Abilitys she is going to succeed poking down her enemys who are trying to get close to her. She has immense engage potential against a single target. She does have high damage potential but struggles with poke and Champions getting too close to her.

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Health ------------------- 540 (+78 per level) Attack Damage---- 54 (+3.1) Health Regen ------- 7.5 (+0.7) Attack Speed-------- 0.658 (+3%) Resource -------------- Mana Armor --------------------- 26 (+3.9) Magic Res. ------------ 30 Range --------------------- 475 (Ranged) **Mov. Speed **---------- 335

  • Base stats are at “Level 01
  • Values in parenthesis are gains per level
  • I am not including any Mana values or regeneration rates in this concept

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**Passive - Doppelganger **

Beruka is accompanied by an untargetable and invulnerable Shadowy version of herself. Her shadowy version can be moved around freely in a 750 range Radius. The Shadowy version casts the same abilitys like** Beruka**. Her Shadowy version becomes targetable and vulnerable during abilitys casts. It can not regeneratle health or be healed by any normal means.

If her Doppelganger is defeated, this ability is not in effect for 25 Second cooldown until the Doppelganger reappears.

  • Her gameplay is revolving around this Passive. It should grant a huge window of opportunity if her** Doppelganger** is defeated.
  • Her Doppelganger has some special perks.
  • Her Doppelganger's health is calculated as such: young maids health + 20-50% of her Health on level 1/6/11/16.
  • Can move over terrain If at** max leash range of 750** and during her W - Substitute but she can't recast her W ability if it is still inside of terrain.
  • On level up, the** Doppelganger regenerates 50% of its missing health**.
  • Has always 20 more Base movementspeed than the** young Maid** and only benefits of Movementspeed granted by Boots.

**Q - Kulbeda ** ---------------------Ability cooldown: 14/13/12/11/10 seconds.

Beruka and her** Doppelganger** each throw 3 throwing knives in a targeted direction. Each knive deals 5/15/35/55/70 (+ 40% Bonus AD)(+ 15% Ability Power) Magical Damage and slows the target >for 20/20/25/25/30% for 2,5 seconds. The slow does not stack but refreshes the duration. Once the first knive is thrown, Beruka can change the direction of the following throwing knives slightly.

  • During each cast she can adjust her direction up to 30° depending where the cursor is at.

  • Doppelganger will always cast the ability to the same point where the young maid is aiming at.

  • Doppelganger becomes vulnerable during the cast.

  • The young Maid cancels the ability if E- Heartseeker is cast.

W - Substitute ---------------------Ability cooldown: 23/22/20/19/18 seconds.

After 1 second, Beruka becomes a shadow and she and herDoppelganger go invisible for up to 3 seconds. During the invisibility part, her Doppelganger is not affected by its leash range and she can reactivate the ability once to swap positions with her Doppelganger. Once the invisibility ended, her Doppelganger mimics Beruka's appearance and becomes vulnerable for 5 Seconds

  • Once **Beruka **attacks an enemy, she becomes revealed and you loose the ability to reactivate the ability and puts the ability is put on Cooldown early.

  • Switching positions while being revealed by true vision is visible for the enemy team.

  • If the Doppelganger is outside the 750 Leash range after 5 seconds, teleports itself to said max range closest to actual position.

E - Heartseeker ---------------------Ability cooldown: 16/15/14/13/12 seconds.

Beruka and her Doppelganger both dash into a targeted direction, damaging all enemys hit on their for **50/80/110/140/170+(80% Bonus AD)(60% Abilitypower) magic damage ** and slows them for 40% for 2 >Seconds.

If a target is hit twice, the damage of the second it is reduced by 50%. The slow does not stack, however a second hit refreshes its duration.

  • The Doppelganger will always respect the maximum dash range and can leave the maximum leash range for 5 seconds.

  • If the Shadow version is outside the 750 Leash range after 5 seconds, teleports itself to said max range closest to actual position.

  • Beruka can not tresspass terrain with this ability.

R - Where darkness lies ---------------------Ability cooldown: 180/140/100seconds.

Beruka ** becomes shadowy and creates a huge Shadow area around her Doppelganger (500/700/900 Radius(1000/1400/1800 total)) for 6 Seconds. ** During the duration, her Doppelganger dissapears. Beruka gains 20% movementspeed inside of the area and her abilitys have a significantly lower cooldown and some change while inside the area. The Enemy looses ally-vision and their vision range is signficantly decreased.

Q - Kulbeda: Ability cooldowng gets reduced to 5 seconds and fire twice as fast. W - Substitute turns into W- Lurker: You can cast this ability once to teleport to a targeted location within the >Shadow area after a short delay of 1 second. ** E - Heartseeker: Ability cooldown gets reduced to 2 seconds and the young Maid dashes twice as fast. **

  • You can move and use Auto attacks during the cast of W but are unable to cast other abilitys during that time.
  • Behaves similarly to Graves W- Smokescreen but in an bigger Area the vision radius is also a a big larger than that.
  • Her ally vision is not affected by the Shadow area.
  • Her E should feel really spammy and be really deadly if hit multiple times.

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  • This concept originally had a second controllable Unit which you could switch between freely . Just like SSMB Ice climbers, but with the ability to switch.
  • Later on, it changed to Twins working together.
  • Her doppelganger resembles actually her twin sister summoned by the black magic.
  • She is also a Maid.
  • They have a really good connection to each other but she does not know that Beruka is capable of using Black Magic.
  • I use the term "Black magic" because Vayne smells it and it was kind off fitting.
  • I think she has way too much survivability so I had to put down her Base damages by a lot to get "Balanced" even though this is not even required in here. Just did it for the lols.
  • I spend too long on formatting this concept. summoner 3

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Question: How was the maid that only read some of the wizard's books be able to fight all the soldiers at once, while the "powerful" wizard was not?

She used to fight with daggers all the time as an assasin and inhabits a huge amount of magical power. She used her techniques and enhanced them with the Black Magics.

She also did not just read a few books, she read them all day for years if she had no labour to do. I didn't really specify that.

The Wizard however could only use his spells. He is really old and cant really more as fast as a Soilder can. He would probably be able to kill most of them. I dont know if you got the reference to the Demacian Commander. He could sustain most of her magic and only died because of her Physical attack on his throat. (He commited suicide at the end.)

He would probably have managed to kill the Wizard but in turn loosing all his soilders. Obviously the Wizard would not have backed out of the fight and would battle till the end, its just that Beruka wanted to impress her Master. He never did such bloodbath and was honestly suprised by her powers, since he only knew that she used to be an "low" assasin.

Yeah it does, it's not that her magical ability is that strong, it's the fact that she combined both her physical, and magical abilities to be able to fight like that. Right?

Yes, combining the two made her really deadly.

Without using both at the same time, she would not have been able to pull that what she did off.

Any specific reason you opted her to be hybrid with dual scaling on her damaging abilities?

Heatseeker does a loooot of damage o.o AND can hit multiple peoples AND is a gap closer ^^;

It looks like she's meant to start with a very small mana pool with medium-high spell costs to balance that damage and punish missed Qs

Since I already stated, I leave the mana cost up just right now, but I think a mana hungry monster like Fizz would be a great idea.

Yes actually. If you get close to her, she should be able to punish them in AA range (which is not that far, Janna range) if they are not enganging on her. And even tho you dont built AP, you can still use your abilitys without feeling bad. And for building AP, your base AD is not affecting your Damage.

Oh her E.... I was carefull putting higher cooldowns on her abilitys for this cause. Her ult is probably way too strong because she can cast that e 3 times.

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I really hoped you enjoyed that Champion concept I did. I submitted a similar concept many years ago, but it wasnt as well written as this concept is. I also did not like some abilitys from it so I reworked this Idea a lot.

If the concept is liked by people I might do a couple of drawings for this concept.

I wanted to write down that Concept for a long time now and after a discussion in the Surrender@20 comment section, I finally decided to write it down for good.

If you got any questions, found any mistakes or just want to leave your opinion, !!! please !!! post it down in the comments bellow. **:) **

10 Comments

Remurin6/24/2016, 10:13:31 PM1 votes

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Question: How was the maid that only read some of the wizard's books be able to fight all the soldiers at once, while the "powerful" wizard was not?

She used to fight with daggers all the time as an assasin and inhabits a huge amount of magical power. She used her techniques and enhanced them with the Black Magics.

She also did not just read a few books, she read them all day for years if she had no labour to do. I didn't really specify that.

The Wizard however could only use his spells. He is really old and cant really more as fast as a Soilder can. He would probably be able to kill most of them. I dont know if you got the reference to the Demacian Commander. He could sustain most of her magic and only died because of her Physical attack on his throat. (He commited suicide at the end.)

He would probably have managed to kill the Wizard but in turn loosing all his soilders. Obviously the Wizard would not have backed out of the fight and would battle till the end, its just that Beruka wanted to impress her Master. He never did such bloodbath and was honestly suprised by her powers, since he only knew that she used to be an "low" assasin.

Yeah it does, it's not that her magical ability is that strong, it's the fact that she combined both her physical, and magical abilities to be able to fight like that. Right?

Yes, combining the two made her really deadly.

Without using both at the same time, she would not have been able to pull that what she did off.

Any specific reason you opted her to be hybrid with dual scaling on her damaging abilities?

Heatseeker does a loooot of damage o.o AND can hit multiple peoples AND is a gap closer ^^;

It looks like she's meant to start with a very small mana pool with medium-high spell costs to balance that damage and punish missed Qs

Since I already stated, I leave the mana cost up just right now, but I think a mana hungry monster like Fizz would be a great idea.

Yes actually. If you get close to her, she should be able to punish them in AA range (which is not that far, Janna range) if they are not enganging on her. And even tho you dont built AP, you can still use your abilitys without feeling bad. And for building AP, your base AD is not affecting your Damage.

Oh her E.... I was carefull putting higher cooldowns on her abilitys for this cause. Her ult is probably way too strong because she can cast that e 3 times.

CobaltTheMadMage6/24/2016, 11:21:52 PM1 votes

This seems like a cross between Zed, Ekko, and Nocturne at first glance.

Honestly, the fact that a wizard's maid whose only magical expertise came from reading her master's books whenever she wasn't cleaning his massive mansion by herself or sleeping (which probably wouldn't leave a lot of time anyway, as someone who once worked interiors may tell you) being able to take on an entire Demacian platoon herself while her Wizard master, who was evidently powerful enough and dangerous enough to warrant sending a Demacian platoon to retrieve his head, did nothing, just seems a bit of a stretch, even within the crazy world of League of Legends.

Honestly I could believe it more if she were able to quietly take down each soldier one-by-one as they split up to search the house, using her own knowledge of the building's layout and the fact that Demacians wouldn't threaten the innocent cleaning staff to her advantage. The last thing going through each soldier's mind before the lights went out and never came back would be something along the lines of "Another maid? Hold on a second, she looks famili-".

Eventually of course the Demacian captain would reach the wizard's chamber, and try to rally his troops in preparation for the final showdown. No response, heck, no sound whatsoever. This puts the Captain on edge and alerts him that something is very wrong, so when the lowly made wanders by, hiding a knife in her uniform, the Captain is ready for it. The Captain proves too much for the dark maid, and though he refuses to kill her, he does break down the doors to the Master's chamber... only to find it empty, as the wizard had fled the mansion and abandoned her to the Demacians without her knowledge. The maid is heartbroken by this betrayal, but the Captain is surprisingly forgiving, as she was only doing her job and protecting her liege. That said, she was responsible for the deaths of all his unit, so he has her sent to the League of Legends to atone for their deaths and put those skills of hers to good use.

jr deputy meow6/25/2016, 8:24:31 AM1 votes

nice leblanc rework you have here : ^ ) no but in all seriousness i really like the doppelganger mechanic - however i feel it needs a different E. i feel that judging by the Q and W, this champion wants to dash /away/ from trouble, not towards it. Additionally, Q cooldown is too high at all ranks - perhaps make it scale from 8 to 6, or something like that.

I don't like the ultimate. The doppelganger mechanic is very cool, and i want something that reinforces that instead of suddenly making it disappear.

I don't think the doppelganger should have more health than Beruka. I think that it should be able to auto attack (to aid in csing), and become targetable for a short time during and AFTER it attacks or uses an ability, rather than just during. I think it should have a passive regen mechanic if not hit for a while, and take significantly more damage than Beruka at earlier levels especially.

Someone else already stated that the Q feels somewhat similar to Zed's. for the record, i think the Q is more or less fine, but turning it in to a beam or arcane missile barrage that functions similarly or identically to the current Q would at least give it a stylistic and visual departure from zed.

Think of an E and ultimate that double down on the positioning component of the rest of her kit without functioning too similarly utility-wise to existing abilities in her kit or on other champions. The fact that the clone can move around and auto attack is a very valuable point of difference from zed, and the fact that it can cast abilities is a point of difference from shaco. So think of a way to double down on that.

I didn't read the lore, nor am i going to. That doesn't interest me.

Anyways, i like the mechanic the kit is built around and look forward to seeing the next iteration of the kit.

Friendly Ram6/25/2016, 12:59:50 PM1 votes

First what do you mean by boots in the passive? She seems like lots of fun but I'm confused by the hybrid scaling on her abilities.