Hey friendos. I'm doing some recording for Librivox! Looking for opinions!

Title. I'm starting to do some recording for Librivox with royalty-free doman books and stories as a way to help me stay focused on wanting to become a VO (as well as improve my talent along the way). With that said, I have a file here that I'd like your opinions on. It's a 7 minute .wav file for the exposition of a short old-time spoopy story.

https://www.dropbox.com/s/d4822igjjhiaps2/FrankHampden1.wav?dl=0