Idea of champion: Siram the deceptive eye

VitVito·3/9/2016, 9:21:11 PM·1 votes·654 views

Siram was a Young wandering man in the shurima desert in search of food and gold since his childhood. he was banished from his native city by his parents, because Villagers had enough to rip fair or fly so they forced her parents to banish him for ever. when he found the league he believed that it was his chance to prove the useful of his power.

passive: Sarim gain 15 movement speed for each enemy in a little area ( the clone win also movement speed)

Q spell:2 clone of himself appear beside him and he can teleport in one of them without the enemy see him and if the enemy does dammage to the wrong clone the clone will come to the ennemy and explode on him dealing increase dammage by level, the number of clone is increase by one by level

w: Sarim launch a ball in the air and all the enemy closer to the ball are forced to be motionless and Watch the ball

E: Sarim does an hologram him and he force the hologram to go in one direction and if someone is closer to the clone sarim can teleport to his clone and his old body will explode

r: sarim dance on place and become invisible for 5 second and his next auto-attack will apply a slow on the ennemy touched

5 Comments

Arakadia3/11/2016, 4:47:48 AM1 votes

Im not sure if English is your first language, but if it is you need to take some time and check your grammar. I had a hard time reading this and still don't understand it. For example I have no idea what this means:

he was banished from his native city by his parents, because Villagers had enough to rip fair or fly so they forced her parents to banish him for ever.

All I got from this was he was banished. I don't know why or how, I just know he was banished.

So this champion concept isn't that complete, which is fine, but doesn't help me understand your champions as much. I don't understand how a Shurumian desert exile can create holigrams, that sounds more like Piltover or Zaun. His kit doesn't really work together and I don't see what role he is. Is he a marksmen? Is he a tank? A mage? A assassin?

His lore isn't that unique or interesting, but its not bad.

His abilities dont work together, and their a bit clunky but also unique. They don't synergize much, if at all. I suggest you give this guy a more complete theme, such as Azir is the Emperor of Shurima, and Jhin is a murder-artist-psychopath. I highly suggest you go over this as I can't give you much of a review without understanding it fully. Im not that certain I fully understand his kit, as the sentences are run-ons, not explained that well, and a bit mixed up. Overall this concept wasn't bad, and alot of champion concepts are trash on these boards (Unlike this one).