Episode 1: Chasing Shadows (Pilot)

a4gPMwM96q·8/28/2015, 6:10:02 AM·1 votes·1,562 views

Pat pat pat pat.

The sound of footsteps echoed behind him.

Pat pat pat pat.

Their feet making contact with the wet ground as the rain fell. Did they know he heard them? Do they realize who he is? Obviously not. These are just more bodies to add to the piles.

Pat pat pat pat.

It would be so easy. All he had to do was turn around...

Pat pat pat pat slosh, pat pat pat.

Maybe he could... They're practically begging for it.

"Stop running and surrender!" One shouted at him. Yes. His mind was made up. In one fluid motion, he spun around to face his pursuers, procuring the blades from his sleeves.

They did this. This was their fault.

He threw the blades with a wrist flick, 3 stacked upon one another. Using his thumb and forefinger to release them at different times, something he had practiced millions of times. No, not practiced. Practiced insinuates that there was a time when his movements were not deft. Were unprofessional. He is a professional of his craft. The three blades spiraled out in different arcs toward the 4 men he counted.

They must have patrolled these streets hundreds of times. Every night, catching petty thieves or even just mild complaints. Chasing shadows in the dark. These pitiful guards, returning to their families every night, for a good rest. This is what man takes for granted. This is the luxury he will now deprive them of.

Their bland, routine acknowledging expressions quickly turned to one of stunned surprise, and then to one of realization. The rain continued to fall, even harder, as if competing with the blood draining from the now lifeless guards. They never had a chance. He knew it.

"Noxian guards, always chasing shadows." He muttered to himself, continuing on his way. "To bad they found The Blade's Shadow."

He didn't know why Katarina wanted to meet him at such a ludicrous place. However, she wasnt one who was to be argued with.

3 Comments

a4gPMwM96q8/28/2015, 3:44:33 PM1 votes

Im kind of looking for feedback here. Anyone who wants to say anything, let me know what you think. Is it good? Is it bad? What should I do differently for episode 2? I plan to make them longer in the future, though.

RiotBioluminescence8/28/2015, 4:10:39 PM1 votes

I like it. The rationalization that Talon is going through to permit himself to murder these hapless guards seems a bit odd, however. They seem like they'd be no threat to him whatsoever - so maybe if there were some way that their bumbling actions could mess up his plans, then we might be able to see why he'd do what he's doing. As it reads, it seems like he should have been able to give them the slip easier than falling off a log!

Basically, I know it's just the introduction and scene setter - but I suspect you could make Talon come across as either less caring (less rationalization) or change the guards' actions to be more interfering (faint rationalization).

Keep going, though! In which strange place has Katarina asked him to meet?