Would Like Some Feedback on This! (RP Giveaway)

*If i can get 30 comments giving me feedback (will probably get none) i will do two 10$ Rp card giveaways to the commentors for taking their time to check it out for me

Hey guys, so im completely new to forums but i am not new to online forums in general so i understand if i post in the wrong section im going to ger flamed so PLEASE if i posted in the wrong one let me know,bi just fogured this is the best one because memes are comedic and i need some feedback on a sort of comedic video.

I am starting with youtube , I am 16 years old and i am saving to build my own gaming pc currently for actual gameplay videos, but for now this is what i've got and i was wondering if anyone would be willing to take a quick 5 minutes to check this out and leave feedback for me. I spent a solid 7 hours editing this up non stop and am pretty proud of it myself, but let me know what you all think , meaning what i can improve on and what specifically you enjoyed or disliked. Please dont go out of your way to post rude comments im just trying to gain from this experience whether its good or constructive feedback .