New streamer looking for some feedback! Trolls welcome :^3

Hey guys, being a streamer is my goal and i'm looking to improve myself in any way possible. I wanted to come to you guys, the community that i am proud to be a part of to hopefully get some feedback on my stream. So what i am going to do is leave a link to one of my recent vods, and if anybody would be kind enough to watch a little bit of it and tell me if it put them to sleep or not i would really appreciate it :3 Commentary started late because i had my microphone muted (kappa) Thanks a lot for any feedback, it means the world to me!