Looking for some opinions on this Champion Concept lore
I'm trying to rewrite this Champion's lore to tie in more to her kit (she has 2 taunt effects), as some people have complained that her lore and kit don't mix.
The concept in question is here: http://community.na.leagueoflegends.com/c/fancreations/WxF0TLFa-champion-concept-nephry-the-dark-crusader
"One must be wary of their own sins, lest they become as vile as the ones they fight." - Nephry
Few Demacian heroes have as tragic a history as Nephry. Cursed to bear an ancient black sword, and feared by the people who once called her a hero, the knight holds an uneasy vigil over the people of Demacia, fighting as best she can for justice with the dark power she is condemned to wield, whilst simultaneously fighting the very power that threatens to corrupt her.
Nephry's endeavors began when she was sent to reinforce an ancient temple in Demacia under siege by Noxian forces. The Noxians sought an ancient Darkin blade sealed away within the temple named Ebonmere, a cursed weapon forged of hatred and rage. Her forces were hopelessly outmatched against the Noxians and, in desperation, Nephry took hold of the very weapon she was charged to protect, hoping to use its dark power to save her comrades. Upon breaking the seal, Nephry cried out as the sword's curse took hold of her, turning her white armor ebony and her blue eyes a deep crimson. Seconds later, she found herself in the middle of a horde of dead Noxians, covered in their blood. She had singlehandedly won the battle, but could not remember a moment of it.
Despite warnings from her comrades of the sword's curse, she could not compel herself to abandon the blade, and opted to keep the Ebonmere and use it to further Demacia's cause. In battle after battle, Nephry led her forces to numerous victories against Noxians and bandits, each battle ending with her regaining consciousness amid a pile of fallen foes. Yet with each victory, her men grew more and more fearful of her, her bloodlust unnerving even the most experienced soldiers. What was more unnerving was that none of her foes, ever surrendered to her, no matter how hopelessly outmatched, as though they too shared her bloodlust. Though she claimed to be hunting down the enemies of justice, many feared that she was becoming as vile as the ones she hunted, sparing no foe regardless of the weight of their crimes.
On one day, Nephry was met by Prince Jarvan IV, who wished to congratulate her on her successes. As the prince approached her, Nephry lashed out at the prince, the Ebonmere drawn as she claimed he was to be judged and punished for his crimes. The prince, accompanied by Garen Crownguard, squared off against Nephry in battle. Onlookers watched in horror as Nephry's darkness seemed to ebb into the prince and his comrade, driving them to seek her blood as she sought theirs. Eventually, the fight dragged to a standstill. But just as Nephry was about to renew her assault, she suddenly stopped her rampage, regaining her senses and seemingly freeing her opponents of their own bloodlust. Believing that the Ebonmere's curse had corrupted her and that it threatened all of Demacia, Jarvan sought to destroy the blade. Yet Nephry protested, claiming she could control the weapon, and herself, if the prince would give her the chance. Jarvan accepted, but demanded that Nephry seek the aid of the Summoners, and warned that she would not be spared if the curse took a full hold of her. Nephry departed for the Institute of War that day, seeking to conquer her demons before they conquered her.
It's long, yeah, but Nephry's got quite a story to tell. Ask any questions if you need clarification.