Zaun Fanfic - Starring Ekko and Keeva
Keeva the Returned
Please read and tell me your opinion, I've worked on this for 3 years now and I set up a patreon to start it back up. Reading it would mean the world to me.[sg-soraka]
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I read it. It needs more love.
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Take it easier on Keeva. She can’t seem to go two issues without getting stabbed, slashed, burned, or traumatized. Give her some time to deal with each problem.
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Give her a real outfit. A plain white crop top and brown capris are easy to draw but have no detail or interesting features. Give them some Zaunite patterns, add some gear, and maybe give her a pair of shoes?
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Give her some redeeming qualities. Kindness? Humor? Insight? Grit? Knowledge? Something for the reader to like. Every scene she’s in, I groan because there’s nothing to enjoy about her presence.
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Introduce more characters. Bring in some friends of hers or Ekko’s. It’s just the two of them all the time. Where are her own scenes?