Elictra (the dreamer)

Just need opinion and fix my English if there anything wrong it's just made for testing :

character name :Elictra .

character age : mutual woman .

special charatristic s: red Ruby eyes long red hair small nose tall body big rack and always sharp with a seductive face she likes to sleep much and enjoys battle .

clothing: wears a tight leather vest colored in red and black with only one leg and back exposed with long boots.

weapon: a black double edged scythe big enough to set on her back with 4 sharp edges on the inside. .

Famous words:"I'll show u heaven" "let's play" "bad children should be punished " "iam your queen" "ahahahahahahaha (Crazy laughing)" " from the living to hell".

story: standing guard at the noxus gate noxtorra can be expected for a normal guard like Elictra. trying to remember something .......... one day an assignment was given to her ......... did u get the bread my child ?( says a male sound with soft voice) yes father (replies) then go hide under ground and use the item to run away take care of your self child......... (in the dark small place she was in hearing the sounds of scream and pain with the blades clashing ) she comes out shouting (faaaather!!!!nooo) (after few days) (running ) soldier : get her don't leave anyone or anything alive !!!!! Elictra: what should I do I can't escape!? (the only way is to jump in the river ) ( she threw the item on the other side and jumped into the river) soldier : where did she go report!! soldier assistant​: her tracks ends in the river sir!! should we track the end of it?! soldier: go now what are u waiting for !!! soldier assistant​: yes sir !!

( a moment later ) Elictra: iam alive !! it's true he didn't lie to me!!!!. then why didn't he used it to save us both ?! ( continues her way frustrated) saying thanks

(5 years later )

villager:bandits! (falls down) (a sound of light feet comes by ) says with soft sound: which way? villager: that way(fades away) (after walking for a moment)

bandit leader: get out of our way or die !!!! says :die!I don't think so "let's play" (throws a gaint scythe at him) bandit leader: hah u missed !!!hahahahaha now die !!! bandit : boss !!!!! watch out behind u !! ( she switch places and with the scythe and chops the guy in 2 pieces ) says : now now did I miss ?! bandit leader: ehhhh.....ehhaaaa. bandits: run away she's a demon !!!!!! bandit 2: run for ur lives!!!!! says:"no one is going​ anywhere I'll show u heaven" ( after a split second ) bandits:uhhhhhhh.......... says: that was amusing (noxus leader is observing somewhere near) leader: now it's confirmed!! (in a moment after in reality) Elictra!! Elictra!!!! Elictraaaaa!! says : yes sir !!!? Captain:are u day dreaming again ur soummend !!!now get going!!!. (end of story).

lore :not remembering anything​ about her blurry past she set off to find the truth. she never met her parents nor loved anyone​ until one of her friends pulled her by the hair to join the league . now she enjoys sleeping anywhere away from her captin and knows the best spots to do it. she was told that her memory was taken away for her own good . and after she's done she gose to her favorite place. "the bed" "let's play"